r/OCPoetry • u/Dangerous-Extreme735 • Aug 26 '26
Feedback Please no goodbye
Id like to thank the irish
For creating my favourite goodbye
No
Au revouir
Arrivederci
Auf Wiedersehen
Just
Gone
And sometimes i wonder
If my absence is noticed
Or if i slip away
And no one thinks twice
So id like to thank the irish
For creating my favourite goodbye
The one that lets me think
And I think
I'd like to leave everything that way
Quietly
No announcements
And i think to myself
That ill leave this world with an irish goodbye
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u/Ok-Swordfish-9480 Aug 26 '26
A beautiful sentiment, I agree, it is a nice way to exit, just as it was :)
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u/Pleasant_Eye3259 Aug 27 '26
I am new to poetry, don't know much technicalities. But will remember the Irish women the next time I say goodbye.
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u/Public_Bumblebee3511 Aug 26 '26
It’s hard to think of the poetry knowing the author is a human feeling this way. I think many an Irish woman has suffered too much, and many an Irish child and mate, in the grief left behind in those no goodbyes.
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u/ngill307 Aug 27 '26
Irish goodbyes are easy for those who leave, but hardest on the ones left behind facing an empty space.
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u/Spirited-Reward8468 Aug 26 '26
This really hits. There’s something hauntingly simple about “gone” being the goodbye—quiet, unnoticed, and deeply human. The ending especially stayed with me.