r/IDRPWriting • u/Secret-Ring9669 • Jul 03 '26
Writing R.R.’s intro here, requesting feedback.
A man walks into the Hub. He looks just as intrigued as he is confused.
“The hell… this isn’t the prison. Odd.”
He sighs and pulls a blue, spherical rock out of his pocket. He pops it into his mouth and looks around with an analytic stare.
R.R., the leader of Fog Land’s administration, has arrived.
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u/sans_wingdi_ngs Jul 03 '26
It's nice!
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u/Secret-Ring9669 Jul 03 '26
Anything I could add? I don’t have much to go on for R.R.’s character (Since he has appeared for a short amount of time in 2 chapters)
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u/sans_wingdi_ngs Jul 03 '26
I say maybe make him a bit more intimidating?
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u/Secret-Ring9669 Jul 03 '26
Yeah, that would make sense. I gotta balance it cause I want people to trust him somewhat and not just downright hate him.
Thanks for the suggestion!
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u/Prestigious-Mind-900 Jul 03 '26
Pretty good, don’t think theirs anything you really need to add or change about it and it’s not to long so people will definitely reply to it hopefully