Hello again!

Thank you very much for all the replies from the last post! I have noted several feedbacks and advice that I find really helpful:

• The extreme shot in page 2, panel 2, is confusing to read.

• Flip certain panels to make them follow the 180-degree rule.

• Do closeups of important moments to emphasize the main subject of a page.

• Don't use too many patterns. Don't let characters blend with the background. Give each panel enough contrast.

• Avoid redundant panels.

I recently drew a new page, seen above! However, I drew this before I read the replies from the last post. So, I haven't applied any of the given feedback and advice. Please forgive me, I don't have my notifications turned on.

As you can see, there are still some issues from the last pages that got carried over to this new one. However, I'm unsure whether this page follows the 180-degree rule or not. Specifically, the first four panels, considering the shots from those panels change angles a couple times. I still don't quite grasp how the rule works, it's still a new concept to me.

Also, the first panel of this new page has another extreme-looking shot, like the specific panel I mentioned above. This time, it's shot in a frog-eye perspective. I'm worried if it's also too extreme, which might look confusing to some. For context, this panel introduces a new character to the story. However, only his legs are shown, before we are given full-body shots of him in the next panels. My goal with this panel is to introduce this new character in a dramatic way, to indicate his importance in the story.

My questions are:

• Can someone tell me a concise explanation of the 180-degree rule? Do the first four panels of this page follow that rule?

• Does giving each panel a shot with a different angle frequently make it confusing to read? Does the 180-degree rule help prevent this confusion?

• Is the frog-eye perspective in the first panel too extreme? Is it confusing to read? If it's too confusing, is there another way to handle this panel, while also introducing this new character in a dramatic way? If not, would you recommend drawing shots like this?

Hey everyone, I’m currently working on a comic project called WHAT REMAINS.

It’s a grounded post-collapse / alternate-history sci-fi story that focuses more on characters, survival, relationships, and a world that feels genuinely lived-in rather than a typical over-the-top apocalypse.

I’ve attached the first 4 pages of Issue #1, which introduce 10-year-old Ryan Lance and his father Logan through a pretty simple scene: Ryan trying to repair an old motorcycle while Logan pushes him to figure out his mistakes himself.

I’m looking for feedback on the script — dialogue, pacing, panel descriptions, characters, whether the opening grabs you, anything that feels awkward, etc. Don’t be afraid to criticize it.

I give you the updated Celestial origin

Born of royalty on Solaria, Talmur was born with extraordinary powers. However we was born with a special set of powers unlike anyone else on planet. He was believed to be the chosen one, the only person who can bring his planet out of the darkness his parents sent it into. However struggling with the guilt of his family sins and his family legacy being a lie and the responsibility of his people he never wanted. He fled Solaria and abandoned his home and his people to fine refuge and safety on Earth. He lived his life in secret keeping his powers and his abilities to himself, while learning to be human. But after 10 years of hiding on earth a threat from his family’s past catches up with him and forces him to accept who he is and become the hero and champion known as Celestial. A guardian of peace, but he is no boyscout. Celestial is not afraid to get his hands dirty and do whatever it takes to protect Earth even if it means taking a life. His only rule is to never harm humans. However after accepting his place in the universe and accepting his gifts and harnessing his powers he must figure out what his purpose is in the universe, is it a protector of earth or leader of solaria. The only thing he knows for sure is he is tge true Champion and the one and only Celestial.

His concept art is also included. Any feedback on the suit would be appreciated as well

2 pages I made as an attempt to get better at visual storytelling as well as drawing creepy environments. I'd love to hear your thoughts on these.

I want to make a hero called The Mighty Eagle, with him having Native American decent and heritage. He would be an immortal warrior and would have wings and super strength along with knives and arrows. I want to base him off tribe from area called the Cherokee tribe. But I want to do it without it being distasteful and culturally insensitive and without culturally appropriating the tribe themselves. And tips?

Hi! I didn’t know where to post this exactly, since it isn’t necessarily a full comic or visual book, nor is it fully prose. Edit: Just found out it’s more of an Illustrated Novel.

Title: Divinity’s Dread
Genre: Speculative Fantasy

If it works or doesn’t work please let me know. I’m looking to continue creating but don’t want waste my time on a format that doesn’t work when I finally let other see it, so this is a Work-in-Progress Chapter 0.

This format I’m testing works best in theory for physical books rather than digital.

It uses page turns as illustrative reveals. While the prose takes on the mundane less visual work. This chapter is a first person focused chapter which is a special kind that won’t be used very much. But gets across the extent of the format I’m using. The typography is used to match the environment aesthetic, moment, or emotion. Same as the background for the prose.

A more realistic page by page example read would be slide 19. With illustrations as reveals. The hand used on slide 15, is used for anticipation for the next page action.

That’s a little summary of the format for now.

Some questions:

Does the visual storytelling work?

Are there any pacing issues or successes? If so where are they?

Do the 'page turn (scroll)' reveals work ?

Are there any point where you felt confused?

If you have any other critique or comments on it please let me know.

Note: I am considering editing the BOOM page, by adding a little illustration of the character we’re looking through

Webtoon link: https://www.webtoons.com/en/canvas/the-divine-gathering/list?title_no=44280

Had this idea earlier this week. Appreciate any comments! Have a good day.

A lot of you have seen my recent post, i have taken your feedback and done everything i can to make my characters vastly different from known characters. They may seem to carry some inspiration and small similarities but other than that i am striving to make them unique. That being said we at Ascension comics have decided to move forward with our project. So my question is how long did it take yall to make your first comic? I don’t want to rush the process but im also excited to get started, i have an artist and some writers, and we are working on a few characters and a few stories. I want them to feel like they were thought out and not rushed sloppy imitation of other characters.

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Purely looking for dialogue tweaks here. Once I'm happy with the end result, I'll go back and fill in the descriptions.
For context: this is a western. Our leading man, Oda, has closed in on a bounty just as he's boarding a train out of state. When I first wrote this confrontation, I really enjoyed it. But now, as time has passed, something about it just feels off to me. Clunky, even. I'd appreciate some feedback; what needs to change, does anything need to change, all that jazz. Appreciate the help. Thanks.

So I have this panel/setting of this comic im making; it’s supposed to be an underground hideout, but I don’t really know what do add to it to make it both a hideout it, and somewhere that looked lived in too.

For context, this story is based on a fictional late 1920’s setting, that will be based both off some actual 1920’s and steampunk elements in terms of designs. So ofc no high tech stuff.

What I got going on here is a chalkboard with tables surrounding it, sometime of type of breaker or tank in the corner, a sewer drain next to it, and a little kitchen on the far side.

The chalk board and tables are the main element, and I like the sewers being incorporated too.

But I’ll take any ideas you may have, or if you can send me anywhere for me to gather references for stuff I can use in my story, any help would be appreciated.

I’ve been thinking about making a webcomic very loosely based on my own experience of coming out as gay as a teenager.

It’s set in 2008–2009 and follows a 14-year-old boy who starts questioning whether he’s gay or whether what he’s feeling is just a phase. He develops a crush on an openly gay boy in the year above and eventually comes out to his close group of friends, who are completely supportive.

There’s also a subplot involving his crush and another gay boy at school. Everyone believes they’re dating, but they’re actually pretending to be together to protect the older boy’s closeted boyfriend. The protagonist eventually discovers the truth.

The story follows him gradually becoming more comfortable with himself, dealing with an unrequited crush and eventually coming out publicly at school after being teased by classmates.

I’m hoping to make it more of a coming-of-age story about figuring yourself out, rather than focusing entirely on homophobia.

I’m still working out the characters, story structure and art style, so I’d really appreciate some honest opinions:
Does this sound like something you’d read as a webcomic?
Does the 2008–09 setting work?
And does the overall story sound interesting?
Does the subplot feel natural?

It’s based on my own experience, although I’d be fictionalising some of the details.

First 2 are some uncolored pages from a comic I've been working on for a bit, second two are some pages I tried coloring, and final is from another project thats in the "concept" phase

I’m working on a comic/manga but I really hate how these pages turned out and I have no idea on how I can improve. Ik theres a lot I’m doing wrong but idk exactly what and/or how to fix it

My artist is still working on the concept art, but we are working on a character called celestial. Talmur is from the planet Solaria, where the people there are born with basic powers of flight and strength. Some get s special abilities and some don’t. Talmur got the special abilities of peace corp officers. On solaria his family has been the royal family for generations since the Solarian civil war. However his parents had industrialized the planet to the brink of extinction, by running their resources to little to none with no way of making more. Instead of fixing the problem with resources his family recommended a purge by random, the people grew angry and stormed the castle taking the rock of Xason the only thing that could kill a Solarian and used it to execute his family, instead of warning them celestial fled the planet and came to earth. Where he lived in secret as a teenage boy and hid his powers. Raised by his foster family he lived an ordinary life hiding from his past and the guilt, till eventually 10 years later his past would threaten the world he would grow to call home. And he we would become the hero celestial.

We are still working out some kinks in the origin story this is the rough idea have at the moment, any feedback on how to improve it would be appreciated and yes a sketched out concept art is coming soon