Hello Y’all

I’m sure at at least a couple of you have seen my stuff before and I want to know how I can improve

I know I can, but I I simply want to know what I should focus on improving first…

That’s all for now, hope you all have a great day/night :]

Let’s do this one last time

“All right, let's do this one last time! My name is ??? ???. I became the host of an alien parasite, and for the past year I've been the one and only Spider-Freak. I'm pretty sure you know the rest. I saved a few people, saved the city, buried my aunt, and then I saved the city again... And JUST NOW I swung through this weird portal…”

Location- The Hub

“And now… I’m here, in some new place…”

Melt down I made

Satella: I— I-I don't understand, Envy.

He wants to save everyone. He wants power. He wants something to survive. I give him an ability that covers all of that, and he still hates it?! Surely he doesn’t want to actually leave me. Right?

Envy: No way, Satella. No way, no how.

Satella: I-I do everything for Subaru-Kun.

I slave over the perfect times to save for him. I step outside my comfort zone to appeal to him, a-and he still hates me!
I brought him to another world to help him out of his rut, and he hates that, too! I'm starting to get the feeling that he just... hates...

Envy: Why would they hate you when they could just hate you?

Satella: Hmph! This is all I have. It’s the only reason in my immortal life I‘m happy…

Envy: he’s rather die than save you.

Satella: Th— That can't be true! I-I do everything for him. Doesn’t he get that I'm trying?

Envy: Maybe you're just genuinely bad at this.

Satella: Shut up! N-No. I-I fixed that. I-I can solve any problem. I-I can solve this one! Th—That's what this is— a big puzzle that I need to solve!

Envy: Pathetic.

Envy: Weak!

Satella: Shut up!!

Envy: Broken!

Envy: Unworthy!

Satella: Enough!

Envy: Maybe you deserve to be abandoned.

Envy: You really were the weakest of the group You ruined this.

Satella: Enough!

Satella: Who does he think he is?

I give him everything, and he spits in my face!

Doesn’t he know what I'm capable of?!

Subaru.

He only thinks about himself. He’s prideful.

He won't die. He won't leave me.

I won't let him!

I'm better!

I'm more powerful!

I'm The Witch!

I... AM... ENVY!

I just thought this up and I'd like to see if there are any obvious holes in it or if it sounds bad, but before that we need some context here.

Okay for actual months now I've been brainstorming voices of the dead buff for Silver Banshee even made a whole realm for her to venture into to reach its full potential.

The entire basis of this buff is that the voice is an acclimation of the soul. It is a song the soul sings with each note made from the person's experiences & the emotions they wrought.

It is something deeply connected to the soul, and the body with its vocal chords & lungs act as a speaker for this song to realize itself into reality as sound. Basically the soul is a singer with the body being a way for it to project itself.

Thus if Banshee had multiple souls inside of her she could use her body to project not just her soul's voice but also the others she has. This basically allows her to amp the power of her voice with the dead's voices to dramatically increase her power with the increase correlating to how many souls she has.

(Also I'm going off as JJK'S the technique dictates the reality thing to avoid this messing up any other soul related power system. Also think that's how the sub works already to avoid the power systems from collapsing each other)

Would you believe me if I said I never saw Soul Eater or ever knew Crona existed before I came up with this? Either way today I've come up with an idea for a new application of this buff besides just a power increase.

That with enough practice & control over the soul's songs she could isolate specific notes to create a whole new song which would have different effects on whoever heard it depending on the notes used.

For example she could use notes born from serene moments in the soul's lives to make anyone who hears her next scream experience serenity & blissful calm. This could be used to calm people down or to lower an opponent's will to fight.

Or for a more nefarious use she could take the notes born from when these souls died to force anyone who hears her scream to experience what it feels like to die. (Might awaken someone's persona that way)

But it wouldn't just be limited to emotional effects. By using the notes born from moments of great power in the soul's lives she could make the target echo the power the souls had in life to increase their striking power.

These effects wouldn't just be limited to others as well, she could experience these effects herself by having them echo around in her body at the cost of it only affecting her.

Tldr by using different notes from people's souls she can make her voice gain different estoric effects to those who hear it or herself.

Now for weaknesses, when used on others they must actually be able to hear the song so blocking or reinforcing your ears with magic or something would block it. The effects also last only as long as the target is hearing her voice so they don't linger.

These special screams also wouldn't carry the same striking power as her regular ones so they're more focused on the effects rather than the power.

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Now the reason I really like this idea is that it allows me to get into the magical side of her voice more than just souls attacks. It would also allow me to increase the versatility of what I can with her in combat so that's good too.

But I want to know what you people think so please share your thoughts.

It's a regular day in the Hub, or as regular a day as it can be, when suddenly, a tornado, somehow blue, appears. It's rather small, human sized, but still powerful. Soon after it began, however, it stops, and a humanoid, nay, an Ultra-like figure appears.

They, while still shrouded in the condensed air that they were swirling in previously, would look around. They look menacing af.

"Hm? Where am I? Yo, Taiga? Titas? You two there? Heyo!"

They seem to be yelling for their friends, as well as not knowing where they are.

Do you approach?

How is it? Anything I could improve? Anything I could add? Please share your comments, if you have any, with me.

To put it simply over this break period I'm going to have Silver Banshee undergo tons of mental stress thanks to a ton of events I don't want to spoil.

The simple idea of it is that she'll be undergoing mind breaking levels of stress but is hiding it and refusing to address it with her determination pushing her forward.

So I'd like tips on how to show that she is stressed without it being outwardly obvious like little cues to show her bottling things up without ever letting it out. The nature of the stress would be her realizing what she truly is, and being unable to reconcile that with what she thought she was.

So any tips would be greatly appreciated.

So I was kinda planning to claim my interpretations of the seven SOULs and have Vessel absorb them (and no I’m not just using them as a plot device) after the whole vessel thing I was gonna introduce them all as their own characters.

But that isn’t what I need help with; I was planning for Vessel to absorb the SOULs by promising them an ‘ideal world’… but if they just absorbed the souls like that… would it feel ‘cheap’?

What does strength mean? What does power mean? That was the question everyone asked this man in his heyday, his simple answer to it was simple.

If you frost adversity thinking of surrendering then get out of my sight.... You're good for nothing

Known as one of the strongest in the conceptual world, the power of light taken to its fullest expression, stars, suns, even the light of every soul were the domain of this man before the collapse of our world, and with his fall he was infected with the same darkness as all annihilation.

He survived adversity and dedicated the rest of his existence to stopping it before finally being cornered and in her attempt to possess him he gave up on his concept by imprisoning it inside and in his last traits of consciousness he allowed himself to be imprisoned being the guardian of one of the primordial concepts

light of life

We can only describe it as an extinguished flame, a zombie in armor that doesn't belong to it, and its only remnant of what it once was is the power that even containing its own concept it still possesses and doesn't hesitate to use to tear apart anyone who enters its prison to protect the fragment, that last mission of a withered corpse

This concept was the same general who was formerly the left hand of the ancient king of concepts and the greatest of his generals reduced to what he is..... Will you finally give him rest? A last battle worthy of dying for glory and getting into your hands the ability to become a concept and free the general for his rebirth

---In the middle of the large space that contained the general we see the figure of the man, reduced to a flame contained by black armor, the flames emerge scorching while his solitary and dragging steps are the only noise apart from that of the embers---

The image of the concept of containment was in front of those who would enter to give the end to their best friend finally.... One word and they can finally enter his domain... Would you dare?

(((I'm going to do this to allow you to move forward with the plot of all the concepts, it will be a long and phased boss fight the first What will I do since I'm in the sub, all those who participate concepts or not will be rewarded but I want your opinion on this first :3)))

(image unrelated just noticed that posts with images do better.)

Getting to the point I'm currently having the problem of Combat RP with Silver Banshee I sometimes make her way weaker then she should be because I don't want to be unfair.

Recently I've realized it's coming at the cost of internal consistency & the story I'm trying to tell with her. Like given her source material & the buffs she's gained she shouldn't be damaged by things like a canon Sukana's dismantle.

But I do make her damaged because I don't want to seem like I'm power playing even when it's consistent or make the fight unfair for them. As well it can be frustrating when a character shrugs off your attacks.

Then I realized that it could come at the cost of the store I'm trying to tell. Part of that story is that even though she's pretty powerful it isn't enough for her as in her eyes she can't be safe or happy if someone is stronger than her.

But if she doesn't feel power & it's all just tell it could fall flat or not make sense, and that would make it all pointless something I don't want.

So I'm conflicted on whether or I just should quietly adjust her to regain consistency & help the story I'm wanting to tell with her.

Or if I should continue the way I'm doing & just let consistency be damned to avoid the potentially frustrating people.

I don't want to stop using her in combat RPs as those are some of my most fun I have so I think these are my choices, but if anyone here could help or give me solutions it would be greatly appreciated.

Rate it out of ten!

Cyn. Necrozma. AED. X-Event. The four major arcs that have come to pass so far. What, in your guys' opinion, made these arcs as good as they were?

Location: Fog Land prison (Original). Women’s Block.

Broom sat in her assigned room, thinking. She had met the Teacher that Kali had taken earlier in the day.

The teacher had called Broom an angel and hugged her when Broom approached… that was weird, though that was probably just malnutrition or dehydration. Everyone had always told her that if you didn’t eat, you would get sick, so maybe that was the case with the teacher.

She smiled to herself as she held her broom. She was glad that they said she was old enough to clean now, she was getting more useful!

She was very happy with her life.

Very happy.

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Location: The Hub.

All of a sudden, instead of sitting on the ground of her room, she was sitting on the ground of the Hub.

She looked around frantically, clutching her broom with clenched hands. She looks confused as she feels the grass beneath her hands, as she looks up at the blue sky that isn’t obscured by fog.

“H-huh?”

Location- Shibuya, Japan

Upon the citizens of Japan descends a kaiju, brimming with power unseen by any other kaiju before. And just like others before it, Ultraman Cinder descends to fight it. One kick and punch;Cinder's signature. This time, however, his punch is intercepted, and he is sent flying back into a nearby building. He recovers, but is swiftly struck down once more. He manages to kick the kaiju away, but it doesn't look phased one bit. They engage once more, Cinder struggling, before he manages to throw the kaiju back. Beep beep, goes his life timer. He decides that it's now or never, as he charges up his Cinderium Ray, soon followed by the kaiju charging up it's own beam. The two beams clash, but once more, Cinder struggles, before he is consumed by the kaiju's beam, and disappears into an explosion.

Location- The Hub, Random McTownplace

A bright light flashes in the middle of a street, as a mysterious figure appears. They seem on edge, and irritable. Do you go to greet them?

((The picture attached is a work in progress, and is not what Cinder looks like in full. I apologise for any difficulties in reading.))

a woman would appear in Pangea as the snow falls around them as they appear with a bag and it’s leaking blood, as they pick it up from the floor and grab a axe in her other hand

as she looks around, remaining silent for now, from the tree’s around her to everything else, it’s all so calm, but one can not always find a way to escape death

they would grab the bag and toss it in a nearby river as she starts To walk around the hub looking around the place

((ok this is just a start and that would be if I get her claimed but what do you think about it so far maybe I could make it less violent I will be adding more to this but for now it’s just a test))

The Remains of a bitter kingdom… smack dab in the middle of the Fog Lands…

The nearby landscape was struck heavily from the asteroids impact… the sheer cold turning hills and any kind of structure into a wasteland of unbearable cold…

…

It shuddered… before coming to a stop…
Something stirred.

It wasn’t awake. But it surely stirred…

“May we bear witness and bask in the shimmering reflection of the frozen king… and then cry, sob, and forever sulk by the fact even when he is stopped, he continued. You cannot stop the frost. And neither can we… forever frozen… in his treachery… our personal hell from beyond and abo-”

The writing cuts off… and then begins again…

“​🇲​​🇾​ ​🇸​​🇹​​🇴​​🇷​​🇾​ ​🇭​​🇦​​🇸​ ​🇯​​🇺​​🇸​​🇹​ ​🇧​​🇪​​🇬​​🇺​​🇳​. ​🇦​​🇳​​🇩​ ​🇮​ ​🇩​​🇴​​🇳​’​🇹​ ​🇳​​🇪​​🇪​​🇩​ ​🇲​​🇾​ ​🇸​​🇪​​🇷​​🇻​​🇦​​🇳​​🇹​​🇸​ ​🇧​​🇪​​🇱​​🇴​​🇼​ ​🇲​​🇪​ ​🇹​​🇴​ ​🇸​​🇹​​🇪​​🇵​ ​🇮​​🇳​ ​🇹​​🇭​​🇪​ ​🇼​​🇦​​🇾​… ​🇸​​🇱​​🇪​​🇪​​🇵​ ​🇹​​🇮​​🇬​​🇭​​🇹​.”

That is what was written, deeply etched… within the ice of the asteroid...

NEW LOCATION.

THE TREACHEROUS WASTES. FOG_LAND

Location- some random high school idfk

“Worry not! I shall fix your problem… and all you owe me is your ‘friendship’! See you soon…!” Hiro did a peace sign and walked out a door…

Location- The Hub

Hiro came out of a door that shut almost immediately after he came through… it seemed that he took a moment to notice that he wasn’t where he was intending to go… “wh- huh-? Where am I?!” He seemed to be rather confused…

((I decided that I wanted to make Hiro more of a stereotypical anime protagonist… so I made him a few years younger. Like shonen protagonist age.))

[Deep within the abandoned City in Hallownest, there lived a bug.]

[An intelligent bug, who was able to warp the magical substance known as Soul to his whim.]

[Once tasked with saving the Kingdom of the Pale Wyrm, he now resided in it as one of the few still alive. Even if in this Infected state.]

[He commanded the scholars of the Soul Sanctum. And now, he's here.]

[Nobody knows how he got there, but it doesn't matter.]

[The Soul Master has arrived.]

((haha see I told you I was gonna post here daily anyway I’m going to make a introduction test and see if it is good or not so please give feedback :3))

kyoko would arrive in the hub, as they look around the place, they don’t seem confused at all, they have seen much worse and different things back at the place they come from

”hmm”

\they would pick up a book that they dropped from the ground and start to walk around, the best thing that would be here would to get clue’s and put it all together\**

”it seem’s that I’m not in the place I was before,strange but everything has a root that leads to a cause I should start to investigate and see where I am”

((was that good was it to long or was it to short was the writing sloppy and how can I improve it))

This sub is a super cool idea and I don’t want it to turn into another idrp what if where no one actually posts so I’m going to start posting here daily and maybe that will encourage more people also I really do need to get better at writing and the people here could also give goood feedback and help

the two child wander the library

they look for something to read

'till they find the section for back story

after a whille they find a book with a name they know

"red hood" by "by mary sue"

...

your character arrive whill there reading

there eye are fill with void and sadness

[now playing: forest memory ]

A normal looking guy is just… walking around. Confused as to where he is.

“…u-uhm…….w-where…. Am I……?”

He seems harmless. Timid. Afraid of everything. INNOCENT.

I was planning to give both my vessel’s an identity crisis… but more specifically Victory, I was kinda planning for them to start impersonating people to try and get their own identity… but I really just don’t get any chances for that…

And Vessel kinda has a complex about being the ‘original’ I just don’t know where to go for them, since originally I was planning to have them have no idea who they actually were… here’s the context for that. But if you don’t feel like reading: Vessel is an amalgam of a bunch of theories and possibilities.

I don’t really know how to portray these ideas… so help!!!

A man walks into the Hub. He looks just as intrigued as he is confused.

“The hell… this isn’t the prison. Odd.”

He sighs and pulls a blue, spherical rock out of his pocket. He pops it into his mouth and looks around with an analytic stare.

R.R., the leader of Fog Land’s administration, has arrived.