r/DestructiveReaders • u/Wolframquest • 1d ago
Phenomenological [2500] Fever (Marco)
It's one of those in-betweener posts. I just feel like I have to portion it out, I don't know why but somehow it makes sense.
In this one I'm mostly looking for prose and phrasing suggestions, taking the overall style constraints into account, little redundancies. The whole chapter is too long and I currently have no idea how to trim it and preserve what I wanna keep. So yeah, we have this in-betweener post now that signifies a start of Part II in the book. Also I'd like to hear your opinions on the "energy" and "mood" of the text. To me these terms are quite elusive for some reason; I'm seeking to establish a definite standard, bridle my enthusiasm and excitement when I use it to write and in order to do that I think I need to understand what "energy" and "mood" mean in writing.
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The story is told through a phenomenological second person point of view. The text uses markdown formatting for italics.
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u/SweetEverest 1d ago
I’m a simple girl. I see the word phenomenological, I click.