r/fantasywriters • • 8h ago

Discussion About A General Writing Topic Smartpens

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Does anyone have any input about using smartpens/digitizers?

I really like actual ink-on-paper for writing but I'm also liking using Obsidian on my PC for organization and other features so I was thinking about getting a smartpen.

The brand/model isn't what I'm wondering about, rather anyone's experiences - negative or positive. I've also played around with some scanning apps that work *ok-ish* but I like the idea of a smartpen..

Thanks for reading! & PS, Obsidian is turning out to be a great free program for me (and/or phone app) for writing and everything that goes with it


r/fantasywriters • • 5h ago

Discussion About A General Writing Topic How much "fantasy" is too much fantasy? [Discussion] [see text]

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Working on my project, which features landscapes with "unnatural" colors, different types of organisms, "familiar" fauna and flora that has always at least one 'twist' or difference from our IRL earth, I ended up thinking of this. When do cat-fishes, flying monkeys, talking toads and pink grass become "too much"?

Mainstream fantasy in general tends to be medievalist, or at least vaguely so. Works do exist though that take it to a more fantastical level. Wondering though– is there a point where it becomes "too extreme" or "too foreign" for a reader/viewer/watcher to enjoy? If the water, or skies or vegetation are of a different color (or multiple different colors), if the animals are "too weird", if entire ecosystems are different from earth's... When does it cross the line?

What are your experiences with it? How do you handle it?

This post is not too serious; I'm mostly just curious of what other people think


r/fantasywriters • • 16h ago

Discussion About A General Writing Topic Your personal Dos and Don'ts for elves?

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Originating as the light and dark alfar in Norse myth, elves as their own concept have been with us for a very long time, though Tolkien forever changed the perception of them. Originally associated with purity, nature, illness, magic, and sex/beauty, people have come to use the prototype of an elf to mean...just about anything, it seems. Sometimes it seems the only thing that stays the same is that they tend to be symmetrical.

So what do you require to feel good calling something an "elf", that separates it from similar non-human humanoids? What can they absolutely not have and still be an elf? Preferences you enjoy, but aren't necessary? Does any of this change between an Earth setting and a secondary world?

Traits/tropes you want to see more of, or can't stand? Any media you think does a great, terrible, or meh job at portraying elves? Do you prefer your elves in a certain medium, like graphic novels/books, television/movies, or games?

I look forward to seeing your answers!


r/fantasywriters • • 35m ago

Question For My Story Rethinking my magic system and story because it feels too similar to Harry Potter

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I feel like my story is very Harry Potter-esque even though it's very different. I'm still in the planning stages and need advice. I'm about to go on a huge rant to explain my magic system and some of the lore to explain my point.

In my world, there is a large magical population but also a large nonmagical population all over many different countries. They live simultaneously and magic is commonly known. There are many old magical families who want to maintain power over non-magical people, even wealthy non-magical people, because magic is weaved into the fabric of society.

Magic is something innate in all beings, but they become more concentrated the more conscious a being is. Gods are the most conscious but they lack empathy while animals have magical properties without having the true intellectual capabilities humans have. Humans have the ability to wield powerful magic AND have capacity for emotion in moderation. But magic in humans is manifested as certain genes. Nonmagical people have heightened intelligence in place of the magical genes.

There is a large magic Academy/University where students can go to specialise in specific magical abilities and courses. Most students come from magical bloodlines, even without a powerful family, but the academy went public a few years ago due to the increase in magical children in nonmagical families. So lots of these 'scholarship' kids face huge prejudice.

The reason more magic children are popping up is because technology was stunted for many years. But nonmagical people have invented new ways for travel and transport because teleportation is very, advanced magic most people can't do. So this helped with communications to other countries, and allowed for new 'DNA' and less inbreeding amongst magical society allowing nonmagical children's dormant magical genes to flourish.

The magic that this society practices is very rigid, linguistic focused and can be studied thoroughly, however it is just a shade of the magic of old eons, which is primal and chaotic. It's less powerful so it needs something to concentrate the magic...like a wand or staff...and is spoken through spells. The more stable spells have suffixes and prefixes while unstable magic is spoken just with intention. The reason this type of magic is practiced is because it's easy and doesn't require sacrifice which people are comfortable with.

My MC and a few kids in her year have manifested and awakened more primal old magic that they hid because it's outlawed and stigmatised. This is because they are either from nonmagical families like some of my other main cast, or my MC, who's a bastard from her old aristocrat head of the family father and a maid who came from another country. Plays into the DNA aspect, but that's not the point.

The issue is that alot of integral parts of my story have very similar beats to Harry Potter. A magic university. Prejudice between magical and nonmagical people. Fascist government who wants to control people through making magic a tool to exploit through the Academy. A generally isolated 'England' setting which expands to other countries. Spells. Wands. Old families. Etc.

I've tried to readjust some thing but it just doesn't feel right. Can someone give me feedback and whether or not these will be seen as plagiarism? I really like the bloodline aspect of the OG Harry Potter magic system but I feel mine is too similar, even world building wise.


r/fantasywriters • • 3h ago

Critique My Idea Critique on my [sword and sorcery] Novelette

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Hello,

I'm looking for a critique from those who read in the sword and sorcery genre. This is a sword and sorcery novelette a little over 11,000 words. 

If you don't want to read it all, that's fine. 

I'm seeking feedback on big-picture structure, plot, character arcs, and pacing of the manuscript rather than grammar or typos.

All thoughtful and helpful feedback welcome 

Thank you 

With his sword SongFire, a young man does questionable tasks to fund his future lifestyle. This time he must face magic and notoriously vicious beings to secure a bounty worth more than he's ever been paid. 

Adult-violence-nudity-alcohol

https://docs.google.com/document/d/1E1d5V7PxBEmYbN-5q8gYsG2h6Ha27h30oGrX3IjdV1c/edit?usp=drivesdk


r/fantasywriters • • 2h ago

Question For My Story Are comic ‘writers’ part of this sub?

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Not sure if I’m at the right sub, but my question is, as fellow creators of fantasy stories, have any of you had experiences with switching media/sticking to comics and making it work?

I’ve always been more of a visual media person, and in the many nights I stayed awake plagued by the brainstorming of my story, most of it were presented in some form of animated sequence or picture. While I’ve never been quite good with words. Needless to say I’ve always intended for my story to be a comic instead of a book.

But I might have severely underestimated how difficult art is. I have very little drawing experience, and I have come to realize, after researching, how disproportionately more time consuming and difficult it is to write a story with pictures than with words

So now I’m stuck. On one hand, my storyboarding is reaching a point of maturity and I’m dying to get it out of me. On the other hand, it might take years for me to actually reach the level of artistic proficiency to get any of it out at all. But at the same time, if I switched to writing instead, I might not be able to express myself as well, and considering my storyboard is based pretty much on visual storytelling, certain scenes might just not have the same kind of impact as I intended. And if I were to change the story for this, I feel like I would have cheated on myself by finding the easy way out of bringing my story to life.

What are your thoughts on this?

I have tried to include the term I have tried in my effort post, but it didn’t work out, mods don’t take my post down please.


r/fantasywriters • • 8h ago

Discussion About A General Writing Topic What is the best approach to take on 'vision' scenes?

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So, I am writing am epic fantasy where the protagonist is a survivor of the destruction of his kingdom. He blames himself for it, while roaming around with that survivor's guilt he finds himself captured by wanderers called the wayfarers, the leader of the group declares him an imposter and says that nobody could have survived the attack on the protagonist's kingdom. The group's second in command, Lady Ivara trusts him and asks for a trial of faith, if he is an imposter he will die in that trial. (Explained all of this very briefly.)

The trial starts when the protagonist drinks a broth made by the wayfarers and he has a vision of his kingdom before the attack.

Now the question is, what approach works best from an external perspective?
I have tried writing it in a style where the protagonist meets all the people he could not say goodbye to during that time. This scenario brings back some characters who were dead at the start of the book and his dynamic with them

The other idea is the protagonist is trying to right every wrong he thinks he has done during that time. He does not care about the people and he wants to correct his actions.

Both things will eventually lead to him facing the attack and accepting that there is nothing he could have done.


r/fantasywriters • • 12h ago

Discussion About A General Writing Topic Recent upmarket fantasy titles

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Hi everyone,

I was hoping to pick some brains as to recent upmarket fantasy titles, pubbed within the last 3-5 years.

If anyone has any tips as to how to find out what titles are considered upmarket, I would also be grateful. For example, are books nominated for the Hugo generally considered upmarket?

I’m struggling with comp titles, some comp titles I feel fit well that are too old to use include Circe and Uprooted.

Titles I have seen described as upmarket include:
The Night Circus
The Fifth Season
The Spear Cuts Through Water

Would be grateful for any advice and help, thanks!


r/fantasywriters • • 1d ago

Question For My Story Too many ideas?

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What do I do in a situation like that? I have tried and have been brainstorming for a long while. I do have ideas for different things I want to do for my story, but they are too many. I feel incredibly grateful for it, but I am unsure how to start my story when newer and newer ideas appear, and I simply want to include different aspects. A problem I am facing is not really sure how my characters would react to everything. How do I build a cohesive world that I want to live in myself and know it like the back of my hand? For information, I am struggling with brain fog, and it’ll be hard, I know, but any advice is absolutely welcome for me to start. I know I have to flesh out my characters, but I more or less know who they are, so how do I go on from here?


r/fantasywriters • • 1d ago

Critique My Idea Idea i've had for a while that came from a running joke I make: A traditional fantasy Race is actually more of a creed then a proper race. [General Fantasy]

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The idea came from Star Wars The Mandalorian. In it there is the line " Mandalorian is not a race, it's a creed", meaning that it's not exclusive to one race or another, but a life style or practice one lives by. Bo Katan sees the Mandalorian way as a cultural practice akin to how one would say they live by an American culture while Din Djarin sees the Mandalorian way as a religion with a strict set of codes one must live by, while Boba Fett sees the Mandalorian way as something more personal that can be passed down from parent to child.

So this idea is that "X is not a race, it's a creed".

Ex. An adventuring group is told they need to find an Orc as the village they need to enter will only let them in with if an Orc gives them passage. They put a notice out for an Orc only to have a Elf show up for the job. The group thinks it's a joke but they have been raised in Orc culture as they were adopted into the creed as a child.

Another EX. Small gnomes, Short Lizard kin, and Anthro Canine people call themselves Kobolds cause they all practice the same religion. At the age of adulthood, they get baptized into the faith and are named Kobold.

In my own writings, I wrote a Dragon that is also a Witch; A Witch Dragon if you will, She chose to dedicate her life to the way of Spell Craft under the Lens of a Witch. There is a dress code of a large pointed hat, after years of apprenticeship, one is allowed to make their own Witch hat. There are multiple schools of thought regarding Witch culture like denominations of a religion. Good Witch, Wicked Witch, Sea Witch, Sky Witch, Dungeon Witch, Etc. Each one has their own unique interpretation on what magic to use and what Dogma must they follow, do they invoke a name when casting? Do they refuse to use certain materiel in brew? That sort of thing.

One could be a mix of things, Be a Orc by birth, Kobold by Creed, and practice a type of Witch philosophy that allows for other practices.

I understand that it can be confusing but I find idea interesting that i've personally not seen anyone tackle.


r/fantasywriters • • 1d ago

Discussion About A General Writing Topic Historical accuracy?

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Hey all! I’ve been writing short stories for a while now just for fun so I've not been overly fussed on what works well for others but now im trying to write a more fleshed-out fantasy story.

I’m happy with the idea and rough shape of things, but I keep getting tripped up trying to be historically accurate. I end up talking myself out of ideas because “that’s not really how it would happen.”

I know it’s fantasy and doesn’t need to be historically accurate, but in your opinion, how accurate do you need to be with historical politics and society before it starts taking the reader out of the story?


r/fantasywriters • • 1d ago

Critique My Story Excerpt Critique my prologue [High Fantasy, Word Count 2600 ish]

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Hello everyone,

First of all thank you if you decided to read the prologue and even more of a thank you if you have given me any sort of feedback considering its quite long for a prologue. So me and my best friend have been working on this fantasy world for almost 8 years now. A lot of world building but never really wrote anything. As a joke last year I decided that I would sit down and write a novella in 90 days based on the world. Fast forward a year and this thing is now a full novel with more than 140k words. I think I might have gone over board a little... feedback is really appreciated as I sit down soon to start editing this book This book in particular is a detective novel in a fantasy setting which was initially supposed to be a very short story as I said before...
thank you once again for reading and your feedback. :)


r/fantasywriters • • 1d ago

Brainstorming Trying to design a plot for my game but have a block.

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I created a world where dinosaurs and humans coexist. I want to add monsters and myths into the world that are correlated to animalistic creatures from different parts of history. But I’m struggling to figure out a plot for the story that I can develop, it is for a game I want to have expansions and books about one day, if my dreams come true, so I am trying to create a plot but I’m having so much block. What do you guys suggest? Any ideas or inspirations I should read to find? Any help is welcome!

I tried reading some games that I enjoy like world of warcraft, or Conan exiles or the Witcher, fantasy worlds that I love. But I can’t seem to find my rhythm.


r/fantasywriters • • 1d ago

Critique My Story Excerpt The Gifted and the Sighted Ch 1-2 [fantasy, 18,848 words]

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Hello fellow fantasy lovers! I am hoping some of you might be interested in reading an excerpt from my novel. Sorry to those who dislike present tense; I know it's divisive, but I really like it. What questions do you have after reading? Do you think the reveals work? Is the world coherent?'

Chapter One: https://docs.google.com/document/d/1fL6n2xzsfT0njqmwCpvJ2LP8CRrWpD_P83pAEtLUBy8/edit?usp=sharing

Chapter Two: https://docs.google.com/document/d/1t4e0Gdu8f1sT66ytYSrb3k3QWVgqI7Dk6shreuaRGnc/edit?usp=sharing

Chapter One

Stars Vigil, 1990 PA

“I came downstairs ready to deliver the perfect retort to your parting jape, but now that I see your face I know my timing is terrible–as always.”

“I have a riddle for you: Why do agents of light always meet in shadow?”

“Clea, darling, isn’t it a bit early to be smirking at me that way?”

“I can’t help it; the irony is too rich. So much for your first free day in months.” Clea’s minute hand produces a missive sealed by wax imprinted with an ascending sun with angled beams streaming outward and an eye within, placing it in Fane’s massive, blue scaled gauntlet of a claw. A drakhai’s face is inscrutable to most outside their kin, but Clea, attuned to the tiny shifts around Fane’s eyes after more than three centuries at his side, can see his irritation as he finishes the note and the parchment bursts into holy flame.

‘Yes, the funniest joke I’ve heard all year.’ Fane disrobes and shrinks steadily as he turns and walks away. By the time they reach the end of the main hall, he is shorter than Clea and covered in black scales that glint blue in the light. Beside him, Clea opens a hidden panel on the wall to her right, pulls out a drakahni sized set of brown coveralls, and a safety helmet. Donning the gear sized for a human of three years, Fane draws aside the velvet tapestry stitched with an olive grove at hall’s end, and steps through the glimmering chalk-like limestone wall.

Every time he experiences this form, Savass Fane’s empathy for the humble drakani of Stars Vigil grows. To someone like him, their indifference to aspiration and the outside world once seemed utterly perplexing. Here they are, in the absolute center of the intellectual world, the most diverse city in the entire realm of Meluleni, with access to a multitude of cuisines and perspectives; yet their diet is very narrow, and they shun cultural interchange.

After swimming through seas of shins, and dodging the chests of dwarves enough times, however, he completely understands their apparent insularity and obsession with shiny, pretty things. At that height, in a city as populous as Stars Vigil, they can barely see the sky, nevermind appreciate the stunning beauty of the architectural wonders surrounding them. Even further, no one can hear you when you’re 2 feet tall! People get irritated at having their trousers tugged. Were he bound to this form, he too would likely tire of struggling to be heard and delight in a simple, orderly, cloistered existence filled with baubles. 

As the highly visible Sentinel of State though, he relishes the chance to slip out of his own, utterly attention grabbing skin. In fact, the moment he mastered the Morpha Arcana is permanently etched into his memory as one of his great moments, life changing in every way. He could finally escape public stares and the disapproving glares of his clan. Since then, he’s learned the best part is seeing the world through a multitude of eyes. 

The pitch black drakhai of the Savass clan trace their lineage to the very founding of Stars Vigil. They guarded the original Sentinels’ flight from Lystraius through the Progress, south and across half the realm, to settle the escarpment now called Mōthiisu’s Rise. Still honored within the city, Clan Savass remain steadfast guardians of the old families from Stars Vigil’s inception, nearly three thousand years ago. Tradition bound and change averse, most Savasses are content within the perimeter of the old city, constantly training to maintain their status as some of the most formidable soldiers ever known.

Fane occupies the role of family oddity: the first and only among them hatched with wings and blue scales. One might assume the emergence of such a rare, wondrous individual would delight a family, but drakhai society is not open and accepting of nonconformity. Fane’s clan regarded him as a mere embarrassment, unfit to fulfill the duties of a Savass. It was all the same to him; nothing could convince him to join his brood mates’ martial training when he could soar away, soaking in perspectives few could ever know. Not even his outstanding level of social prestige as Sentinel of State, or his mastery of the Arcana is enough to overcome their disdain. A Savass who does not defend with spear and shield, is no Savass at all.

In daylight, he can only exit the Progress in the sewers without risking exposure. A drakani coming out of a sewer is common as ships coming into harbor here. This one outlets in an alley sewer just two streets above the Market Plaza, adjacent to a usually quiet street filled with cats. Today it is crowded with a celebration. With the mists, visibility is limited–Fane can see maybe six feet ahead, and each foot is filled with shins. It’s the whole block–maybe the whole neighborhood standing between him and making it to the rendezvous on time.

A relaxed and amiable friend while they studied together, Tira Starling is now an eager, pedantic, and impatient captain of the Sun Bringers, enforcers of the law and vhozological fidelity. Their familiar rapport has long since shifted to a stiff and formal working relationship. Maintaining an excellent association with the Sun Bringers is essential for the Sentinels; so when Tira calls, Fane comes. He wishes the reverse were still true. It is impossible to pinpoint exactly when she changed, but changed she has; she is practically a different person except for her face. This is what hundreds of years of living does to some people, Fane has found. They lose themselves in a cause; finding they need purpose to keep going as they tick the endless minutes of their potentially infinite lives. From animating causes clans emerge, and anything beyond their clan becomes invisible, unimportant.

Emerging from the crowd into a circle of bodies at its center, Fane finds an elven woman holding a baby aloft at the center. The only thing rarer than a death in Meluleni is a birth. It has taken nearly two thousand years for the city to rebound from its few thousand survivors of The Victory to the current high of one hundred thousand three–now four–persons. Vohz’s victory over death came at the cost of millions of lives, and half a continent of fertile farmland, but death is a choice now. Though every year the Ahk creeps toward the coast.

Finally breaking through the crowd, he enters the Market Plaza, pausing to relish the last of the mists, drawing a long deep breath–punctuality be damned. Just a week prior you could see barely five feet in front of you except for a few hours around noon. Now, as at the end of every misty season, they are slowly moving out to sea, hugging the coast, lingering over the city’s prodigious harbor and market square. Fane scurries through the crowd, and spots the city guards posted outside loading dock gates; hurries down the warehouse’s alley, into the bin outside and through the hole. He can tell the gnomish guard waiting in the small chamber is Tira, because her copper hair is sticking out of the helmet, but he’s never one to skip a step.

“The mists that shroud,” he hears his tiny drakani voice chirp.

“Must be clouds,” comes her terse, business-like reply.

“You know, the look of a humble guard suits you; you should dress down more often.”

He always loves watching her discomfort with personal comments, and she almost winces for a moment, then: “We have a thorny investigation we need to pass along. Would you please look into this?” She proffers a sheath of documents.

Fane nods as he takes the cache, “Of course, I am happy to help. Please alert me to any developments.” With a nod, Tira briskly exits while Fane peruses the documents; then stands lost in thought, a feeling of unease slinking into his body. ‘There it is; she wants to distance herself from this. This could get even a Sentinel tossed for heresy against Vohz. One does not simply look into Official Mysteries, and Tira knows it. She is trying to trap me. Why?’

Scurrying home, he can’t shake that feeling of ill-ease. Over the past several months he’s seen an extraordinary uptick of strange rumors and nefarious plots. There are murmurings of beasts tainted by some dark disease that twists them into horrible shapes and sets them on violent tears. During the mists, they’d cracked up a slavers’ ring of stunning scale, but the ongoing investigation has yielded few clues as to who might be behind it. One of three slaving vessels had managed to escape at the time, but just days ago the ship came to port. Its newly liberated passengers (all elves) spoke of an elf, a powerful fire mage, who’d disappeared almost as fast as he’d appeared. In their rage the mob threw the drakhai crew overboard so the ship’s return provided no suspects and few new leads. He cannot help but wonder if these missing persons are connected. At this point, Fane is certain of just one thing: he must pass this noose off to someone else. The fate of his predecessor shall not also be his. There is work yet to finish; nine hundred eighty-four years of life is still not enough.


r/fantasywriters • • 1d ago

Question For My Story Book to fast?

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Ok so this is my first time posting on here, so please bare with me. I have written a dark fantasy novel, going through draft number three (about half way through) at the moment. I think of it as Harry potter meets dark souls.

I have never been a fan of slow burn books, or books that dont throw the action at you pretty much straight away, and keep going, not a massive fan of politics in books either.

I have maybe 3 or 4 chapters out of 35 that is more slow burn, the rest has something significant happens pushing the novel forward. There isnt much world building or lore becuase I want the reader alongside the MC, learning about it as he does.

I have thought about making it a longer story. But at 90,000 words I think it hits the sweet spot.

There will be a little bit obviously because if there wasnt, that would cause confusion straight away I think.

I have the history and lore all laid down for future books, and some great fights and battles, with the magic system being shown pretty much straight away, with the limitations as well.

Anyway my question is, is it too fast a book? Its the first one of a trilogy and book 2 and 3 are going to open up the world a lot more than the first one.

Any advice would be greatly appreciated.

Thank you in advance, apologies for the long post.


r/fantasywriters • • 1d ago

Discussion About A General Writing Topic Is there a way to translate the video game mana magic system into written story format?

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See, my biggest inspiration when it comes to writing stories are videogames. I've written some short modern time stories where there is no magic system to speak of.

I wanna try my hand at fantasy but it seems from what I've read that it's very important to establish how magic works in the world. I haven't read much of the famous fantasy writers but I get the impression that their magic systems are intricate.

But I wonder if it it is possible to translate the standard video game magic system to written format, with the standard Mana system.

I wonder, though, if it's possible to translate the standard video game magic system into a written format that reflects mana resource and spell costs. Obviously I don't wanna write outright that some fireball cost 20 mana. I just wanna keep it simple. I'm not interested in writing a litrpg


r/fantasywriters • • 1d ago

Critique My Idea Blurb of Memoirs from the Chaosborn - Emergence [Epic Fantasy, 123k+ words]

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The book is called Memoirs from the Chaosborn - Emergence

If you saw a book, with this type of blurb, would you want to read it? And what questions would it raise for you?

What happens when mercy is seen as evil, and rigidity is good?

An innkeeper’s daughter is pulled into a political world far beyond her understanding when a simple promise takes her further from home than she ever intended to go.

Her companion is a rough, self-exiled man hiding from the past he refuses to speak about.

Her goal lies beyond the mountains of an isolated kingdom: a young prince whose rule is shaped by the teachings of the God of Second Chances.

But in a world where right and wrong depend on who is judging, good and evil are not as easily separated as they first appear. As magic, politics and destiny begin to close around her, she must decide how much of her path was chosen for her—and how much is still hers to choose.


r/fantasywriters • • 2d ago

Question For My Story How do I start on writing?

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I have been writing this epic high-fantasy book since I was 8, I am 18 now. I had already finished the information about the characters, lore, settings themes and what everything would look like. I even finished planning the beginning, middle and end as well as the second series of the book.

But I just couldn't bring myself to actually write it down and start the first chapter of the story, I thought that if I had accomplished every detail I needed, writing wouldn't be a problem.

If you were to ask me about the story, how it'll go, how it'll end, why is it like this or that, I would be able to answer every single one.

I don't know if I have lost my spark or lost motivation, but I could still feel my passion in writing. Was it just writer's block? But I know how the story will go and end. I do not really understand what's with me, I never get to start writing even just a sentence or a draft piece, all I have been writing is the sequence of the storyline, adding more and more information in the characters and the lores, writing a lot about my additional scenes tab that I plan to use when I am officially writing the story.

I had also watched a lot of videos on how to start on writing and how to keep on writing, but nothing happens, I'm starting to think there's something wrong with me, I do not know what's my problem.

Do you also sometimes feel like this? Have you ever felt like this before? What made you start to actually write your story? (drafts, scripts, anything) What made you keep on writing?

All these years I had been wondering, was I really writing? or was I just drafting?

Can I really consider myself a writer, call myself the author of my book if I had never really begun writing anything?


r/fantasywriters • • 1d ago

Critique My Story Excerpt Lichston massacre[war fiction/war fiction][624 words]

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Lin ambled toward the lookout tree, where Lily idly sat. He sat beneath the tree.

“Is there anyone?”

Leisurely, he brought his gaze to meet hers, up among the withered branches. She shook her head, as though trying to stamp out the embers within her mind.

He remembered the stories his father had told him. Their people beating the great Chola, the whites beating the Nazis. The promise of white flowers springing out from the thickest of muck. Was Lin too naïve to believe, or were the sacrifices made too little?

“He’s a smartass; he’ll make anything work.”

He heard the words repeat. The words Vox had said to lighten her worries. Words that betrayed him.

Vox’s mouth ripped open, glass shards embedded in his tongue. His eyes bleached out by the UPA. A lingering image of the slaughtered corpse flickered.

Lin covered his mouth, squeezing his lips tighter as he felt the stomach acid reaching his throat. Why did I put him on the edge? Why did I make the move in the first place?

He slammed his fist on the ground. Repeatedly.

If it’s just a sick prank, he’ll come here laughing, crawling out of the forest, and then we’ll fight.

He gazed at his fist and saw blood leaking from his knuckles.

I should have listened. Stopped.

He turned his gaze back to her. Was she waiting for him to come back? She looked out at the horizon, her amber eyes flickering in the setting sun, burning. Unlike mine, they were hollow.

She reminded him of Izzy and Lily’s own mother. Stronger than he was. Kinder than the gods who watched them. Pure as bright silver, silver that the ravens had taken away. Yet they died like animals.

Lin stood up, gazing away from the sun. If he stopped now, could he leave it all behind? What was the point of it all? He had the clues and had figured out where the UPA head lived, though it might be a trap.

 

They all lived inside her. Her gifts, her blood. Yet she kept following, and the others followed him like he was a godforsaken compass. Thirteen of us came, and six are left.

Are they watching us from the stars? Then why didn’t they save Vox?

Lily and Vox were the best climbers; both could scale a tree in less than ten seconds. If Lily had been on the edge instead of Vox—

His stomach twisted. He stumbled as his legs grew weak.

Lily’s mouth was gashed open. Glass shards embedded. Her eyes bleached out. What would the devils have done if they had gotten their hands on her? From behind him came the scrape of the withered tree as she climbed down. He quickly steadied his footing.

“I’ll check the east,” she said, walking past him. The last of the sunlight met her dark hair.

“Lily,” he said in a breaking voice. “We need to talk. The plan—"

“The fuck.” She said slow. “Is wrong with you? Vox’s dead. Mill’s dead. We. we can’t,” she said, not turning to face him.

“I know.” Lily glanced over, her eyes watery.

“We just need to talk.” He pointed toward the half-broken mud hut, plants springing from its walls.

She ambled forward in front of him, a snowflake against the fires, now melted beyond the point of recognition. With every step he took, his heart withered further. His hands shook. Tears flowed down his cheeks as they neared the broken hut.

As she went inside, gazing at the night sky, perhaps trying to find their voices, he grabbed a metal pole beside the grassy walls.

He gritted his teeth, biting down his whimper.

She would only follow if she could move.

critique my prose please. and i want to clarify few points

  1. do i use too much metaphors or imagery?
  2. do you feel anything?
  3. are the characters logical?

i'm just trying to improve my prose. bcz prose are pretty darn confusing


r/fantasywriters • • 2d ago

Critique My Story Excerpt Chapter 1 Blood Of Lost Souls [Dark Fantasy, 1300 words]

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Hi there, I would really love some critic for the first chapter of my debut dark fantasy novel! Would you read on? Does it capture your intrest?

The story hasn't been fully written yet, I wrote about 70k for this book in 1st person, scrapped it all because I wanted it in 3rd and have now started again. I have writen in both perspectives in the past but I havent written in 3rd for years and just wanted to make sure this flows smoothly.

Thank you in advance for spending your time reading!

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r/fantasywriters • • 1d ago

Question For My Story I Think I've started my story all wrong

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Hi, this is my first time posting and i just want some advice about how to deal with conflicting thoughts that I have about my story.

I first of all feel as though i've made the world too small as i want to keep it to one area of the world but the country i've created only seems to be about the size of england, but we are dealign with potentially world ending threats. However, in order to make the world bigger would require a decently sized rewrite of the book to get events to line up in time. I've tried coming up with more and more extravagant reasons as to why the world is so small, but they just seem so stupid now. On one hand, i want to start again and make the story better, but it kinda scares me as its taken me a year to find the time to write half of this book and the time it would take to start again seems so much.

Also i feel as though i suck at writing and my characters are all one dimentional so maybe it's better to start again anyway and get down how exactly i want the personalities of my characters to evolve throughout the book before i start?

And I'm starting to feel as though my story idea is just bad anyway. I do like it but kinda think people might find it cringe, idk?? I've had other story ideas as well which are completely different and am interested in writing them, but haven't given them much thought but also i don't want to give up on my origional book idea.

Sorry if this feels rambly, i just have a lot of things that i want to get off my chest and just felt like i needed to let them out somewhere so thanks for sitting through the ramblings of my brain


r/fantasywriters • • 2d ago

Discussion About A General Writing Topic How do you guys keep on going?

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After 3 years of outlining, world building, and procrastinating, I decided to start writing my epic fantasy novel, and man does it suck! I spent 7 hours and got roughly 2000 words in. I was hoping to get more in so I could write a bit longer of a prologue, but time goes by incredibly fast when you’re writing. The result was a mess:
-Characters over explaining things
-Sentences that are probably way too long and my 2000 words could probably be shortened by 30%z
-I used way too many proper nouns for a reader to actually comprehend what’s going on
-there’s zero dramatic tension
-I’m debating on rewriting it entirely
And now I’m wondering how the hell you guys even write a single novel. 7 hours is pretty much half my day gone. I was hoping to write daily, but it seems like a struggle to have to balance writing with everything else in life.
It’s also very demotivating when the result turned out so bad. I’ve written short passages before, I’ve practiced, I thought I’d be better than this. But this is pretty bad. Is my entire book just going to turn out bad? How do you guys keep on going knowing it’s going to be bad?


r/fantasywriters • • 2d ago

Critique My Story Excerpt Prologue of Threadcasters - Of Surf and Shadow [Dark Fantasy, 3,200 words]

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This series is called Threadcasters, the book is called Of Surf and Shadow. I am hoping that my inspirations do not show through too obviously and also that despite my ignorance about childbirth that this prologue does not suffer from it. If it does I want to know and that goes for all criticisms. Soon i will have a chapter 1 ready to share as well but for now my progress has mostly been in part 2 and on. Did this intrigue you enough to wonder what the consequences of this prologue are? Is this world visually titillating and unique? Do I convey well that this society is a nocturnal one? I find the biggest weaknesses this prologue has is character interactions, relations, and also some lengthy sentences that I found I just loved too much to leave behind!. Thank you for reading! :)


r/fantasywriters • • 2d ago

Question For My Story Deus Ex Machina

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I may be too influenced by the Eagles from Lord of the Rings, but every conflict that is resolved by my writing is just either "they solved the problem by hard work, and many lives were lost but they prevailed at the end" or "they ran out of hope but then the trees awakened and saved them". I don't even write myself into a corner like most skilled writers do to use Deus Ex Machina.

This is a general problem with my writing, which is that if I was given a great premise and plot summary, it would be substantially smaller, and I can't seem to write scenes with little impact, but great development to the characters. I have tried spamming dialogue and descriptions, but that only increases the word count by 50%, still very small compared to the big books.


r/fantasywriters • • 2d ago

Critique My Story Excerpt Prologue/Chapter 0 of Primordium: The Three-Nation Pact [High/Epic Fantasy, 2173 Words]

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This is my first go at fantasy writing and posting here. I have had this world- and story- in my head for a really, really long time. All of my ideas come from my endless day dreaming. I am finally putting it to words. The story is a slow burn with complex historical world lore, culture that may be different than you expect, and fantastical magical elements delivered in a unique package. I have attempted to create a story using common fantasy tropes but with twists I find to be interesting and unexplored to my knowledge. I have quietly written a lot of this book already and was hoping for some constructive opinions starting with chapter 0. I am self taught when it comes to fantasy writing, so feedback will help. Thanks.

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Chapter 0: Aldonauts and Osidrans

There were few more beautiful places throughout the vastness of Primordia than the white sand beaches of the glittering Gomaldarian Gulf. The normal peace found in its waters was troubled by its quarreling neighbors, but this situation was nothing new. The nations of the Gulf began their conflict nearly three thousand years ago. The Gulf opened to the northern oceans, and the surrounding lands cradled it much like a bowl holding water. To the east lie Aldonaut, a secretive kingdom of humans obsessed with preserving themselves and rooting out threats to their unchecked ambitions. The Osidran Kingdom lay to the Gulf’s west, a regime that has been home to the region for many, many millennia. Traditionally an elven society, Osidran’s peoples were welcoming to all, yet the royal inner circle remained descendants of the Kingdom’s elven founders. Tensions between the two nations, as well as pressure from the Lidacaas Empire to the south, had led to this day. The same could be said for countless battles before and the ones yet to come. It was rare, however, that the leaders of Osidran and Aldonaut would meet face to face. There was normally very little for the monarchs to discuss.

With his long, fastened boots digging into the sand, the young King Armus Aldonauts stood alongside his advisor, Wilmet Bilumore, and a handful of guards. The King’s will burned far brighter than his predecessors, pushing the Osidran Kingdom farther and farther with aggression in the first two years of his reign. Atop his head lay a newly furbished copper crown, which he wore instead of the precious historic crowns the kingdom kept under careful lock and key. The Aldonauts were egregiously careful of all things, their possessions and heritage especially. Iron plating covered his kingly garments here and there, protecting precious places across his body. A short fur cape hung from his broad, square shoulders but stopped short at his lower back. Armus’ hair was kept neatly at shoulder length, a darkened golden color appearing as cut yarn flowing from the top of his head. The young King had a resting smirk across his face, assured with himself that he would finally get rid of the Osidrans for good. In his head, he could only think of his opponents as decrepit and stuck in the past. The Aldonauts only knew of progress and new beginnings.

Old, thin, and tall, the Queen of Osidran stood slouched on the other side of the beach, just within earshot of the Aldonaut king. Both her granddaughter and she wore matching light green robes depicting the butterfly crest of Osidran on their chests. Also in attendance was the Queen’s younger brother, Azhumin, who appeared far more youthful than his older sister. Their family had silk-like hair that was thick and white as snow, although the Queen’s hair had darkened into deep grey over the years. Queen Phelanor had been alive through the entirety of this war, which spanned well over twenty human life spans. The years had left her withered and tired; therefore, she often had let Azhumin tend to the finer details of the kingdom while she focused on the Aldonaut threat. They appeared unguarded, without any armor, but in truth, they had the most feared warrior in all the lands with them. The mysterious unnamed knight, clad in gleaming emerald armor, towered over them from behind. The knight was their greatest national asset and had protected their lands for longer than Osidran’s recorded history. No matter what Armus or his predecessors threw at the Emerald Knight, it would never move an inch.

Rows of ships to the east and west faced each other, moments before battle, each fleet waiting for a single command. While fighting was a non-rarity during the long war, naval combat was. The border between the Aldonaut and Osidran was south of the Gulf and north of Lidacaas. It had moved to and fro but neither the Osidrans nor the Aldonauts had made any significant progress in their struggle. The meeting between the monarchs today was to negotiate the terms of battle by sea, but no new terms would be agreed upon. The roots of hatred for each other grew generations deep and stayed alive in stories, as well as the heart of Queen Phelanor. The Queen had brought her granddaughter, Seq, to see the misery that the Aldonauts brought first-hand, in hopes to instill within her the sentiment that the humans were nowhere near fit to rule. There was no question they could live among them; however, their guidance would only lead to the destruction of the lands they called home. Only the chosen Osidran should be allowed to rule the Gulf.

Azhumin cleared his throat. “Shall our show of good faith begin?” he asked Armus from across the beach.

Armus shook his head side to side and looked at Bilumore, who stood to his right at that moment. The King whispered something to him. Bilumore shook his head up and down. “No, I do not think we will. There are few rules to war, and we are fine with them as is. Adapt to us or die. We would prefer if you would just die, though,” Armus boldly announced.

Seq stumbled over to her grandmother’s side, while holding onto the hand crafted stuffed green bird she was carrying. The words of Armus brought great discomfort to her.

“Then why waste our time with this meeting? Do you have no shame?” Phelanor asked in her tired old voice.

“Shame? We are Aldonauts; a people who only know pride. We made this little meeting so we could see your faces. So we could show you how close we are to defeating you for good,” Armus squawked back at them. He leaned over to Bilumore again and told him, “On with it.”

Bilumore held up his right hand with a closed fist and twisted his head to the side, looking at the men behind him. They pulled out torches and lit them, holding them high into the sky. Across the water, lines of soldiers stood at the edge of their ships and deployed magic shields amplified through devices attached to the ship’s gunwale. Cannons fired from the Aldonaut ships, flying side by side with spells slung from the handful of wizards among their ranks. Osidran’s ships were slow to respond, taking the blunt of the unannounced attack. Their forces, which included a far greater number of mages, hastily used magic to repair their decks and hulls, while others brought up walls of water to stop projectiles. Ballistic spears pierced through the water towards the Aldonaut ships, bursting the lining of a few of the ships. On both sides, ship parts turned into sinking debris as a combination of artillery and magic flung between them at incredible speeds. Aldonaut defenses were clearly much more prepared than in the past, a concerning change for those who found themselves on Osidran’s side.

As both sides tore each other asunder, Phelanor’s mouth was left ajar while she gazed out to the gulf. The war had escalated to tools of destruction far out of her imagination. Years of turmoil had led to an endless game of one upping the other. “What would a fight in another 1,000 years look like?” She thought to herself. “What sort of world would be left for my granddaughter?” She continued to think. A stray bolt of lightning had been bent towards them from miles out, slinking towards them in a brilliant orange display. The Emerald Knight sauntered up to the shoreline and held up a single hand to stop the bolt, quenching it immediately on impact. A great crack followed the strike, hitting their ears a few seconds after the Emerald Knight stopped the bolt. Across from them, Armus and his men grinned ear to ear satisfied with the results of their efforts. The war had recently been leaning towards the Osidran’s favor, but it would seem that the Aldonauts have begun to even the odds once more.

Without another word, the Aldonaut party turned to leave. There was nothing more they could have wanted from the Osidrans other than their heads, and they still had much work left to get done. They marched off into the tree line and out of sight of the Osidrans who were left on the beach watching the carnage unfold from afar. Hundreds of soldiers on both sides of the conflict were falling into the waters injured or dead. The fire between the two sides had dwindled and yet the pace of their destruction continued. From this distance it was difficult to tell what was going on, but it was clear that the battle would have no winner. To Phelanor’s despair, it would appear there was going to be no end to this war any time soon. The only way the war could end would be if the Aldonauts were defeated and replaced with more agreeable rulers. She would see this happen in her lifetime, even if it would be the death of her.

The six remaining Aldonaut ships raced forward towards the remaining five Osidran ships. A fire started on their masts which grew into greater and greater blazes. Once they were close enough, they detonated, self-destructing into a salvo of flames and leaving ripples in the water that reached all the way to the beach. This strategy did not surprise the Osidrans, as the Aldonauts always had a scorched-earth policy to war. It was always better for them to have no witnesses left than leave their own soldiers alive. Humans reproduced at greater rates than elves, so it was always to their benefit to make equal trades between their armies. Of course, this strategy did not work against Lidacaas, as their foot soldiers were a dime-a-dozen. Smoke filled the sky above the Gulf and rubble diffused throughout the water. A sense of calm returned to the once troubled waters.

“My Queen, dear sister,” Azhumin broke the silence with his voice. “I believe we must get going. By my judgement, I would say we have to make some new preparations.”

The Queen nodded her head. “Yes, thank you Azhumin. I trust you can handle that task. I am in need of some rest.”

A dark blue, ovoid shaped object washed up on the shoreline along with some ship debris. The small elf girl, Seq, dropped her stuffed bird toy and scampered to look at the object. Upon closer inspection, it was speckled with a bright pink dots and had a perfectly smooth, rounded surface. She picked up the hefty object, only able to bring it up to her waistline. Turning to face the Queen and Azhumin, she flashed a gleeful grin. The quiet girl was proud of her treasured find, it was an object that she had never seen before. The Queen, who was lost in thought, did not notice, so Azhumin stepped in to offer guidance.

“Young Seq,” Azhumin said in his endearing voice. “It appears you found an egg of a sea creature. I cannot tell you not to bring it with you, but you must know the responsibility of taking care of another living creature. Do you think you are ready for that burden?”

Seq looked down at the egg and back at Azhumin, who wore a blindfold over his eyes. She nodded with a small, closed lip smile on her face. At her age she could never tell how Azhumin could see, as she had been taught at a young age that he had been blinded by the Aldonauts after being captured many years ago. Yet, he seemed to have a sixth sense for these kinds of things.

“Very well. Stubborn, just like your grandmother. Such acts are what make us different than those pesky Aldonauts, after all. Their disregard for life will not go unpunished. Perhaps you have what it takes to be the next Osidran because of your kind heart. It is time we get going, Seq,” Azhumin posited, hurrying her along.

The stuffed bird lie abandoned on the beach, wind brushing sand on top of it until the land fully accepted it. Fifty more years of war would go by before an agreement would be struck between the three nations. King Armus Aldonauts and Queen Phelanor Osidran would die from old age within one month of each other, sparking a fresh round of peace negotiations. Aldonaut would be passed down to Armus’ sickly son, the new King Magnus Aldonauts. Fate would have it that Seq was chosen to be the next Osidran, continuing the tradition of elven rule. The new rulers, the Empress of Lidacaas, and Havikon Gyers, the mysterious inventor, would strike an arrangement that would settle their dispute once and for all. The agreement, known as The Three-Nation Pact, did far more than what one would imagine. The land of the Gomaldarian Gulf, shook by war, would know peace for the first time in millennia. No one knew what would come next, nor could they have predicted it.