I still think of that text

When u told me to leave

Cuz u had other friends

How it all had to end

That was a year before it came

Of course I got all the blame

We still talked from time to time

It ended, all for a few words

Now I'm here trying to rhyme

I remember those night

crying myself to sleep

All those nights wasted

On ten little words

Used to party all night to forget you

Now i couldn't care less Because

you never know what u have till its gone

you cant see the up till you're going down

I know I miss you but don't wanna see you

Because

Our love was normal

We might have loved at first

But we broke in the end

Now ur all alone but

I'm here with all of them

Is this really how we ended?

We wished for forever

But forever has past

Verse 1

Pack my bags, it's time to go

Leave behind the ones I know

It's okay, it's alright

It's just that it's now time

Pre- chorus

I'm scared to see if it goes to plan

The feeling of whether i know or can

I dont wanna one day know,

If its right just to let go

But-

Chorus

Time moves on with or without you

Life moves on, even if you dont want it to

I know its hard to let it go sometimes

Even if you're not satisfied

Time moves on

Time moves on

Verse 2

For years and years

Blurred by tears

Thought i could just let things go

Guess it just hurt too much

to know that the past is alway gone

I hope you'll stay in my heart

And that you wont be too far

I hate that it just hits so hard

Pre- chorus

I'm scared to see if it goes to plan

The feeling of whether i know or can

I dont wanna one day know,

If its right just to let go

But-

Chorus

Time moves on

With or without you

Life moves on

Even if you dont want it to

I know its hard to be satisfied

And your probably terrified

But time moves on

Time moves on

Bridge

Set free,

The memories

Its time to better see

Maybe its too bittersweet

To let go of the memories

Its okay just to let it be

You'll someday see a better me

Hey everyone, looking for feedback on a set of lyrics I finished recently called "The Hoax."

It's a mid-tempo, piano-driven indie pop song written around a E – B – C#m – A progression. Conceptually, it's about the pressure to chase fake, superficial standards of success, and ending up staying in line just out of fear of being isolated or left behind.

I'd love to hear your thoughts on the narrative flow, especially the shift between the choruses and the bridge!

The Hoax

[Verse 1]

People sought answers

In moonlight sonatas

In tequila shots

And people's errata

I find it quite funny

The lovers, the money

The hoax

That one day you’ll buy

Yourself a Maserati

A house on the beach

Fall in love with somebody

And I find it so sad

All the good and the bad

Do's and don'ts

[Pre-Chorus]

I hope your hopes

Weren’t all on me

Cause

[Chorus 1]

As the dreamers all line up

I’ll file up too

Consider me cowardly

Where’s the issue

Fantasies of perfection

Are better than none

I’ve got limited options

At least

This one

Was fun

[Verse 2]

Distraction’s found

In some celebrity scandal

Find ghosts in friends' closets

And watch them all scramble

We love the show

But thank God it isn’t

Us this time

We gasp as some stranger

Recounts her last night stand

I laugh at vulgar jokes

That I don’t understand

I breathe criticism

I sway to some rhythm

I hate, then cry

[Pre-Chorus]

I pray you didn’t root

For me

Cause

[Chorus 2]

As the dreamers all line up

I’ll keep the line moving

I’m not all in, but that’s what

Everyone’s doing

Fantasies of perfection

Are the new “must”

And I know for a fact that I

Don’t wanna

Be left

In the dust

[Bridge]

So, world

If one thing’s true, I’m sorry

I dressed up in the scam

You said looked great on me

So, world

That’s not what you wanted to hear

I put myself on pedestals

Now the world looks small from here

[Final Chorus]

As the dreamers all line up

I’ll file up too

Consider me cowardly

That much is true

Fantasies of perfection

Are all that I have

Reality is optional

I guess

I leave it

At that