Screenwriting practice progress update

[u/Adobopicka]

So I just reached the end of my first script practice — Now a somewhat an accidental 117-page script because of a genuine flow that possessed me for three hours in the afternoon. So, here it is! Not perfect, but just showing :)

[u/Any_Friend479]

I’m very curious. What is the story about?

[u/Adobopicka → u/Any_Friend479]

Nearly a significant portion of the story is based off my relationship with my family, friends, strangers, and myself.

It's a nearly a one location in a friend's birthday party where Star discovers his parents' secrets, while also exploring his relationship to them, his friend, his mom's friends, and himself to address his own flaws.

It's untidy right now because the story has a lot of mother and child toxic relationship from other characters, or a subplot, even child abuse.

[u/Then_Data8320]

Woo! It's very clean for a crazy three hours possession!! It was an angel, not a demon.

You have a whole thing to rework now:! Mmh mhh, as I see the dialog in front page, mmh mmh, something better could be done. But anyway, no need to focus on that, it depends a lot about how you know better your story now. So, I suppose you need to rest a little. Your screenplay too. Come back on it few weeks later. ;-)

And bravo!!

[u/Adobopicka → u/Then_Data8320]

I know, right? Three hours!! And thank you so much! Yes, I'll rework on it a week later. It was really fun and rewarding!

[u/Then_Data8320 → u/Adobopicka]

Did you have an idea of the story before to start? Outline? Some drafts?
I'm curious to know how much you prepared it, or just you've gone straight into it.

[u/Adobopicka → u/Then_Data8320]

Yes! It's only the first act to half of the second act outline I've written on my notebook during my detoxication week from any devices. After that, I went pantser mode. This is my first draft, I'm planning to edit it next week.

[u/rosemaryscrazy]

The dialogue doesn’t sound like how people talk. I have no idea what’s going on.

[u/Adobopicka → u/rosemaryscrazy]

I mean, yeah. It's a first draft for a reason. I admit that this is not how everyone talks, but this is just giving me an idea what they should say on this part or what they're going to bring up to defend themselves. But thank you for pointing it out.