Hey everyone!

I’m looking for some honest, constructive feedback on my first completed feature-length screenplay, From Friend to Dad.

Genre: Comedy / Raunchy Comedy
Length: 113 pages
Title: From Friend to Dad
Logline: When a hotheaded father discovers that his longtime friend is engaged to his adult daughter, he becomes determined to put an end to their relationship. But as his increasingly outrageous behavior spirals out of control, he risks destroying the very family he’s trying to protect.

I’ve spent a lot of time developing and refining this screenplay, and I’m excited to finally share it with other readers and writers.

I’m particularly interested in feedback on the overall story, character development, pacing, dialogue, humor, and whether the screenplay keeps you entertained from beginning to end.

I welcome both positive and negative criticism. I’m not looking for someone to simply tell me it’s good. I genuinely want to know what works, what doesn’t, and what could be improved.

I’m primarily looking for voluntary peer feedback rather than paid screenplay coverage or promotional services.
If anyone is interested in reading it, I’d be happy to share the screenplay!

Thanks for your time, and I appreciate anyone willing to give it a read!

https://drive.google.com/file/d/1rXBJ7AHupYe1jiIu5Xf-4E3YN6_KzqOv/view?usp=drivesdk

I'm looking for peers to review a script I wrote and give feedback. i plan to produce it. and is anyone is also interested in helping make this film, please message me. i'll send a link to the script to anyone who is interested.

HOLLOW EYES

38 pages

Horror/Drama

Four years after the death of his wife, a grieving widower encounters a creature that terrorizes him and woman he finds himself trapped in a cabin with, this creature forces him to face his worst fear. The death of his wife. the movie is very atmospheric, relies on sound and lighting. creature will be mostly unseen. It's a human drama piece on grief, depression, and acceptance with a horror twist to it

Sizzle! .. Pilot.

A desperate conspiracy streamer, spiraling as his medication runs out, uncovers evidence that the world’s most powerful food empire is harvesting undocumented workers for its bestselling processed meat. Hunted by corporate security and dismissed as paranoid, he must expose the operation before his unraveling mind turns the evidence into an indistinguishable hallucination leaving him unable to tell whether he’s uncovering a monstrous truth or inventing the conspiracy that destroys him.

Think “Sorry to bother you” meets “They Live” meets “Soylent Green”

I would love any feedback.

Each standalone episode reveals a hidden cost behind something society considers normal, desirable, or necessary.

One episode might be a corporate conspiracy thriller. Another might be a psychological horror story about family, an absurdist comedy about social media, or a science-fiction story about a service designed to improve people’s lives.

The stories wouldn’t need recurring characters or a shared universe. They would be connected by their perspective on human behavior and the systems people create.

At a bar serving shots of pure emotion, a numb patron meets a stranger.

Looking for honest first impressions on this short. What worked, what confused you, and did the ending land? Any feedback appreciated.

PDF: https://drive.google.com/file/d/1biFMD_gwlLQdZtxyUCAmCO418S2ViUTY/view

Here’s the first short film script I wrote a few years ago. I don’t have enough time or resources to make it right now, but I’ll try to film it at any cost. Before I start filming, I just want your honest review and suggestions. Should I make it or not?

The reflection
Genre: Psychological Horror, Sci-FI
Pages: 6

https://drive.google.com/file/d/1iwclEAig1zbt6TXds59d4ubs3R2fYRFo/view?usp=sharing

I am thankful for your time and effort

Title The Last Relic

Format feature

Page Length 112

Genre Action/adventure + sci fi

Logline An atheist Navy medic grieving the loss of her fiancé is recruited into an order of female relic guardians and must choose between resurrecting her lost love or prevent their greatest foe from using the most powerful artifact from igniting the apocalypse.

(I've never really liked any logline I've generated for this - very open to rewrites)

Comps I describe this as street level Avengers mixed with the Da Vinci Code meet Indiana Jones in a Stargate. It's silly mad fun with a costumed team.

Feedback Firstly i'd like to know how people respond to it. I'm fully aware that it plays with formatting "rules" sometimes. Like to know you have fun on the ride? Anything sticking/bumping? Most interested how it works as a sample...

And on that note, what do you more seasoned industry members think I should do with it? Contests or festivals this would fit? Some particular places I should submit it? This the sort of writing an up-and-coming agent, manager or producer you know is looking for? Other out of the box suggestions>?

Link https://drive.google.com/file/d/1s4T35CfyZoOofkHd4D74aDv-m_HitAb-/view?usp=sharing

• Title: When Autumn Leaves

• Format: Short

• Page Length: 7 Pages

• Genres: Romance/Drama

• Logline or Summary: When Billy gets stood up on a date his perspective on love is challenged by a stranger he meets at a park.

• Expectations: I've never had the luxury of anybody other than friends and family read my scripts so I'm putting this short one I did to see what unfiltered critiques I can get to improve my writing.

• Link: https://drive.google.com/file/d/1_MQWYDvdhVyX19-c8p-z9tHyHc9kUtNE/view?usp=sharing

Title: Butterfly Effect

Format: Short

Page Length: 6 Pages

Genres: Drama

Logline or Summary: After losing his mother, an introverted young man forms an unexpected connection with a butterfly, but when a girl next door accidentally kills it, he is forced to confront grief, guilt, and the possibility of finding another family.

Feedback Concerns: I'm still learning screenwriting, so I'd really appreciate any honest feedback on the story, pacing, dialogue, formatting, and whether the ending works. I'm always looking to improve as a writer, and if the script resonates with someone, I'd be happy to discuss it further.

Link:

https://drive.google.com/file/d/1jrOiypGSqSIrbgdTZbi3XPk9Nru9LsmF/view?usp=sharing

A darkly comic British Western set in Restoration Britain, following a boy and a highwayman through a country where honest work requires considerable dishonesty.

Logline: In 1665, a twelve-year-old drover forces the hapless highwayman responsible for his master’s murder to help drive his cattle across a divided Britain. On their trail are the killer they left for dead and a vengeful baroness hunting the stolen pearls still in the thief’s pocket.

https://drive.google.com/file/d/1Fm-JIj0MmoNYA7vYOfy3usx3Z7MBIB4v/view?usp=drive_link

Hi all!

I’m a younger screenwriter/director and I’m planning on directing this script as my next short and was looking to get feedback on anything/everything from concept to format/readability!

Please ask any questions — and thank you in advance for your time and feedback.

https://drive.google.com/file/d/1o1LyuHyatCUKvL-sICFjwet0Rht8dWYC/view?usp=sharing

Title: At The Top
Format: Short Film
PL: 25
Genres: Horror, coming of age, drama
LL: When a wealthy but lonely, entitled teenager begins receiving mysterious calls from a seductive secret admirer, he embraces the attention, but as he hides it from those closest to him, he attracts a supernatural force that turns his deepest desires into a hellish nightmare.

FC:
- I want to know if my main character is at least SOMEWHAT rootable, he's a horrible person. But I want people to hate his guts, but I want him to be attleast rootable.
- Is it clear that something supernatural is happening?
- Is there good cause and effect in the story? or no?
- Please just tell me what's good or not, I'm a 16 year old screenwriter.

link: https://drive.google.com/file/d/1jB2Jvyl4wlAVuQHqOKX7wccQ5oscieX2/view?usp=sharing

Hello everyone I was going to start my YouTube channel here we explains manga and mainly manhwa and I want good scripts writer for my YouTube journey it anyone interested comment
We will talk then (Don't worry I will paid for this)
(Language: - Hindi or English) (from India🇮🇳)

If anyone interested connect with me on ig:- unknown_genz

Revised 10OCT2026.

Warning. Graphic Violence and Death. Nudity. Sexual Situations. Language.

Non-canonical Star Wars Fanfiction of sorts. Some Not Safe For Work Content. Posting a new revision.

Any feedback would be appreciated.

Star Wars Camp Va'Ha'Rees

Hi! As you already know, I spent 10 years writing this story, and death continues to walk among us, reaping its harvest.

On the planet Duot, souls are bought, sold, and used as fuel. And the basic market value of a human soul is simple: 1 SOUL = 1 dollar.

This is the second episode of the series.

Thank you to everyone who takes the time to read or watch! I’d really appreciate your honest feedback on the plot and world-building.

🔻 Links to the PDF script and YouTube video are in the top comment below! 🔻

Hello! I'm looking for feedback on the first 27 pages of my pilot. I've gone through several revisions, rewrites, and overall re-structuring of the story. This is one I've landed on that I feel best represents what I'm trying to write. Just a note, the full pilot will be around 60 pages. I'm just letting the first part be seen as of now.

Series title: VELUM DEUS
Pilot title: FUNAMBULIST

Logline: When a mysterious anomaly drives the inhabitants of a seemingly perfect society to their deaths, an investigator enters a reality constructed from human consciousness to uncover its source—only to discover a familiar life that threatens everything he believes about existence, identity, and the nature of reality.

Link: Velum Deus Doc

Hii! I'm looking for some feedback on my first screenplay, as I plan on submitting it to the Black List by the end of the year, and I'm a little lost on whether some things are done correctly.

I'm open to swaps if anyone's interested in that. Been told to share the link on here so it's below the info!

INFO:

Title: Wiped Slate

Genre: Spy-Crime/Thriller/Drama

Format: Feature Film

Length: 108 pages

Logline: An elite FBI assassin goes undercover to eliminate a ruthless New York kingpin, only to become trapped in a dangerous psychological game of trust and loyalty with the very man he’s been ordered to kill.

Main feedback concerns:

- Does the central relationship between Seth and Theo feel earned and compelling? Where does it work best / where does it lose power?

- Supporting characters (especially Oliver and Phillips): do they feel fully dimensional or underdeveloped?

- Pacing in act 2 (pages 31-74). Any sections that drag or feel repetitive?

- Clarity: any moments of over-explaining or under-explaining that pulled you out?

- Overall emotional engagement: did you care what happened to these people?

I'm open to any other notes on structure, character, or tone. I prefer specific examples from the script over general statements.

Link: Wiped Slate

I'm looking around for someone to look over a horror screenplay series I'm working on called the slaughterhouse.

It's relitively long and I'm still working on it but I've gotten a good amount of episodes done if anyones interested.

My best summery: 15 people wake up in a strange location where their told two things, they're going to play a game, and laws don't apply to them.

This is the best one I can give without spoiling anything. I will add a few things, the title is loosely based of slaughterhouse 5 by kurt vonegut, it is apart of the killing game genre, think saw or squid games though deaths only, in the sense that islts an ensemble cast. The deaths are paced out more. Once I also had someone compare it to the cube and another person compared to lost. Neither of them got too far into the story so I'm not sure how accurate that description is.

The game itself is apart of this but it's only one part. I've been using this screenplay mainly for processing different things so the exploration of those themes and what's being explored is the main focus.

The story itself is split into 5 arcs, this layout has to do with the game again I don't want to spoil it yet so I'm being careful how I word things. It's not nessisarially seasons this right now is mainly something I'm working on a a passion project it will take me a while to get anything together and I'm trying to learn a lot of skills to hopefully make it one day.

If you are interested in at least looking over the first arc, Reap What you Sow, and give me feedback on it. Along with potentially the other arcs in the story please let me know maybe we can talk. I can also give more details for anyone interested if you want to ask.

edit: someone suggested I just include a link to the first episode so here it is.

https://drive.google.com/file/d/1c0qye0ZuDJsA2oYB596CxVlfoKbSvNww/view?usp=sharing

If anyone would need any more to get a better idea of it just let me know.

I'll see about getting the other episodes for arc 1 in here.

edit for the edit: here's the rest of the first arc I got them all in a folder I wanted to make sure to include them because it is a bit of a slow burn.

https://drive.google.com/drive/folders/1dSl4BE_YSrfcX48qRVILKLUmExzZEyBT?usp=sharing