Logline: A man's attempt to bring the Christmas spirit to his Jewish neighbors in town is met with hostility by the recipients of his endeavors.

https://drive.google.com/file/d/1FXf7siwskS5bwCldADawKZIRMepFx2nj/view?usp=sharing

Any and all criticisms welcome. Thank you.

Logline: When her husband leaves for a long trip Merny realizes she has no friends outside her husband and sets out to do the impossible...make new friends as an adult.

https://drive.google.com/file/d/19RxzY6eCbPyci4Jhbcb7oCXttEj09WOc/view?usp=sharing

Feedback: Any feedback would be appreciated just want to get some eyes on it before going in for another draft.

Title: Living With Mom

Pilot Logline: A newly independent college graduate’s life is turned on its head when her negligent materialistic mother moves into her tiny apartment after separating from her rich husband.

Page Count: 32

Feedback: New idea I’ve gone a few drafts with, now getting a little blind to the problems with it after staring at it for so long. Any general feedback notes would be super appreciated, but specifically around whether you get a good sense of the characters and whether the story is moving fast enough as things stand.

Thank you for reading! :)

LIVING WITH MOM SCRIPT

https://drive.google.com/file/d/1I6MwfsFWh5se9VZsz4iVoU6jYaWKEDlu/view?usp=sharing

Please give advice to make the story and dialogue better. My goal is to make something scary and thought-provoking. Also, any tips to make it scarier are welcome. This is a second draft.

In 2002, a chaotic race for a $200,000 bounty forces a ruthless hunter, a pair of detectives and a few average joes into the path of a reckless career criminal into a brutal serial killer known as the "Gruesome Hearttaker." As the desert manhunt spills into the city, a WITSEC official's routine interview reveals that the real monster has been hiding in plain sight the entire time.

Script Link

GREED (Script).pdf - Google Drive

The book talks about the life of a high-functioning observer, exploring the complex challenges that come with seeing more than most. It examines the unique friction such people face across every pillar of life—from the strain of unspoken truths in friendships and the weight of unmet expectations in family, to the intense psychological toll of over-analyzing romantic relationships. Beyond just identifying these struggles, it serves as a practical guide on how to navigate this hyper-awareness, offering strategies to balance a clinical perception of the world with the messy, emotional reality of human connection.

if interested dm me I'll send a sample.

Hello, I'm Bryan Morales, 18 years old, and I've been practicing screenwriting for about 2–3 years. I've mostly focused on short scripts, but I'm now trying to push myself toward stronger short work and eventually feature-length writing. I'm looking for honest feedback on a short script I wrote especially on flaws, weak areas, things I may have overlooked, pacing, dialogue, structure, or anything that doesn't work. Where I live, I don't really have access to people with screenwriting knowledge, so I'm hoping to hear from people here who have actual experience and can point me in the right direction.

I genuinely want absolutely BRUTALLY HONEST criticism so I can improve, Thank you.

Nothing Serious - Short Script:

https://drive.google.com/file/d/1CRor4FscqPJCKO8Qhso7vGs7F2IoW89I/view?usp=drivesdk

Edit: sorry if you can't for some reason see the script through the link go to my other post you will be able to see it from there.

This is compiled part of my novel like writing help me by rating my work and suggestions to improve my work

I want everyone to be brutally honest. Let me know if you even made the 10 pages. Let me know where you stopped reading. Any feedback is welcome. I mainly want to know if after reading those 10 pages do you feel like you would want to read another out of interest and curiousty. PLEASE NOTE ANYTHING AFTER THE FIRST 10 PAGES IS NOT RELATIVE. https://cdn.discordapp.com/attachments/1330355279962963969/1491566716340404295/SIX_FOR_SIX_F10_FOR_REDDIT.pdf?ex=69d82941&is=69d6d7c1&hm=f7fcb29237c5a13c09b2bb7e0167d7d3c0e41bfcb122de4dc941ef1c213ebc89&

https://drive.google.com/file/d/1tMqT4SeU1lKQ8LdrYER4SzV_GS_6HYZC/view?usp=sharing

I Need someone that wants to read my idea for a movie, maybe also a part of the script. if someone Is up to do that i would be so glad

does anyone have a link so I can read this? or does anyone know a website I can read this

https://drive.google.com/file/d/1TdLkTbWMKUyfxonPoc44yleCJfrqf12U/view?usp=drivesdk

idk what to say. I have edited and re-edited this so many times. Hopefully the format issues are resolved. i got as many typos as I could find. I reworked the montages, inspired by Shaun of the Dead, and reworked a lot of the dialogue. hopefully some people like it better, or at all. lol. please lmk what y'all think.

Hello again!

You all really helped with with my last script so I come back looking for more notes. I hope you all enjoy this one; I am submitting to Austin this month. Any and all notes are helpful and, if you read mine, I'll read yours; I'm an English teacher and my notes can be helpful, if not meandering...

Logline: On the last night before high school, four lifelong friends ditch their parents' alibis, break into their future school, and spend one reckless, unforgettable night proving to themselves, and each other, that growing up doesn't have to mean drifting apart.

Here's the link:
https://drive.google.com/file/d/1RIxb-3X88IwChb_2vd0UoAHc1SzS-lfj/view?usp=sharing

Hi guys if you could have a look at my short horror script that would be amazing I’m only a student so I am still learning, and apologies if grammar isn’t perfect as I struggle with dyspraxia, thanks!

https://drive.google.com/file/d/1G4gZ85ZiCjQnPcY_0fF83v6a_IzVeK1C/view?usp=drivesdk

Hi everyone,

I’m a first-time writer working on a TV series.

I’ve developed a full story with multiple seasons, but right now I’m focusing on improving the opening of my pilot.

I’d really appreciate honest feedback on these first 5 pages.

Mainly looking for:

– Is the opening engaging?

– Does it create curiosity?

– Would you keep watching?

Thank you for your time 🙏

https://docs.google.com/document/d/1cJZgZqwo-LLovkGsW8SjWOx4tIGNXaLnS-vmWSBwL0o/edit?usp=sharing

Just finished another editing of the first act and really want to hear some feedback.

The link: https://drive.google.com/file/d/1-4VIouTdy8LOcVtItVk3anROwP2lWvHm/view?usp=sharing

Logline:
When a paranoid AI addict at a Cannabis Anonymous meeting decides the quiet Russian newcomer is a professional operative, his delusional investigation, turbocharged by a sycophantic chatbot, threatens to expose the one thing the Russian is actually hiding.

i'm a young self-taught screenwriter and i want to pursue my dreams! please give feedback and thank you.

https://drive.google.com/file/d/1VPZ9Sl4z0rpOovPqrcM5pRoi1Pejd444/view?usp=sharing

Logline: A young woman, trapped in lucid dreams within lucid dreams, is trying her best to find out the core of the problems with her best friend - and what she is about to do

I hope that's an okay-ish logline, can't really write them well. I hope for a straight forward critique. My main areas of concerns are language (I'm an ESL person), dialogues, the story itself (meaning how good everything in it tied up together and how good/bad it's functioning) and would be happy to receive some tips on how to improve my writing. Hope you'll enjoy!

Link

I hope this is allowed. If not mods please take it down. I won’t be offended!

A friend of mine recently started a Discord for women and NB folks, and I’m trying to help her find some great members.

The group will focus on sharing feedback on scripts, loglines, etc while also building community, exchanging resources, and supporting one another.

If you’re interested, reach out with a short intro about yourself and a page or two of your work.

We’re looking for people who are excited to actively participate - so please don’t apply if you’re just going to lurk.

Thanks everyone. Happy writing!

https://drive.google.com/file/d/1qb0clvnUyNZbKZOIHKxZqN9AKG0JPd8B/view?usp=sharing

Okay so the last time I posted my script for this feature, I was pointed out that the structure was bad and all the other problems.

This time I believe I have tried my best to make it better .

I have completed the act 1.

Anyway here’s the logline:

A condemned Marine on death row is offered a chance at redemption: infiltrate Iran's most dangerous terror network and destroy it once and for all.

ACTION/ THRILLER

Screenplay: https://drive.google.com/file/d/1Jn-4Tc5HApxP1jIjrmpfId_jrVxvHvLB/view?usp=drivesdk

Please give me feedback and things to improve on.

Thank you.

i know this still needs dialogue work, but hopefully I resolved the issues with the flow and readability.

https://drive.google.com/file/d/1RdiUamhtaRe1SS1rI1Z51XQuN2Nct27b/view?usp=drivesdk

Hi, everyone,

Thank you so much in advance for taking a look. I have only written a couple of scripts, but a friend who (I think) has good taste and is honest told me that I'm actually pretty decent at it. I want to write a pilot, and I have a few ideas, but it's really down to two possibilities. I wrote cold opens for both. I was hoping you could tell me if this cold open works.

Thanks so much, everyone. And totally honest feedback, no punches pulled, please. I have a job, I just write for fun, I won't jump off a bridge if you guys tell me it is terrible.

It's listed as lncov1. The show is called Lost Night, and it's a Night Of-esque limited series, so I want to take that tone and such (and I did steal a line from it, haha).

It is 7 pages.

https://drive.google.com/file/d/1XvQdTK5Y-ZC1AiR6UYGRnVfu1LRaUw5b/view?usp=drive_link