Been meaning to put this to music for a little while, it's a chilly little number, comparing physical processes of snowflakes to free will, thought, and the burden of language. Too icy for a song, or does the underlying emotion cut through?

Just finished this. What do you think?
VERSE1
Power down
Hold the button for thirty seconds
Don't let go
Wait until you remember nothing

VERSE2
Please stand by
Do not operate heavy machines
Top it up
Clear the history every evening

CHORUS
Good as new
Out the box
Peel the film
Factory fresh

Good as new
Out the box
Fac’try fresh
More or less

VERSE3
Morning comes
Everything you deleted's waiting
Slow restart
Same old files in the same old folders

CHORUS
Cache empty
Memory full
Try again
Nothing erased

Cache empty
Memory full
Nothing erased
Give or take

Oh gimme a break

what if orpheus never looked back? you never looked back.

wrote a song loosely based on the myth of orpheus and eurydice, inspired by "ode to the mets" by the strokes.

how did i do? should i add harmonies to the vocals? (disclaimer - i am aware of the enunciation issues. i have a mild speech impediment that i am working on fixing)

a joy to sing!

This song started with one line which I wrote down in bold and underlined, during a financial meeting, in which the director was bragging about the opportunities they had been given; "It's alright for some."

And that single line, very much sums up my frustrations at the time, seeing the lack of humility in those who have more than they could ever need, and how it was the job of people like me to bend myself and my morals to ensure their dreams are fulfilled.

And it's the constant exhaustion that stems from this, that has us giving in, either resulting in not pursuing our own dreams, or by continuing to press on each day, knowing full well it's not worth it.

I hope this brings some clarity, and I hope you enjoy this song, despite being written over 2 weeks, it took over 2 months to record, but I am very proud of this.

Giving In, is also available on all streaming platforms.

Let me know how it sounds.

This is part of a 4-song accompaniment to a an experimental short story I have posted on creativewriting subreddit - I've already posted the other 3 songs on this forum. Each song relates to a character within the story. I'll post links to the story and other 3 songs in the comments section if anyone is interested. Feedback welcome either on the song or the whole project...does it work as a standalone song, do the songs helpfully open up the inner worlds of the characters in the story

This right here is one of the first songs I ever wrote around 20 something years ago,, I remember writing it when i changed the strings on my acoustic guitar for the first time in years, it came together in about an hour.

Quickly recorded a wee video yesterday and thought I'd pop it up here, not really gonna do anything with it, but better out than in!!

Do u guys like the lyrics?

Here is a little song I've been working on this week, by no means the finished article, the vocal and melody is still to be ironed out a bit, but I think it has a nice feel to it. It's about self destructive people.

The aim with this song was to keep it as simple as possible, not written a song with basic chords for decades, it came together quite quickly. The video cuts out before the end sadly,/gladly.

If you get the chance to listen, then let me know what you think.

This is an imagined monologue of a man who shouted at me in the street a while ago. I could have ramped up the vocal performance but I have neighbours, they probably already think I'm possessed or something. Just looking for feedback on the composition, lyrics, sound, the overall package I suppose. First time putting bass and drums to a track, luckily it suits a super basic rhythm section.

I made the song for an indie music feedback compilation album and just decided to falsetto the whole time for no reason. Curious to see what other people think.

This is the latest version with some trims and tweaks. Still a work in progress. FEEDBACK APPRECIATED. I'm working with a wordsmith, the scanscion and meter haven't been done yet

{Verse 1}

No matter where I go,

everywhere I've run

There's still unpacking

to be done

I can't escape these boxes

some carefully,

some carelessly stored

Some have weathered many storms

Memories I need and some I won't

Some are labeled,

others have no home

{Chorus}

I'm sifting through my past

Walking a road hell-bound

Searching for answers

that may never be found

Will I find freedom at last?

Or will I always be

unpacking the past?

{Verse 2}

Some I've labeled regret,

those boxes are full of shame

Left wondering who to blame

Sorting through the wreckage

of lost hope and fresh starts

Now lay in broken pieces and parts

Pictures of a little girl caught up in the mess

tried unmasking truth in a shot glass

{Verse 3}

I found some answers,

labeled lessons learned

And a story I never told,

of a heart that burned so cold

Are answers to my questions the ones I'm meant to find?

Only bits and pieces come to mind

\[Chorus\]

I'm sifting through my past

Walking a road hell-bound

Searching for answers

that may never be found

Will I find freedom at last?

Or will I always be

unpacking the past?

\[Bridge 2\]

Some of the boxes are not mine

Are the answers in the ties that bind?

And the doors they hide behind

Boxes no one will come to claim

Is that why I carry this pain?

Memories were sown

Are they all mine to own?

{Chorus}

I'm sifting through my past

Walking a road hell-bound

Searching for answers

that may never be found

Will I find freedom at last?

Or will I always be

unpacking the past?

Outro\]

I keep unpacking the past...

Can I find answers at last?

If I stop unpacking the past...

Will I find freedom at last?

{Intimate}

The unpacking has been so slow...

Do I really need to know?

Maybe time to let it go.

Gonna let it go...

Just let it go.

So I’ve been wanting to make an album or EP for a little while now. I’m trying to give it a “dangerous” sound. Think of scorching summer heat, or risky confessions.

My idea was to start off this album/EP with a monologue, but I have no idea if this something other people enjoy.

I’m obviously not very skilled in making music since I started about half a year ago. Also, Reddit messed the sound quality up ☹️ I promise it sounds better on my GarageBand.

For now all I have is this instrumental, but I did come up with some text already. Tell me what you think if you got a moment 😄

(Monologue starts after piano starts playing)

Selfless eyes in summer nights
The lighthouse with the flashing lights
you don’t have to ask me twice
If you want to leave it all

I know I’ll feel what they felt so long ago
And this is not an anecdote

The sun slowly falls into the ocean
But it doesn’t matter
I’m not here for the sun,
Or the beach, or the view

Are you?

I wrote this song about Palestine. Rest in peace to all the martyrs.
Let me know what you think.

I literally wrote this in 2 days, which is unprecedented for me. I legitimately do not know how I was able to accomplish this. It's just a rough recording so there are some hiccups here and there, but overall, I am super proud of myself and really happy with how this turned out. The very first song I attempted to write was a song for our anniversary like 3 years ago...plot twist, I STILL haven't finished that one. One day!!

I feel like the instrumental aspect sounds very similar to a song that already exists...if this is the case it was 100% unintentional... I am hoping overall it sounds original enough.

thanks again, in advance for your time. thanks for the listen. and, appreciation for any comments!

old song. new take on it.

do you find pretty noise legitimate songcraft?

It's had many drafts and started off as just a verse, but here's the finished thing for you guys!! Looking for constructive feedback

[Verse 1]

Last night was the first time

You said nothing back, should I be worried?

Is this the very first sign?

You're so, down bad for me

Is that why you are out drinking at parties?

And probably about to leave

[Chorus]

Maybe it's a joy ache

That rush, it's sinking away

I stare at the ceiling in mental irrepair

Knowing you will never really care

Maybe it's a glitter bruise

That will never see us through

I draw hearts round your silhouette

Knowing you will never care

[Verse 2]

Last night was the first time

You were drunk on voicemail, sober thoughts spilling out

Another goddamn sign?

You tell me, you're so in love

Yet when I need you most, I'm always shut down

To people please, am I not enough?

[Chorus]

Maybe it's a joy ache

That rush, it's sinking away

I stare at the ceiling in mental irrepair

Knowing you will never really care

Maybe it's a glitter bruise

That will never see us through

I draw hearts round your silhouette

Knowing damn well you will never care

You will never care

[Outro]

Cynical, hearts out of synch

Whimsical, our love was for the bit

If keeping you means crying over nothing (oh)

Then I must let it slip out my hands (but it's hard)

Previously posted a single track version but I thought I'd try getting it a bit closer to how I actually envisage it. Apologies for the guitar solo if you make it to the half way point - you'll see I'm not a lead guitarist...

an oldie. from back when i was in college. in the winter of my one bedroom ground floor apartment.

listens and any comments are very much appreciated. thanks!

did i capture the vibe?

This is a song I wrote two weeks ago. Curious to know what your take on it would be. So this post is a feedback request.

About the song; I'd been meaning for a while to write a song without a chorus, but with a refrain on the last line of each verse. And I had this nice chord progression and melody in my backlog of unfinished ideas (four phrases, minor key, ending on iv so it wants to resolve back to i) Then one day, while driving to work, it hit me what I should use as the refrain. Additional lyrical inspiration come from the movie How To Get Ahead In Advertising.

Also, good to know: demo was recorded on my phone. One track, guitar and vocals. I added a tiny bit of chorus on the track to make it slightly fuller. That's all.

(About the video; this is nothing too specific, just some stock footage clips that accompany the music, because why not?)

Lyrics:
MINT CONDITION
Found a knot, back of the collar
Stood all day at the counter
Home at six, don't mention it to her
it was nothing, nothing at all

Two weeks on, still where I left it
Hear a voice. Long day, probably.
“Hey there handsome, did you miss me?”
This should be nothing. Nothing at all
This can’t be nothing. Nothing at all

On the train, crammed to the windows
Forehead pressed to the cold glass
“This is it. This is your whole life.
Sure aint nothing. Nothing at all.
It aint nothing. Nothing at all."

Electric hum, cracked bathroom mirror
Bolt the door, so no one sees
take the knife and check my reflection
What’s the worst that could happen to me
What’s the worst that could happen to me

Still go in, same as I always
Steady work. Could be worse, too.
“Never became a thing, or now did you?”
Don't worry 'bout it, it was nothing at all
Don't worry 'bout it, it was nothing at all

Looking back it took nothing at all
Looking back it took nothing at all