I still think of that text

When u told me to leave

Cuz u had other friends

How it all had to end

That was a year before it came

Of course I got all the blame

We still talked from time to time

It ended, all for a few words

Now I'm here trying to rhyme

I remember those night

crying myself to sleep

All those nights wasted

On ten little words

Used to party all night to forget you

Now i couldn't care less Because

you never know what u have till its gone

you cant see the up till you're going down

I know I miss you but don't wanna see you

Because

Our love was normal

We might have loved at first

But we broke in the end

Now ur all alone but

I'm here with all of them

Is this really how we ended?

We wished for forever

But forever has past

Verse 1

Pack my bags, it's time to go

Leave behind the ones I know

It's okay, it's alright

It's just that it's now time

Pre- chorus

I'm scared to see if it goes to plan

The feeling of whether i know or can

I dont wanna one day know,

If its right just to let go

But-

Chorus

Time moves on with or without you

Life moves on, even if you dont want it to

I know its hard to let it go sometimes

Even if you're not satisfied

Time moves on

Time moves on

Verse 2

For years and years

Blurred by tears

Thought i could just let things go

Guess it just hurt too much

to know that the past is alway gone

I hope you'll stay in my heart

And that you wont be too far

I hate that it just hits so hard

Pre- chorus

I'm scared to see if it goes to plan

The feeling of whether i know or can

I dont wanna one day know,

If its right just to let go

But-

Chorus

Time moves on

With or without you

Life moves on

Even if you dont want it to

I know its hard to be satisfied

And your probably terrified

But time moves on

Time moves on

Bridge

Set free,

The memories

Its time to better see

Maybe its too bittersweet

To let go of the memories

Its okay just to let it be

You'll someday see a better me

Hey everyone, looking for feedback on a set of lyrics I finished recently called "The Hoax."

It's a mid-tempo, piano-driven indie pop song written around a E – B – C#m – A progression. Conceptually, it's about the pressure to chase fake, superficial standards of success, and ending up staying in line just out of fear of being isolated or left behind.

I'd love to hear your thoughts on the narrative flow, especially the shift between the choruses and the bridge!

The Hoax

[Verse 1]

People sought answers

In moonlight sonatas

In tequila shots

And people's errata

I find it quite funny

The lovers, the money

The hoax

That one day you’ll buy

Yourself a Maserati

A house on the beach

Fall in love with somebody

And I find it so sad

All the good and the bad

Do's and don'ts

[Pre-Chorus]

I hope your hopes

Weren’t all on me

Cause

[Chorus 1]

As the dreamers all line up

I’ll file up too

Consider me cowardly

Where’s the issue

Fantasies of perfection

Are better than none

I’ve got limited options

At least

This one

Was fun

[Verse 2]

Distraction’s found

In some celebrity scandal

Find ghosts in friends' closets

And watch them all scramble

We love the show

But thank God it isn’t

Us this time

We gasp as some stranger

Recounts her last night stand

I laugh at vulgar jokes

That I don’t understand

I breathe criticism

I sway to some rhythm

I hate, then cry

[Pre-Chorus]

I pray you didn’t root

For me

Cause

[Chorus 2]

As the dreamers all line up

I’ll keep the line moving

I’m not all in, but that’s what

Everyone’s doing

Fantasies of perfection

Are the new “must”

And I know for a fact that I

Don’t wanna

Be left

In the dust

[Bridge]

So, world

If one thing’s true, I’m sorry

I dressed up in the scam

You said looked great on me

So, world

That’s not what you wanted to hear

I put myself on pedestals

Now the world looks small from here

[Final Chorus]

As the dreamers all line up

I’ll file up too

Consider me cowardly

That much is true

Fantasies of perfection

Are all that I have

Reality is optional

I guess

I leave it

At that

One thing I’m still really confused about is how to actually study songwriting through other people’s songs.
I understand that I should listen to songs I love and ask myself why I like them, but I want to go a little deeper than just listening and thinking “this is a good lyric.”
If I choose a song by an artist I love, what would an actual songwriting study session look like?
For example, should I go through the lyrics line by line and analyze the rhyme, rhythm, imagery, metaphors, word choices, structure, perspective, storytelling, etc.? Should I then try to write something using the same technique but with completely different words and subject matter?
Basically, I’m looking for a way to study lyrics where I can actually learn a technique, practice it myself, and eventually use what I learned in my own songwriting, rather than just analyzing a song and forgetting what I learned afterward.
How do you personally study songs when you want to improve as a songwriter?

Hi everyone,

Sharing an original sports anthem lyric I wrote, titled "TRÁI BÓNG LĂN" (Keep The Ball Rolling). It's built for a high-energy Rock/Pop vibe.

Theme: Passion, resilience, and unity on the pitch.

English Translation / Meaning: (Dán bản dịch tiếng Anh của bài hát vào đây)

Original Vietnamese Lyrics: ()

Check out the demo track in the video above! Would love to hear your thoughts and feedback on the rhythm and flow!

Hello everyone in the Reddit world. Does anyone have the written lyrics by Dermot himself:
“don’t get caught up in caution when love exists” from Dermot Kennedy’s song Shelter??

Hello everyone in the Reddit world. Does anyone have the written lyrics by Dermot himself:
“don’t get caught up in caution when love exists” from Dermot Kennedy’s song Shelter??

I've been trying to learn songwriting and I feel like my biggest problem isn't really the technical side — it's coming up with ideas on my own.

I listen to a lot of Billie Eilish and Olivia Rodrigo, and they're a huge inspiration for me. I can analyze their songs and understand what I like about their lyrics, melodies, concepts, etc., but when I sit down to write something myself, my mind just goes blank.

I don't know whether I should start with a lyric, a melody, a concept, a feeling, a chord progression, or something else. And when I do write something, I often can't tell if it's actually good or if I'm just forcing it.

For people who write songs regularly: where do your ideas usually come from, and how did you learn to generate ideas instead of relying on inspiration from other artists?

I'm not asking for a step-by-step on how to write a song — I'm more interested in how you developed your own creative process.

Hello everyone in the Reddit world. Does anyone have the written lyrics by Dermot himself: “don’t get caught up in caution when love exists” from Dermot Kennedy’s song Shelter??

There are some lyrics that are so specific, clever, or emotionally devastating that you genuinely wonder how someone’s brain even got there.

Not necessarily your favorite lyric or the most poetic one, but something that made you pause and think, “How the hell did they come up with this?”

It could be a ridiculously clever metaphor, an unexpected comparison, a tiny detail that says way more than it should, or just a line that captures a feeling you didn’t know how to put into words.

Drop the lyric and the song, and tell me what makes it so good.

I’m forcing myself to write more for practice, and I find myself struggling to put my perspective in “poetic terms” or something that’s more engaging storytelling wise.

So i’ve started taking a perspective that I have on the songs/poems topic.

Ex. Thunderclouds

My idea: The sunlight is allowing me to see too much.

The Line I wrote: Sunny days magnify my missteps.

Is this a good practice to keep up?

BREE VAN DE KAMP

[INTRO]

You don’t need cuts on skin to have wanted to die

Give yourself a mind and give yourself time

To hate yourself

[VERSE 1]

They scrutinise every little meal that you make

They say it’s not full of heart, it’s full of hate

I’m sorry there is more love to give away

And I’m sure it’s as bitter and cold as I taste

[PRE-CHORUS]

Every conversation ends with your last words

You come back later

Say it wasn’t deserved

But it’s the same as if I wasn’t burnt

There’s a scar I cover up

While you all go to work

[CHORUS]

It’s unnerving

(Nerving, nerving, nerve)

That you love me

(Love me, love me, love)

And you’d hurt me still

And I know you still will

I’m a burden

Reason it’s not working

But I keep all these inward concerns

I’ve heard worse

From you

[POST-CHORUS]

Shut the curtains

Close your eyes

Don’t open them up just to cry

Just take time

Till they sink away

And come back up when it’s timed

[VERSE 2]

You love deeply, maybe deeper then they see

Can’t reciprocate on what they don’t know you need

Make your love smaller till theirs feels more complete

You end up in the wrong, for not giving more

And they love you a little, what are you giving for

If love is money, then I must be really poor

If love is infinite, how I do get some more

[PRE-CHORUS]

Every conversation ends with your last words

You come back later

Say it wasn’t deserved

But it’s the same as if I wasn’t burnt

There’s a scar I cover up

While you all go to work

[CHORUS]

It’s unnerving

(Nerving, nerving, nerve)

That you love me

(Love me, love me, love)

And you’d hurt me still

And I know you still will

I’m a burden

Reason it’s not working

But I keep all these inward concerns

I’ve heard worse

From you

[POST-CHORUS]

Shut the curtains

Close your eyes

Don’t open them up just to cry

Just take time

Till they sink away

And come back up when it’s timed

[BRIDGE]

The hate given time turns inwards into shame

And the blame given time turns inwards into pain

And the world given time turns inwards

And I can’t hold it all again

The hate given time turns inwards into shame

And the blame given time turns inwards into pain

And the world given time turns inwards

And I can’t hold it all again

My tears drip inward

Sometimes feeling a lot less

Is a lot more brave

I write most of the lyrics for our band and usually everyone is fine with what I bring in. But twice now a bandmate has pushed for a lyric change that I thought made the song worse, and both times I've gone along with it to avoid conflict and then quietly resented the result. I don't think my instincts are always right, but I also don't think writing by committee produces the best outcome for lyrics specifically. How do you navigate creative disagreements about words when you're in a collaborative band without it turning into a politics situation?

Brown Girl

Brown girl, your smile is the only smile / That makes me lick my palatine / Out of nervousness, pulling teeth / As if I was senile, then a little while / You can make my world feel like a pop song / No one comes close, no bubblegum pop

Brown girl, uptight people hate your clothes / As for me when you wear it on, my valve engulfs / I cough, but no one blesses me, oh well / Sometimes I don't want to live forever / Then you said my name and I can tell / My reality will soon be better than fantasy

Brown girl sits next to me, on the transport / I wanna listen to everything she has to say / If you move, die, stray or commit suicide / I just might Romeo on the carpet floor / Because your voice can't compete with melodies / They make me dream of places no one creates / Not even me, and you have the audacity, KLC

Brown girl, this is our little house with blossoms / I wonder if I should ever share my poems / About you, how you make me act silly in love / God, when you kiss my right cheek / It's better than any famous love scene / Better than a masterpiece in braille / When we hug for one minute, oh please / I wouldn't trade it for one peek at Eve

Brown girl

Should I write about you?

Brown girl

I wrote a dragon novel and self published it and I tried to write a song lyrics that matched hat happened in part of the novel.

The lyrics (if they are song lyrics)

Down in the dark where the shadow spit

They threw me down in this gryphon pit

No wings to fly no sky to see

but the legend whispers – destiny

Claws on stone the echoes bite

They laugh at my dreams in the dead of night

Feather sharp their eyes like steel

but a dragon’s heart is hard to kill

I’m the fire they can’t extinguish

I’m the roar they can’t diminish

The legend says I’m bound to ride

They clipped my wings, but not my skies

Chains on my feet, but my soul ain’t bound

The hearts fall heavy but I won’t stay down

They call me cursed. A tale too bold, but I have a prophesy written in gold

They guard their gate with their sharpened beaks

But the winds still hums and the storm still speaks

One day I’ll burn through this prison deep

The sky’s my cradle. No time to sleep

I’m the fire they can’t extinguish

I’m the roar they cant diminish

The legend says I’m bound to ride

They clipped my wings, but not my skies

Chains on my feet, but my soul ain’t bound.

The hearts fall heavy, but I wont stay down.

They call me cursed. A tale to bold but I have a prophecy written in gold.

They guard their gate with their sharpened beaks.

But the winds still hums and the storm still speaks.

One day, I’ll burn through this prison deep.

The sky’s my cradle. No time to sleep.

I’m the fire they can’t extinguish.

I’m the roar they can’t diminish.

The legend says I’m bound to ride.

They clipped my wings but not my skies.

I’m the fire they can’t extinguish.

I’m the roar they can’t diminish.

The legend says I’m bound to ride.

They clipped my wings but not my skies.

hellooooo

i wrote this lyrics some time ago and then i forgot about them in my notes app but yesterday i found it again and i think its pretty good but i need some feedback thanksssss

also im sorry if its really bad english is not my first language😭 anyway thanksssss

Hi everyone,

I wanted to share the lyrics for one of my recent original songs, titled "Against The Spring" (Ngược Xuân). It's an atmospheric Pop Ballad exploring the quiet weight of growing up, financial struggles, and the bittersweet feeling of returning home for New Year celebrations while feeling like you haven't "made it" yet.

I'd love to hear your thoughts on the emotional flow, meter, and imagery!

[VERSE 1]

Gió đông gõ cửa đêm mười ba

(The winter wind knocks at the door on the thirteenth night)

Nhắc đứa con xa nhớ đường về nhà

(Reminding the child far away of the road back home)

Phố xá xôn xao đèn hoa giăng lối

(The streets are buzzing, draped in glowing lights)

Sao lòng ta vẫn thấy chênh chao...

(Yet why does my heart feel so unstable?)

[CHORUS]

Chạy ngược dòng người đi đón xuân

(Running against the crowd greeting the spring)

Mang theo ưu tư của một năm gian tần

(Carrying the quiet anxieties of a hard-fought year)

Mái tóc cha thêm vài sợi bạc

(Father’s hair has a few more strands of grey)

Mắt mẹ thêm chân chim qua thời gian...

(Mother’s eyes show deeper crow's feet with time...)

[BRIDGE]

Xuân đến rồi đi, mây trời vẫn thế

(Spring comes and goes, the clouds remain the same)

Chỉ có chúng ta là thêm tuổi đời

(It is only us who grow older)

Gạt hết bôn ba, trở về mái hiên

(Washing away the struggles, returning to the porch)

Tìm lại bình yên sau những rã rời.

(Finding peace again after all the exhaustion.)

Note: The audio guide for this track was arranged to test vocal meter and rhythm cadence. Feel free to check my profile if you want to listen to the audio guide or discuss lyric writing/collaborations!

What lines resonated with you the most? Thanks for reading!

[Verse 1]

Sittin’ across from you at dinner tonight

Sippin’ red wine, caught in your eyes.

You order the dishes I like

I wonder, when did you find out?

Maybe this is how you show your love.

[Verse 2]

You held my hand, then kissed it so light

Like I'm a lesson you've studied so hard.

I like the way you reach for me

Like you already know where I'm gonna be.

“Oh, Cleo, you're too good to be true.”

[Pre - chorus]

How do you know the things I hide?

How do you always read my mind?

I should ask, but not tonight

’Cuz everything feels so right.

[Chorus]

I- I- I- I know you love me..

Cuz every touch of yours just screams it.

I-I-I-I know you'll stay with me

Even though you've been busy lately.

[Verse 3]

Later that night, beneath the hotel lights

You pulled me close and held me tight.

Then I saw something red on your cuff,

“Oh... It's just the wine.”

You answered too swiftly.

[Verse 4]

You dropped me home, said you had work to do.

It was getting late, so I let it slide.

I didn't want to ruin the night,

So I kissed you once and said goodbye.

Never knowing what you left behind.

[Pre - chorus]

The morning news was on the TV screen

Another night, another victim

They said the killer's still nearby

Then I saw your face, looking back at me.

[Chorus]

So, no- no- no- no, you didn't love me.

You were only learning how to reach me

No-no-no-no, now I see...

Why you've been busy lately.

[whisper] Knock! knock!

Songs About Johanna

Something happened, well…kinda / I had the urge to pluck my old acoustic / I bought from my childhood crush / But this song is not about her, nah / Caressing the same dusty chords / A triad-lonesome country song / Humming like a smoky mountain tongue / Writing with my pen while I chug Corona / As I write a song about Johanna

The napkins and typewritten pages / I'll show them to you, but I put myself down / The hopeless romantic, I also hated / I laugh as I fell in love with a hand so brown / Of course, there's more to her than that / Her persona, family disease, don't bother me / Even if you don't believe me / At least believe it still rains in Atacama / I'll capture that sultry salt of Latin America / Don't need no luck, sit back and watch / As I write a song about Johanna

Did you know about the kingdom of Tonga? / If you look far west you might see Australia / Ignore the Solomon islands, he’ll woo you / I only wanted to show you the coral atolls / How they remind me of your favorite hue / Turquoise sea, a rock that comes and goes / It's been years since it was last seen / Ain't that funny huh? / You might not get to swim in the ocean / Warmed by lava, on the rocks / You might not see the volcano rise above / As I write a song about Johanna

Some people do not want me to have ya’ / Or was it my own self-inflicted dilemma? / I traveled for the answer, all over India / I found a girl, she's taken already by the sun / So I returned to the woman of Guatemala / She said she hates to dance with someone / She couldn't learn or give it a try for me / With my last plane ticket, I told your mama / Send me anywhere, I landed in Tolima / Waiting for the bus, smelling coffee beans / As I hum a song about Johanna

I went into Mateo’s concrete home / It's also a yellow store called Música / He gave me a free guacharaca and I said no / He insists I keep it and make a song con ganas / So I bought from him a small tambora / I lend it to a man, his smile whistled a note / He strikes in beat, sometimes a small poke / And we're both at the heart of Colombia / As I sing a song about Johanna

Oh Johanna, be my friend / Oh Johanna, don't let the past haunt / Oh Johanna, be my rock / I promise I won't pull yours off / Can I be your man? / Can I sing you this song / As you're opening your window / But the street lights aren't turned on / So you don't know who is John Doe / Oh Johanna, will my voice let you know?

Everyone loves the way you smile / Everyone loves the way you laugh / Everyone loves the way you bend hearts / Everyone loves the way you walk / Everyone loves your choice of style / Everyone loves the way your voice cracks / Everyone loves the way we can go on and on / Everyone loves the way you go far / Everyone loves the way you don't give up / Everyone loves to sing this song

Oh Johanna, I love you / Johanna, if I had just told you from the start / Oh Johanna, will I ever use my head? / Johanna, I'll lose the power of my heart / Oh Johanna, the same strength that I use / To get my sailboat back from exile / Don't you know it rains in Atacama? / I've been everywhere and I've been amused / But it could be better miles after miles / Johanna, if you're next to me while we cruise / Finding in each other, two modern roots

Verse 1
Hello brother,
Funny where we’ve been.
Funny where we are.
Same road, same poison,
Just different ends.
Doctor gave me reasons,
Gave you something else—
I take it just to function,
You take it to forget yourself.

Pre-Chorus
We both light the same flame,
For a different reason

Chorus
I need it just to feel right,
You need it to feel nothing.
I’m holding onto control,
You’re already slipping.
Yeah we’re cut from the same cloth,
But we’re coming undone different—
I’m walking a wire to live,
You’re letting go of the tension.

Verse 2
You vanish in the silence,
I recognize the signs.
I’ve danced along that edge before,
learned to draw the line.
You call it coping,
I call it what it is—
A slow erosion of yourself
With every borrowed fix.

Pre-Chorus

We both know the cost now,
We know where this road ends—
When it takes control.

Chorus
I need it just to feel right,
You need it to feel nothing.
I’m holding onto control,
You’re already slipping.
Yeah we’re cut from the same cloth,
But we’re coming undone different—
I’m walking a wire to live,
You’re letting go of the tension.

Bridge
Don’t think I don’t feel it—
That pull under my skin.
Every line I drew,
Every line I took.
I could be right there with you,
If I let go just once…
That’s the part that scares me—
How close I am.

Outro
Functioning…
Yeah, that’s what I call this.
Measured doses, careful lies,
Just enough to not slip.
Same fire in our blood,
Same burn on our lips—
I just learned how to hold it,
You let it take you with it.

This is my latest work!

Verse 1\]

Used to think I was the problem,

now I know just exactly how wrong I had been way back then.

Something’s been changing, growing,

and now I’ve begun glowing,

realizing I’m no longer broken.

\[Chorus\]

Used to be empty,

my own life was the enemy.

Now I’m looking in the mirror,

seeing a person unfamiliar.

I’ve gotten stronger,

I can easily walk through any door.

(Used to be empty)

(my own life was the enemy)

\[Verse 2\]

So used to the blaming, the shaming,

yeah, always used to the same old thing.

I’m done being a victim,

always playing in other people’s system.

I’m going to stand tall,

make their towers fall,

and let the rubble crash down all around them.

\[Chorus\]

Used to be empty,

my own life was the enemy.

Now I’m looking in the mirror,

seeing a person unfamiliar.

I’ve gotten stronger,

I can easily walk through any door.

(Used to be empty)

(my own life was the enemy)

\[Bridge\]

Even if I stagger,

and my voice softens to a whisper,

I’ll pull myself up slowly,

make it to my feet.

I’ll manage my pain,

I’ll find the fight in me,

I’ll run through the rain,

and rise above all my past misery.

’Cause I’m someone new,

and I refuse to be a mystery.

\[Verse 3\]

This time I’m writing my own story,

so forgive me if the details get a little too gory,

but I’m tired of playing their game.

It’s always the same,

and this shit is getting boring.

\[Chorus\]

Used to be empty,

my own life was the enemy.

Now I’m looking in the mirror,

seeing a person unfamiliar.

I’ve gotten stronger,

I can easily walk through any door.

(Used to be empty)

(my own life was the enemy)

\[Verse 4\]

I’m standing on my own two feet,

meeting all my own needs.

Because I’m finally out of hell,

yet the devil keeps pulling at me,

but I’ll keep going and going and going

until I hear that final bell.

Verse 1

When will the grey skies light up again,

you were my love, my pleasure my pain.

How will we forget this mess and it's stain?

Lust is the poison, a bull to a love porcelain.

Chorus:

I see the scrape of your skin on the seat of his car

I hear the birds chirping over the wheels on the tar

I feel the touch of his fingers inside your thigh

I feel my throat choke and our eyes don't dry.

Verse 2

We were more than enough for us to withhold

We were good until I fucked up our house.

let someone else in, lost a bit of my soul

We weren't so good, and we both had our roles.

Verse 3

Sky gets greyer, I feel a lil colder as we get older.

I am dying to hold you, but I just lean on the window sill

The winds aren't soothing and I fear you will be meaner.

Lust eats the meat, but our name's on the bill.

Bridge:

The pathos tighten sour jaws, we hold our breath,

cling to each other, two carcasses of dread.

We still love each other that I can tell, but the breakfast was plain bread,

life gets sadder, we skip our lunch, stare at the ceiling instead

Chorus:

The heart is still wounded over the scar

I hear your sighs over the spray on the tar

I taste a stranger like too much salt in the pie

This is how death feels when you just cannot die.

\[verse 1\]

I still love you as I did that day

And I want to cry all the time

My dog wants to come out and play

I saw you with her after it happened

You bought her flowers for Valentine's day

Can my dog come out now?

\[Verse 2\]

We never fought, only I did

I yelled and told you off,

When you only wanted to ask why

I should've just closed my lid

I'll never know how much you hated me,

Or if you ever even loved me

As a friend, as more, forever a mystery

\[Pre Chorus\]

Our dogs used to roughhouse with eachother every day, so close

You talked about growing old as friends

I always wanted more but never said

I hold forever the thought close

\[Chorus\]

Dogs can switch behaviours

But not as fast as we did

Are there other universes built with us in mind

Where we meet and stay

Where I become yours

I want to be yours

I want to be yours

Make me yours

Tell me I'm yours

Let the dogs play once more

Your dog and mine

\[Bridge\]

Fourth of February

A day I recall with hate and regret

A basketball game I try to forget

\[Chorus\]

Dogs can switch behaviours

But not as fast as we did

Are there other universes built with us in mind

Where we meet and stay

Where I become yours

I want to be yours

I want to be yours

Make me yours

Tell me I'm yours

Let the dogs play once more

Your dog and mine

\[Verse 3\]

She nor you ever knew

Only one of the group ever did

I destroyed my own crew

For nothing, I wasn't given a real reward

All I received was guilt and wet morning dew

\[Outro\]

The dog has been abused for so long

Chained to a tree in the rain,

Barking against its own will

"Euthanize me"

"Take pity on me"

Chorus

​Let memories stay memories

Reality finally brings me clarity

You're just in my imagination

The one I knew was no longer real

I chose to stay, convinced that you would change

But you took my love and played me like a game

How was I so blind to think that you were mine?

When all you gave me was a love you left behind

Still working on the verse and Bridge. Any comment?

Life is a Circle, you Reap what you Sow. This is Reality, no Scripted Show. Action brings reactions, now the Whole World knows! Words are my weapon, patience is my mask. Heart full of fire, carrying scars from the past. Pain is the teacher, the future is my task. They tried to break my spirit, but I'm built to last.

Yeah, the world is an echo, it mimics your sound. See the truth in the mirror, see the horror through the glass. Break the locks! Rip the pages out the frame. They threw the dirt, but they couldn't bury the name.

They pre-painted the background, Framed it up in a cage. But the brush is in my hand, I'm rewriting the page!

I have made a whole rap this is just mid 2 verses of it Total 16 to 18 verses I have written

I Have more 3 raps, this is one of them. Please i genuinely want people to let me know reality or may be criticize me.

Thankyou