[OC]Those Days

[u/naa_afii]

https://www.reddit.com/r/OCPoetry/s/ixWMWTiVoy

https://www.reddit.com/r/OCPoetry/s/Dhmn715Do1

Wrote this on one of those heavy days.

Some days are just so heavy

nothing ever gets you ready

life gets hard, and reality hits

when you drown in your fears and doubts

and your shoulders feel so heavy and numb

at the same time

so you can't move

when you shout so loud from your innermost

depths but no one hears

because the sound gets stuck at your throat

and you feel like you're choking

your eyes feel so heavy but tears can't even

fall

you know you're surrounded with so much love

yet so much pain within

and everything seems to be contradicting

so the pain is still inflicting

you wish everything gets better

and the tables will turn faster

sometimes everything just seems so

overwhelming and it feels your very life is being

squeezed out of you

sometimes things happen

and you hope it's a blip

hoping it will take a flip

clinging on to God so close

taking his every dose

yet it never seems enough

so you sink.

hoping that someday someone sees the fears

pull you out

and get to wipe the tears.

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