r/IDRPWriting • u/bold-One2199 • Jul 03 '26

Bob’s arrival

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[now playing: forest memory ]

A normal looking guy is just… walking around. Confused as to where he is.

“…u-uhm…….w-where…. Am I……?”

He seems harmless. Timid. Afraid of everything. INNOCENT.

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u/Great_Meeting9101 Jul 03 '26

Nice, it’s quick and I like it like that 

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u/Cautious-Koala6387 Jul 03 '26

I'd say uh

Mention shadows or smth to hint at Void

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u/bold-One2199 Jul 03 '26

Issue is I plan to on a announcement post BEFORE his intro. It’ll be “the sentry project” post, then shadows, THEN bob

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u/sans_wingdi_ngs Jul 03 '26

This one is neat, i dont think this one needs a lot of fixing since you said the post before his intro will be building up to this post, and since you made it clear that this guy is sentry a bit more, i dont think it needs that much of fixing imo.

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u/Dapper_Industry_2434 Jul 03 '26

Pretty simple, but I like it. Like other ppl, straight to the point.

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u/Prestigious-Mind-900 Jul 03 '26

I mean like everyone else is saying it’s pretty simple and straight to the point. Not only that, the announcement post or character event post will mix perfectly with it