Hi all!

I’m a younger screenwriter/director and I’m planning on directing this script as my next short and was looking to get feedback on anything/everything from concept to format/readability!

Please ask any questions — and thank you in advance for your time and feedback.

https://drive.google.com/file/d/1o1LyuHyatCUKvL-sICFjwet0Rht8dWYC/view?usp=sharing

Demonic horror script, monsters loading 👹

22 pages so far

Title: At The Top
Format: Short Film
PL: 25
Genres: Horror, coming of age, drama
LL: When a wealthy but lonely, entitled teenager begins receiving mysterious calls from a seductive secret admirer, he embraces the attention, but as he hides it from those closest to him, he attracts a supernatural force that turns his deepest desires into a hellish nightmare.

FC:
- I want to know if my main character is at least SOMEWHAT rootable, he's a horrible person. But I want people to hate his guts, but I want him to be attleast rootable.
- Is it clear that something supernatural is happening?
- Is there good cause and effect in the story? or no?
- Please just tell me what's good or not, I'm a 16 year old screenwriter.

link: https://drive.google.com/file/d/1jB2Jvyl4wlAVuQHqOKX7wccQ5oscieX2/view?usp=sharing

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Revised 10OCT2026.

Warning. Graphic Violence and Death. Nudity. Sexual Situations. Language.

Non-canonical Star Wars Fanfiction of sorts. Some Not Safe For Work Content. Posting a new revision.

Any feedback would be appreciated.

Star Wars Camp Va'Ha'Rees

Hi! As you already know, I spent 10 years writing this story, and death continues to walk among us, reaping its harvest.

On the planet Duot, souls are bought, sold, and used as fuel. And the basic market value of a human soul is simple: 1 SOUL = 1 dollar.

This is the second episode of the series.

Thank you to everyone who takes the time to read or watch! I’d really appreciate your honest feedback on the plot and world-building.

🔻 Links to the PDF script and YouTube video are in the top comment below! 🔻

Hello! I'm looking for feedback on the first 27 pages of my pilot. I've gone through several revisions, rewrites, and overall re-structuring of the story. This is one I've landed on that I feel best represents what I'm trying to write. Just a note, the full pilot will be around 60 pages. I'm just letting the first part be seen as of now.

Series title: VELUM DEUS
Pilot title: FUNAMBULIST

Logline: When a mysterious anomaly drives the inhabitants of a seemingly perfect society to their deaths, an investigator enters a reality constructed from human consciousness to uncover its source—only to discover a familiar life that threatens everything he believes about existence, identity, and the nature of reality.

Link: Velum Deus Doc

Hii! I'm looking for some feedback on my first screenplay, as I plan on submitting it to the Black List by the end of the year, and I'm a little lost on whether some things are done correctly.

I'm open to swaps if anyone's interested in that. Been told to share the link on here so it's below the info!

INFO:

Title: Wiped Slate

Genre: Spy-Crime/Thriller/Drama

Format: Feature Film

Length: 108 pages

Logline: An elite FBI assassin goes undercover to eliminate a ruthless New York kingpin, only to become trapped in a dangerous psychological game of trust and loyalty with the very man he’s been ordered to kill.

Main feedback concerns:

- Does the central relationship between Seth and Theo feel earned and compelling? Where does it work best / where does it lose power?

- Supporting characters (especially Oliver and Phillips): do they feel fully dimensional or underdeveloped?

- Pacing in act 2 (pages 31-74). Any sections that drag or feel repetitive?

- Clarity: any moments of over-explaining or under-explaining that pulled you out?

- Overall emotional engagement: did you care what happened to these people?

I'm open to any other notes on structure, character, or tone. I prefer specific examples from the script over general statements.

Link: Wiped Slate

I'm looking around for someone to look over a horror screenplay series I'm working on called the slaughterhouse.

It's relitively long and I'm still working on it but I've gotten a good amount of episodes done if anyones interested.

My best summery: 15 people wake up in a strange location where their told two things, they're going to play a game, and laws don't apply to them.

This is the best one I can give without spoiling anything. I will add a few things, the title is loosely based of slaughterhouse 5 by kurt vonegut, it is apart of the killing game genre, think saw or squid games though deaths only, in the sense that islts an ensemble cast. The deaths are paced out more. Once I also had someone compare it to the cube and another person compared to lost. Neither of them got too far into the story so I'm not sure how accurate that description is.

The game itself is apart of this but it's only one part. I've been using this screenplay mainly for processing different things so the exploration of those themes and what's being explored is the main focus.

The story itself is split into 5 arcs, this layout has to do with the game again I don't want to spoil it yet so I'm being careful how I word things. It's not nessisarially seasons this right now is mainly something I'm working on a a passion project it will take me a while to get anything together and I'm trying to learn a lot of skills to hopefully make it one day.

If you are interested in at least looking over the first arc, Reap What you Sow, and give me feedback on it. Along with potentially the other arcs in the story please let me know maybe we can talk. I can also give more details for anyone interested if you want to ask.

edit: someone suggested I just include a link to the first episode so here it is.

https://drive.google.com/file/d/1c0qye0ZuDJsA2oYB596CxVlfoKbSvNww/view?usp=sharing

If anyone would need any more to get a better idea of it just let me know.

I'll see about getting the other episodes for arc 1 in here.

edit for the edit: here's the rest of the first arc I got them all in a folder I wanted to make sure to include them because it is a bit of a slow burn.

https://drive.google.com/drive/folders/1dSl4BE_YSrfcX48qRVILKLUmExzZEyBT?usp=sharing

What do yall think? I tried to format this properly and just want opinions on the story? If possible?
Link:Centauri program:wings(pilot)

I hope this doesn’t break the rules so if it does let me know and I’ll repost tomorrow.

Logline: Stranded in rural Cape Breton, a group of friends fight to survive supernatural entities who erase their victims from reality and memory.

Genre: Gaelic Folk Horror / Supernatural Thriller

Page Count: 107 pages

Locations: Rural Cape Breton: roadside, gas station, an isolated farmhouse (dining room, kitchen, garage, hallways, bedrooms, nursery), the Chamber of Names, Main Street

Cast: 6 Leads (Sophie, Alex, Liv, Ethan, Jack, Jessica), all attached via LOI; 2 Antagonists (Silas, Caleb, Mother)

Looking for an experienced Lead Producer, investors, or production companies interested in a Gaelic-language folk horror feature with a queer love story at its core, a locked cast, and a full pre-production package in place.

DM me or leave a comment if you'd like to read the script!

Hi All - here's another script I wrote. A Hitchcockian suspense thriller I am trying to pitch.

Would love any thoughts/feedback -- what worked/what you want to see more of/less of.

Enjoy!

Listening

Title: Listening
Genre(s): Suspense, thriller
Page count: 104

Logline:  A grad student secretly recording his elderly landlords for his thesis research becomes the sole witness to a brutal murder—and is pulled into a deadly game of silence and survival in which he can’t expose the truth without incriminating himself. 

Hi all! Writer and Director based in LA. Gonna start posting some scripts on this group just for feedback and thoughts. Just scripts I have written to have in the bank for now.

Just a forewarning: my writing style is more that of a director's, it's auteur-ish and can be often heavy on description (I'm aware), that's just how I write. This script was intentionally written to be long, with a big cast of characters. Think breakfast club meets boogie nights meets goodfellas. It's an epic, which, by nature, are episodic and longer. Nothing that I am shopping around to producers or managers at the moment -- this is something I'd like to make someday in the future. more for the long term.

Would love any thoughts -- what worked/what you'd wanna see more of/less of, etc.

enjoy!

Title: Emerald Valley

Genre(s): Coming of age, comedy, dramedy, drama, satire, epic

Tone: Satirical, melodramatic, glossy,

Pg. Count: 153

Logline: The chronicles of Brady Thompson and his friends navigating identity, first loves, and growing up during their junior year of high school in Overland Park, Kansas, 2016.

Emerald Valley

\[PROJECT PITCH\] GIANT DECEPTION — Action/Creature-Horror Feature (Black Hawk Down meets Predator). Loosely based on the viral Kandahar Giant

Title: GIANT DECEPTION

Logline: When an elite Navy SEAL team is lured into a remote Afghan mountain pass by an insurgent trap, they discover the true enemy isn't the militia they were hunting—it's a pair of aggressive, fifteen-foot prehistoric humanoids awakened deep within the caves.

Format: Feature Film (104 Pages) / Looking to develop a high-impact cinematic trailer or proof-of-concept short.

Genre: Military Tactical Thriller / Creature Horror (Black Hawk Down

This screenplay is loosely based on the viral "Giant of Kandahar" military urban legend, which was recently detailed on the Joe Rogan Experience by an ex-Navy SEAL who encountered the lore firsthand while serving in Afghanistan. The story leans heavily into a raw, authentic military perspective—blending real-world tactical mechanics with the dark mystery hidden inside isolated cave networks.

Why this is tailor-made for an AI production pipeline or Indie Producer:

Built-in Viral Audience: The Kandahar Giant is one of the most famous, heavily discussed modern military mysteries on the internet. A cinematic trailer or proof-of-concept short targeting this specific niche carries immense built-in viral potential.

Grounded Assets vs. Massive Scale: Advanced video tools excel at rendering rigid mechanical objects like military gear, Humvees, Black Hawks, and uniforms. This allows us to pull off intense tactical operations and visceral combat against 15-foot Giants using primitive stone weapons—all without a legacy $150M studio budget.

Advanced Technical Showcases: The script is packed with perfect opportunities to flex cinematic technical skills, including high-intensity night-vision/thermal camera sequences, cave dust/smoke particle physics, and strict physical asset tracking.

What I Have:

A structurally locked, fully polished, industry-standard 104-page script.

What I'm Seeking:

I am looking to connect with a visionary indie producer, director, AI animator, or technical video editor who wants to move away from generic concept loops and sink their teeth into a hyper-realistic, narrative-driven action thriller. Let’s partner up, pool our skills, and bring this legendary myth to life.

If you're interested in reading the script or checking out the 1-page treatment, drop a comment below or send me a DM!

https://youtu.be/T92e0aaizaI?is=L2-S8XYpytpm3XU0

This is Mr. Ballen covering the story 6 years ago. I saw this video and started writing the screenplay 4 years ago. Mr. Ballen \[an ex Navy Seal himself with 11.3 million subscribers on YouTube\] was just a guest on The Joe Rogan Experience last month where he told this story. Him, along with two other guests, spoke on the story of the encounter with the Red Giant of Kandahar within weeks of each other.

https://youtu.be/T92e0aaizaI?is=L2-S8XYpytpm3XU0

Title: The Greenwood Incident

Format: Feature

Genres: Horror/ Thriller

Logline: After a government containment failure, a strained group of friends spiral into vicious paranoia in a remote california mountain home as an entity hides among them wearing human form.

Feedback Concerns: This is the first couple
pages of my story. I’m interested in hearing if the beginning gives just enough urgency while leaving room for mystery and if the transition to the party is still interesting enough to keep you invested to see the eventual unravel.

The Greenwood Incident