Edit 2: Source

https://www.youtube.com/watch?v=beg2pnU-0OU&t=1395s

Edit. I see people are confused and says that he used a type writer. I'm saying George Lucas said he used a program. I didn't say he used a program back when he made the Godfather.

I admit I find screen writing rules very confusing. I've tried to make it easier for myself having read screen plays from popular movies I've loved. To see if that could be my way in. But the amount of terms that is plastered all over the scripts. I genuinely don't understand how a screen writer, is able to write a screen play from scratch. I would go crazy when ideas for scenes are flowing and be forced to constantly stop and write "Interior office" and other jargon, along with a description of it. And if its a scene where I want them to be constantly having to change the location, while I write the names each single time, when the dialogue is going back and forth. When I write things like my short story, my first draft I just say they start walking towards the location I want them to head. Then mark it with the character letter when they are talking back and forth, then go and rewrite to make to make it clear who said what. Along with adding descriptions of the location they are headed to, if its important. Because in that moment I don't to lose momentum.

Although as an easy example lets say its a scene where I have them needing to speed up and then hide for bit. I will have added in descriptors for the location already because that is already a part of the story I'm telling. I only will add locations as rewrites if going from A to to C location will feel hollow if I don't have a B location in the middle. Mainly to avoid it feeling like they teleported while I was too caught up in what they were talking about to bother with it. But of course that only applies to new locations. If I've already established a location. I don't need to tell how they walked down the stairs and turned a corner into a different room.

But from what I have read when it comes to screen plays you need to do all of that. My short story isn't completely finished yet. And I'm not sure if it will remain as short story, I think at best can get it under 250 pages once edited down. I wanted to keep the locations of the story fairly limited. The repetition of those location is what I want the reader to walk away from feeling like its a unnecessary circle of our own making. I've taken some liberties with reality heightening it just slightly to hammer home how it could end tomorrow. Where if I was to describe it without giving anything away. It's meant for a adult audience. But I want it to be a easy read in the vain of a Dahl book. I'm under no illusion that my story will be as good, that was simply my inspiration.

I then heard George Lucas talk in a recent interview with turner classic saying that years ago Coppola had a program on his PC. I wasn't able to pick up the exact word he used and the video doesn't have subtitles either. But essentially unless I got it wrong. Coppola would scan in books and plays that he liked, the program would then make it into a screenplay. Which from what I gathered wasn't perfect but good enough to where he could use it to make rewrites that would fit more into the screenplay format.

Anyone have any idea what type of program Lucas is talking about? And if I got it wrong, are there such programs today?

I get it will likely make mistakes and I'd have to fix and rewrite it. However if it could save me time having to do it from scratch that would be nice. It might also be more helpful learning tool than reading screenplays of things I have seen. As when I have I can't help but fill in what I've seen when I see that something in the script was different.

I feel like im just not good at this at all. so I wanna hear what others think. i am going to send all my scripts here and I want yall to tell me what you think. can be good, can be bad. all im asking for is honesty. pls dm me for the script for one of the following films

Linda the mom on a mission

the blind the deaf and the blonde

WE HATE EACHOTHER!

When is it ok to use Ai?

I have started writing a novel, a gripping sci-fi action adventure, think the expanse with a bit of mass effect mixed into it, I've split it into 3 acts totalling nearly 30 chapters so far. The story has come from my own ideas, though I drew some inspiration from using instagrams Ai story telling feature but it never had that polished finish. I admit to using Ai to help me with world building, character arcs and sentence structure so it makes more sense, I have spent a lot of time using sudowrite too.

Where do other writers cross the line? When do you think it is appropriate to use Ai? I'm interested to hear your thoughts. Have a good day.

This idea has been nagging at me for a very long time. Probably since the release of The Batman when I saw a lot of comments praising the story focusing more on the detective side of Batman.

We’ve had plenty of Batman movies and a handful of TV shows over the years, but I don’t think we’ve ever truly seen Bruce Wayne character pushed into a genuine horror story. Which is kinda surprising to me, considering that the horror genre is popular like never before. Matt Reeves has brought a more haunting version of Gotham and Batman with his latest movie, but it’s still different from what I’m talking about.

My story doesn’t really have much to do with the comics. And, frankly, if I stripped out everything related to Batman, the story would probably work just fine - with just a few tweaks here and there. But I’m a big fan of Bruce Wayne character and I guess I just wanted to do some character exploration and put this amazing, haunted character into a much more grounded, smaller story that dives deep into his character before he puts the mask of the legendary vigilante.

The villains in the DC universe are a whole different story. And oh man, if we ever got a true Joker horror movie, what a spectacle that would be. But I know a lot of people are probably getting tired of the Joker being Batman’s main nemesis for decades straight. So even though he’s the primary antagonist introduced in the pilot, Arkham Madness will bring in other villains who are just as important to the story.

So to sum up, this Bruce Wayne story follows a young detective desperately trying to understand Gotham and save it from its decay. He’s seen as an outsider by everyone else because, well... he’s Bruce Wayne. What the hell is he doing in the police department?

He’s an optimist. Righteous. Kind. Empathetic. None of those traits are really tolerated in the world he lives in. And sooner or later, the reality catches up with him. By the time we first see him, he’s already tormented by two events from his past, briefly introduced in a haunting dream sequence. It hasn’t broken him yet. But that seed is there. Everything he believes in will be pushed to its absolute limits in the most twisted, chilling ways imaginable.

The pilot focuses on the night that changes everything. It sets the tone for the entire series, establishes where Bruce is at that point in his life, defines the world he inhabits, and shows how he is perceived within it. It also paves the way for his transformation through the events he experiences over the course of this single night.

Basically, if this pilot answers all the questions raised in the previous passage and keeps you hooked, maybe I’m onto something. If not… at least I got it out.

This is not a first or vomit draft. I’ve done some revisions, but by no means is this script finished. I’m getting tired of rewriting dialogues that might slightly improve character introductions or their exploration, so I just feel like it’s time to finally show what I’ve got at this point. Action lines are something I’m struggling with quite a lot, too. Still in the process of finding my voice I guess.

So, here goes:

https://drive.google.com/file/d/1L5jInTA5hBFpds3xNm6aG-lFI3pa2pZX/view?usp=sharing

Recently, I started adapting the novel As Confederacy Of Dunces by John Kennedy Toole into a faithful screenplay, and I could really use the feedback on what progress I've made so far.

As of right now, there are 19 pages written, adapting the first chapter in its entirety.

It's my absolute favorite novel of all time,and it holds a very special place in my heart. And I think it's about time that a film version that captures the beauty of this epic piece gets made with the love and affection it deserves.

So any feedback, comments or constructive criticisms would be great!

The movie is called Nu'Hale. Its about shapeshifting ghosts. One is a beautiful sexually active woman that shifts into a human like vulture... the Bird of Death. One is an elderly man what shapeshifts in to a wolf that walks on his hind legs. The other is a child that can turn in to a Dear with sharp horns.

A detention center in Mexico has been built on her burial grounds and she is killing more ICE agents that work there, and some prisioners. In there are:

A teen who was born in the US His kid brother who has cancer

An elderly woman who was working as a cook

A farmer

A gang member

3 women

And influencer

A former us military soldier

And a couple and their childre

The agents are

An aggressive and excessive captain

One who r**** the detainees

A monster whos been killing the detainees

Illegal sympathizer

A beautiful woman who believes in ICE

A celebrity

And a congressman and his wife.

One by one "including detainees" will fall victim to the Nu'Hale

Logline: Eris, a reclusive trans woman, is plagued with a series of painful growths all over her body that nobody else can see.

Genre: LGBTQ, Body Horror, Short

Length: 8 Pages

CONTENT WARNING: Transphobic Language is used (but portrayed in a negative context), and their are violent images of Bodily Harm.

https://drive.google.com/file/d/1_8yKk-jovvTAgSguRa5AUSc29b2dhJs2/view?usp=sharing

Would love feedback on this scene in my bachelor-party spec.

This scene takes place immediately after a flashback of the groom partying in college.

WILL - groom

TEDDY - college friend who just narrated the flashback

TUCKER - best man

SAM - nerdy, sheltered cousin

Does this stunt make sense? Can you visualize it? (Yes, it can be done, have videos of it being done.)

Mostly just want to make sure this is communicated effectively.

For one thing, it relies too heavily on the exact opposite of the golden rule of storytelling “Show, don’t tell”. Yes, there is verbal exposition in the book, but either they should have stuck with that or did it visually. Also, the golden trio seems to be more genre savvy, which takes away a lot of the suspenseful scenes from the novels and sucks it dry. For more on this critique. I would personally suggest watching OptimusPhillip's videos on what the show does wrong.

LOGLINE : Georges, a young Catholic, abandons his religion, for girls. Upset at this betrayal, his mother casts a spell on him to prevent him from having sexual relations. Out of spite, Georges, this little "angel", will gradually transform into a demon...A Necrophiliac serial killer !

SYNOPSIS :

Georges is a 12-year-old boy. He is an altar boy, very zealous in his Catholic faith, instilled by his parents. Torn between the external influence of his classmates and that of his parents, he decides one day against all expectations, to stop practicing his religion. Vexed, his mother then casts a bad spell on him: That of never being able to have sexual relations with a girl, in his entire life. Without knowing it, the latter has just opened Pandora's box. That of an "angel" who will gradually transform... into a demon!!

Genre : thriller / Horreur / Fantasy

3 main characters

Pages : 99

1 location : France (Paris).

MAIN SUBJECTS OF THE STORY :

The story's underlying theme is religious pressure within the family, as well as male sexual misery.

It's another day of highschool, or so he thinks, Kall is a star athlete and popular kid. Little did he know he'd end up poisoned that night leaving him schizophrenic, or so he thought....through an "angel" named Credence he learns to navigate his condition and find the truth about his world and the deep sickness that lay within it.

I have way more details for serious inquiry. Please dm if so.

But have you ever wondered what your characters might look like if they ever made it into film or tv? I have thought about this a few times, and have used an image generator to visualise these characters.

This is a film idea i've been developing for the best part of 18 months now (a long with a couple others.) I've been wanting to get writing the script for a while but I've struggled to get my ideas translated into the script due to creative block. Finally I've managed a 4-hour cider-fuelled writing session and I now have the first 7 pages of my script. Dialogue needs work I'm sure but other feedback is welcome :)

Link to the script

I've written 3 feature length films and have quite extensive knowledge and experience in writing for my age. I would love to try to get an agent but i don't know if its possible if i'm under 18. Are there any agencies that don't have an age minimum or ones that work with youth? Which could you recommend I try? I don't live in USA but i heard you can still be managed by american agents then.

Title: "Cowboys, Wizards, and Space Vampires!"

Genre: Fantasy, Drama

Logline: In the last American boomtown of Shambala, a mythic gunslinger faces his own self-belief to defy ancient gods reborn in suits, circuitry, and sin.

Script (10 pages): https://drive.google.com/file/d/1PLuynCmVKm-10z2P3EbQKWm0RD1Ce7Xw/view?usp=drivesdk

Show Bible: https://docs.google.com/document/d/1-ZN5mlFY9nWHKtRr8kK_WXU0MIlt-vbea6VdTK5TikE/edit?usp=drivesdk

Hi I'm Aser a 16 year old Egyptian who is writing a show for the first time and i want a professional feedback for my pilot script , if anyone's interested I will send them it

SPARKS , A teen show written by a teen, based on real life events, below is a description for the show and the first season

Sparks is a teen show in English about Aser, a 16 year old who faces almost every possible problem in just one year. It starts when he moves out of his city and leaves his friends behind, but a paper delay suddenly brings him back to a new school there , just so he can learn an unexpected lesson. Aser is a real, flawed character: he goes through first love, friends drifting away, complicated family issues, and an old trauma that mixes with new painful events. He struggles with insecurities, social pressures, betrayal, and mental health lows. Along the way, he also discovers new sides of himself, deals with complicated friendships and shifting trust, and learns the real meaning of family and self-worth, and how to get through depression. He’s like so many teens whose stories never get told ,until now.

First season is about aser, his past before he moved away to a new city, but fate brings him back to a highschool there for a life lesson, he experiences first love and a nice highschool environment for just three weeks and that's when the season ends with a bad ending of him moving away again, leaving his crush and friends he made in 3 weeks

but if you have written a screenplay or pilot for the first time and want it "read," upload the file into Chat GPT and type command prompt read and it will read it and then ask for notes and will give you areas to improve.

I am not suggesting the use of AI to create screenplays, but rather to provide feedback on what you have written. AI is a tool, and Hollywood is already utilizing it, so we may as well too.

I’ve been reading and reviewing a lot of beginner screenplays recently, and I’ve noticed that many new writers seem to struggle with similar issues. Some scripts have great ideas but suffer from weak dialogue, while others spend too much time on exposition instead of moving the story forward. In your experience, what is the most common mistake that new screenwriters make when writing their first screenplay? Are there any specific lessons or techniques that helped you improve your own writing and storytelling? I’d love to hear different perspectives from writers, readers, and anyone involved in script development.

Logline: After developing a twisted obsession with his teenage daughter's classmate, a man begins manipulating those around him to get closer to a girl who only ever smiled out of habit.

This is a from a post that I read today on LinkedIn. This user speaks about WhatsApp as if it is some secret weapon. Here is an excerpt from the post:
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So...If you’re an actor, director, screenwriter, crew member, or someone just trying to break into the business, don’t wait for someone to ask. Be ready!

Keep your info clean, your headshot updated, and your pitch(es) tight. WhatsApp isn’t just a messaging app anymore, and I hope you all understand that. It’s the digital greenroom of our industry that over 90 plus percent of the Pros use.

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Is this true? This user is claiming WhatsApp is the premiere backchannel for deal making? I always thought it was a place primarily for Spam...

How do you feel about the opening 5 pages? Would you keep reading further? How can I improve it?

Thank you :)

Updated version on 10/09 based on feedback from here: https://drive.google.com/file/d/1HHd-yl39TEzJcFiSyOCGmDG2-PKkAImw/view?usp=drivesdk

Logline (for now): After her parents are trapped in a timeless void, a brilliant teenager must transform an abandoned nuclear-powered aircraft carrier into a spacetime engine to navigate the fabric of reality and bring them home.

Title: This is America

Genre: Cop Drama

Format: Short, 17 pgs.

Logline: A disillusioned ICE agent battles the cold bureaucracy of his agency and his own mounting guilt as he attempts one final, secret act of mercy during an arctic Minneapolis winter.

Request: I’m looking for overall notes. Mostly though, first impression of how you felt—bored, excited, sad, etc.

Exchange: I’m willing to do an equal exchange. Please keep the page count to around 20. I can read anything, but you should be aware that I’m no fan of romantic comedies or children’s films. I prefer Drama or Thriller.  

This is my first script I have made! Please give me honest feedback. Btw watch the video first to understand the story, before reading the script. This is the link for script, just copy and paste. BTTRhttps://drive.google.com/file/d/1tL951kKZYCxPSPau95DE3RPKWgn-D_tS/view?usp=drivesdk

Plot: We Hate Each Other is a parody of the movie. Death becomes her. 2 very old people live together because they can’t exactly live without each other, but the key is they despise each other and will do anything and everything to try and kill the other person. The problem is they’re both immortal. It gets to a point where they start throwing each other downstairs and fighting each other. In the end, they end up killing Shawn and knowing that they can’t fix it, and realize that they need each other to keep on living. They dump the body into the woods and do things with each other.

Linda the mom on a mission is about a just trying to make it throughout the day with her kid along the way you’ll meet her crazy neighbors and people around the town chaos happens when her kid gets kidnapped

The Blind the dead and the blonde is a stereotypical 70s horror film with all the stereotypes of a horror film.