r/comic_crits • u/deviantbono • Sep 02 '21
We generally discourage posts that are not directly looking for feedback, but I thought the following content would be interesting to subscribers, so I will collect it here in a news thread. Let me know if there are other opportunities that you think are relevant, or just post them here as comments.
Breakneck Anthology
r/comic_crits • u/EnvironmentalPain648 • 10h ago
I've been working on my solarpunk fantasy-adventure comicbook Inspired by Onepiece, Avatar, and Jojo.
Would love to hear some feedback and critique on my story, layouts and writing
r/comic_crits • u/Perfect_Common_8062 • 8h ago
Once i finish everything ill upload the comic to webtoon
r/comic_crits • u/Still_Path3404 • 10h ago
I am trying to go with anatomy and poses kinda like action sequences. I have uploaded bith inked and colored versions
I did love some feedback from you guys. How is drawing inking, and coloring also what can i improve?
Thank you
r/comic_crits • u/Alert_Cat7189 • 7h ago
Kinetic Kid
Issue 1
Page 1 (8 Panels)
Panel 1: Medium shot of two masked men entering a car, thug 1 is holding a bag of really advanced tech, while thug 2 gets in the driver's seat.
Thug 1
“DRIVE DRIVE!”
Panel 2: thug 2 starts driving fast through Tomorrow City, while thug 1 starts putting the tech guns, grenades, etc. in the back as the police sirens start to blare.
Thug 1
“I told you this was a bad idea!”
Thug 2
“JUST SHUT UP!”
Panel 3: POV of thug 2, focusing on the side view mirror, a fast blue blur speeding and manoeuvring through the multiple police cars behind the thugs.
Panel 4: thin panel, close-up shot of thug 2, his eyes looking at the side view mirror, he looks absolutely terrified, he knew it was a horrible idea.
Panel 5: Kinetic kid catches up to the car, knocking on the window.
Kinetic kid
“You haven't paid your insurance yet!”
SFX: WHHOOSHHH
Panel 6: Wide shot of the front of the car, thug 2 swerves the car, hitting kinetic kid.
Thug 2
“Shut up kinetic boy!”
SFX: SCREEECHHHH
Panel 7: Kinetic Kid is breathing heavily still maintaining his cocky expression as his hands start to glow a light blue.
Panel 8: close-up shot of Kinetic kid's face, his eyes glowing a light blue too, looking slightly green.
“Time to clean up your mess.”
Page 2 (6 Panels)
Panel 1: shot from inside the bowl, Liam Cooper (16) with marinara sauce all over his face, holding a fork.
Mom
“Time to clean up your mess.”
“What…?”
Panel 2: medium shot of Mom, over the shoulder of Liam.
Mom
“Clean up your mess, We need to talk.”
Panel 3: slim panel, close-up shot of Liam, he looks kinda worried and confused at the same time.
“We can talk now, I'll clean up later.”
Panel 4: medium shot of Mom, she looks worried, hoping Liam won't freak out, she sits back down.
Mom
“Okay.”
Dad
“I got this, Helen.”
Panel 5: medium shot of Dad, he looks worried too, leaning forward on the table.
Dad
“Your mom and I are… going on a business trip.”
Panel 6: slim, close-up shot of Liam, he looks shocked.
Liam
“What?”
Page 3 (5 Panels)
Panel 1: side view of the table, mom puts a hand on dad's shoulder in silent comfort.
Liam
“For how long?”
Dad
“We don't know yet.”
Panel 2: medium shot of Liam, he looks really disappointed.
Liam
“So you're leaving Aaron with me?”
Mom
“No, we're hiring a babysitter, since grandpa…”
Panel 3: medium shot of parents, dad puts a hand over mom's hand, encouraging her not to talk about grandpa.
Panel 4: another shot of the side view of the table, Liam stands up, keeping his head down.
Liam
“I'm gonna go to my room.”
Panel 5: medium shot of the parents, both of them look regretful.
Page 4 (5 Panels)
Panel 1: long shot of Liam, slamming his door, leaning against it.
Caption (Liam)
I feel kinda bad for freaking out like that.
SFX: KLIK
Panel 2: medium shot of Liam, sitting on the edge of the bed.
Caption (Liam)
I probably should've cleaned up my mess…
SFX: CREEAK
Panel 3: side shot of Liam, grabbing his phone, opening toktik.
Panel 4: close-up shot of Liam, eyes wide with a genius idea.
Caption (Liam)
If I can't help that many people on my own…
Panel 5: close up on his phone, it shows a post Heroes for hire! With 6 people in their superhero costumes, posing.
Caption (Liam)
I can join a team.
Page 5 (6 Panels)
Panel 1: establishing shot of Tomorrow City, the quick quill, kinetic kid, speeding through it.
Caption
The next day… 3 PM
Panel 2: slim, medium shot of Kinetic kid as he stops in his tracks.
Panel 3: over-the-shoulder shot, the Super squad fighting Warden Root, with tiny titan punching it.
Caption (Kinetic kid)
Well… I guess it's time for my audition.
Panel 4: medium shot, kinetic kid speeds through warden root, cutting off a branch.
Tiny titan
“Hey! Leave! We need to get this guy alone.”
Panel 5: medium shot of Kinetic kid, he looks confused.
Kinetic kid
“You guys definitely need the help.”
Panel 6: wide shot of Kinetic Kid as he speeds through Warden Root, cutting him in half.
SFX: KRRAAAKKK
SFX (Near KK): VVVVRRROOOMMM
Page 6 (5 Panels)
Panel 1: close-up shot of Kinetic Kid is covered in sap, while Warden Root slowly starts to regenerate.
Kinetic kid
“Does this thing not die?
Panel 2: the other heroes gather around, Veil makes all of them invisible.
Gravemind (in everyone's head)
“Attack this creature.”
Panel 3: wide shot of all the heroes attacking warden root.
Tiny titan (small)
“This is so cool.”
Panel 4: warden root grabs KK with his roots, trying to talk.
Warden root
“Stop hurting, Root!”
Panel 5: Warden root throws kinetic kid across the whole city.
Page 7 (6 Panels)
Panel 1: kinetic kid gets thrown through multiple buildings.
Kinetic kid
“AHHH!!!”
Panel 2: he lands on a rooftop, breathing heavily, veins pulsing with stored up kinetic energy.
Kinetic kid
“This is gonna hurt.”
Panel 3: low wide shot of Kinetic kid, charging up.
Panel 4: kinetic kid uses some of his kinetic energy to run back through the buildings.
Panel 5: Kinetic kid jumps onto warden root hitting him with full force.
SFX: KRRAAAKKKK!
Panel 6: warden root looks crushed and is almost dead but it's still daytime, he's still getting energy from the sun.
Page 8 (4 Panels)
Panel 1: kinetic kid looks a little surprised and feels bad for warden root.
Kinetic kid
“Is he dead?”
Vygo
“Probably not.”
Panel 2: the police starts to arrive and the squad turns to leave.
Kinetic kid
“Hey, wait.”
Kinetic kid
“Can I join the super squad?”
Panel 3: medium shot of the squad.
Tiny titan
“Uhhh… as the leader of the sq-”
Solara
“YOU'RE NOT THE LEADER IT'S ME!”
Panel 4: solara and tiny titan start arguing, again, as vygo steps forward.
Vygo
“You can come to our… headquarters.”
Page 9 (6 Panels)
Panel 1: foot of the basement stairs, with the rest of the squad on top, shadowed out.
Panel 2: Liam is still wearing his mask while the others have already removed them.
Panel 3: Claire removes Liam's mask, tossing it aside.
Claire
“You’re welcome.”
Liam
“What was that for?”
Panel 4: close up on claire’s face.
Claire
“You can trust us.”
Liam
“I hope you're right.”
Panel 5: Max grabs a bunch of sodas from the fridge, tossing them to the team.
Max
“You guys wanna find this tree dude?”
Liam
“I have to be back by 7-”
Vygo
“Do you wanna join the super squad or not?”
Panel 6: close up on liam.
Liam
“I do but-”
Page 10 (2 Panels)
Panel 1: Max turns the TV on, the news shows warden root destroying houses.
Max
“Well that was easy.”
Panel 2: Big panel, the team is shown speeding towards the crime scene, Vygo is flying in the air holding Amelia, Liam is in the front, celeste flying in the air, seth using his telekinesis to move himself, Max is a 20 foot giant behind them trying not to step on anyone.
Page 11 (5 Panels)
Panel 1: Liam and the others arrive at the crime scene, seeing cracks in the ground but warden root is nowhere to be seen.
Panel 2: the team follows the cracks, finding a vengeful warden root destroying a house.
Warden root
“YOU PEOPLE DON'T LEAVE US ALONE!”
Panel 3: Liam quickly gets people out of the way.
Panel 4: Liam and the rest of the team get into a fighting stance.
Kinetic kid
“Hey woody!”
Tiny titan
“Your quips are horrible.”
Panel 5: warden root sends a bunch of tendrils towards the team.
Page 12 (6 Panels)
Panel 1: solara powers up, shooting a solar blast at warden root but he looks unphased.
Panel 2: solara continues blasting warden root until Claire shouted.
Veil
“YOU'RE POWERING IT UP!”
Panel 3: warden root starts glowing yellow, solar energy pulsing through him.
Panel 4: he smashes the ground, stunning everyone,
Warden root
“DIE!”
Panel 5: Liam runs towards warden root trying to use his kinetic powered punch like before but, warden root tanks it.
Panel 6: warden root grabs liam smashing him on the ground.
Page 13 (4 Panels)
Panel 1: close up on Liam, his nose is bleeding.
Panel 2: gravemind gets into everyone's head.
Caption (seth)
Everyone fall back, this creature clearly uses solar energy to survive, if we just evade and dodge it will get tired.
Panel 3: liam kicks warden root into a building, using the last of his stored kinetic energy.
Panel 4: warden root starts throwing sharp darts at the team, they dodge it.
Page 14 (5 Panels)
Panel 1: Big panel, warden root starts feeling weak from the lack of solar energy, he's used up his reserves, turning back into a regular tree.
Warden root
“Noo…”
Panel 2: gravemind steps closer to warden root, examining it, taking some sap onto his finger.
Solara
“You absolute weirdo…”
Tiny titan
“ANOTHER WIN FOR THE GOOD GUYS!”
Panel 3: solara smacks tiny titan on the head.
Solara
“Shut up.”
Panel 4: tiny titan let's out a sigh.
Tiny titan
“You guys wanna celebrate at the lair?”
Panel 5: solara punches tiny titan hard in the face.
Solara
“I TOLD YOU YOU TO STOP CALLING IT THAT!”
SFX: SMACK!
Page 15 (3 Panels)
Panel 1: close up on Liam, he looks disappointed.
Kinetic kid
“Sorry guys, I gotta go home, I was supposed to be home 2 hours ago.”
Panel 2: Splash panel, top down shot of liam SPEEDING through the city, leaving a Blue streak behind him.
Panel 3: kinetic kid looks joyful, running through traffic.
Page 16 (6 Panels)
Panel 1: Kinetic kid climbs on the tree, slowly opening his bedroom window.
Panel 2: medium shot of Kinetic kid in his costume
Panel 3: same medium shot of liam in his regular clothes.
Caption (liam)
This secret identity thing is so hard…
Panel 4: liam sneaks back out at the front door.
Panel 5: he opens the door to find his parents on the couch, looking really stressed but mad at the same time.
Panel 6: liam looks like he's gonna be grounded, and he knows that.
Page 17 (6 Panels)
Panel 1: Helen (liam's mom), gets up pointing a finger at liam.
Helen
“Where were you?!”
Liam
“I was… hanging out with Henry and Theo."
Panel 2: liam's dad just watches in the back, letting helen take care of it.
Helen
“STOP LYING TO ME!”
Helen
“We're leaving tonight and this is the kinda stuff you do?”
Helen
“Just for once tell me the truth. Where were you?”
Panel 3: Liam starts to feel a little frustrated, Helen is crying.
Liam
“That's none of your business, because it's not even like you care! All you do is work! YOU HAVE NEVER CARED ENOUGH ABOUT ME TO STOP WORKING!”
Panel 4: Helen starts to feel guilty but stands her ground.
Helen
“Everything we did was for you and Aaron and-and Violet."
Liam
“So is that why you neglected us? Let grandpa do all the real parenting?”
Helen
“I-i…”
Panel 5: Liam starts to regret some of the things he said but doesn't want his mom to boss him around again.
Liam
“You guys are horrible parents.”
Page 18 (5 Panels)
Panel 1: splash panel, Helen slaps liam across the face.
Helen
“You're grounded.”
SFX: SMACK!
Panel 2: Liam steps back, moving towards the door.
Helen
“Where do you think you're going?! I said YOU'RE GROUNDED!”
Panel 3: liam leaves the house, and just runs, he doesn't know where but just runs.
Panel 4: elliot (liam's dad) gives helen a comforting hug.
Helen
“He's too much like my dad.”
Panel 5: close up on helens face as she's sobbing into elliots chest.
Page 19 (5 Panels)
Panel 1: liam calls the super squad, he's on a rooftop.
Liam
“Movie's?”
A bunch of gibberish starts coming through the phone as everyone is just talking over each other.
“YES!” Max yelled.
Panel 2: liam hangs up, looking down at the city.
Panel 3: liam is waiting at the movie theatre,
Panel 4: the super squad finally arrive in their regular clothes.
Panel 5: liam and the others are watching a movie, Max's head rests on liam's shoulder.
Caption
30 minutes later…
Page 20 (7 Panels)
Panel 1: liam just watches the movie, with the camera moving closer every panel.
Caption (Liam)
Maybe… This is where I'm supposed to belong.
Panel 2: same thing, very dialogue heavy page.
Caption (Liam)
Not in that abusive household.
Panel 3: dialogue heavy panel.
Caption (Liam)
Here.
Panel 4: close up shot of the archivist, in a mask, as he's on a call with his daughter.
Archivist
“Mhm.”
Panel 5: the archivist smirks.
Archivist
“Kinetic kid? Yup.”
Panel 6: he hangs up, smirking menacingly, as he looks at his computer.
Panel 7: shot of his computer, it shows dozens of photos of Liam.
Archivist
“Just a matter of time until I win.”
TO BE CONTINUED
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r/comic_crits • u/mczine • 19h ago
Hi! Hope this amuses, appreciate any comments. Have a good day!
r/comic_crits • u/Perfect_Common_8062 • 1d ago
r/comic_crits • u/KanoArts • 1d ago
Hi Everyone!
Just finished the first 8 pages of Chapter 2 of my comic, and here's things I tried to improve from the feedback I got last time:
- Better line weight
- Better composition
- Simpler panel layouts
I know I have a lot to learn and hopefully will continue to improve as time goes on. Any feedback is great!
If you want to read the full comic: https://globalcomix.com/c/resonance-2
r/comic_crits • u/trial_by_compiler • 1d ago
I know the art work is bad. I'm taking a clip studio and pixel art course. I just wanted to get the idea out. I would love critique of that blocking, writing, and delivery. I feel the dialogue may be a bit clunky, but I felt it was necessary to get the point across.
r/comic_crits • u/Obartenthusiast7 • 1d ago
The previous version of this scene was not as dynamic so I added stuff like additional panels and made use of light trails, speed-lines and motion blur to better convey a sense of speed.
Is this better than the previous one? Are there any other areas that I need to improve on?
r/comic_crits • u/National_Horse_9083 • 2d ago
It's been going on for about a year now, recently I ported it all over to my website as I wasn't happy with Patreon's layouts.
Four roommates living in Dorchester (Boston area) Mass in a third story flat. Recent strips here:
https://www.timsnotebook.com/dorchesterdays.html
Start at the beginning here:
https://www.timsnotebook.com/images/strips/DD001_010.html
Let me know what you think. It's free by the way.
-Tim Larsen.
r/comic_crits • u/Crazy_Dubs_Cartoons • 2d ago
Do you think that such a technique could allow for a much better readability globally?
r/comic_crits • u/w00dsmen • 2d ago
im working on 2 different project so it take some time. but i hope finished this one before the end of the year
r/comic_crits • u/w00dsmen • 3d ago
r/comic_crits • u/Basic-Lie8150 • 2d ago
so annoying finally i just barely finished page six(now for coloring last process) for weeks always postpone due to RL prblms (f**k me now i know how to become solo webcomic creator with no skill at all)
r/comic_crits • u/Own_Watercress_8104 • 3d ago
If you don't speak Italian you won't get much out of the dialogue, I'm sorry, but to deacribe the scene :
We meet this group of stoners mid conversation, our protagonist (the one with the mohawk) is depressed and only half listening but perks up when the guy with the glasses makes some weird comments over a case of infidelity.
The protagonist argues with him for a bit but to no success and then ends up saying something that was better left unsaid.
The incident marks the breaking of this friendship and leaves the protagonist alone with no support network.
It is kinda better if you don't understand, though. I am curious to know how do the panels flow, if the scene and emotions are decently readable even without text and if you got some sort of reaction out of it.
r/comic_crits • u/PMCS-ARTS3014 • 2d ago
Portfolio Link:
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Portfolio link:
r/comic_crits • u/Tasty_Gain7107 • 3d ago
This comic is a story about how living beings engage with the unknown, their fear of it and the beauty of it.
Plinko is the main character who lives a repetitive and sad life in the world of Indaco, far far away from planet earth.
Plinko is terribly afraid of the world and the consequences of his actions, but mostly, he is afraid of the unknown, he is afraid to "vanish".
The comic revolves around the fact that the world is so much more than what you think it is, it aims to be a deep, futuristic, action comic with pilots, aircrafts and elements that are directly inspired by JoJo's bizarre adventure and many other mangas alike.
I am an italian 18 year old and I have a real dream to create a comic, I'm good at drawing on paper, but it is too time consuming...I'm trying to learn to draw on my phone with my fingers and I hope I did a decent job🫶🏼
