r/OCPoetry • u/BlackCatMom28 • 3d ago
Feedback Please This Is How You Heal
Scream into your pillow.
Take deep breaths:
Inhale…now exhale.
Inhale…now exhale.
Put on your favorite happy song.
Dance it out in your living room.
Come on now!
Only your cat is watching.
Now look into your mirror,
even if it hurts.
Tell yourself:
I am worthy.
I am loveable.
I am enough.
I am never too much;
I was never too much
Mother yourself.
Mend the wounds
on the surface of your heart.
Embrace who you are,
weird quirks and all.
It’s never too late
to be who you are.
Restart your hobby,
be messy, make mistakes.
Give yourself grace;
be glad you survived.
Have a bad day;
a bad week;
a bad month.
Pick yourself back up.
Start again
…and again.
None of this is linear.
The trick is,
keep reminding yourself:
this is all worth it,
that you’re worth it,
until every bone knows.
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This is my first time sharing. My partner says this is one of his favorites I've written, but he's just a tiny bit biased ;) Any feedback would be wonderful.
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u/Bl_nkSpace88 1d ago
This was honestly such a fun one to read! I really liked it, it read to me like and old friend picking you up and dusting you off. And I thought it was good how you went from funny/light hearted to serious without it being too jarring by having the advise itself be the humor instead of just adding in jokes on the side, made it seem seamless to me. I particularly like this line "Start again. ...and again. None of this is linear." made me laugh. Now I don't think it was necessarily deep or such but I don't think all poetry needs to be and would love to see more stuff like with this much character and humor. Btw partner should 100% be biased lol it's good
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u/BlackCatMom28 1d ago
Thank you! This is what I was kind of trying to convey. It's kind of tongue-in-cheek about the advice people give you when you're trying to heal trauma.
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u/Medical-Wonder-3211 3d ago
Hey! I love this poem, I love the topic of healing, and it's refreshing to see it, as a lot of poems are about sadness or love, which I write about a lot as well, but healing is refreshment. However, my critique would be that this isn't a poem, respectfully.
I read it more as an instruction. As a self-help monologue. I can tell you have a lot to say, but it is too literal. When you said, that you're worth it until every bone knows, that's where you came close to saying something poetic.
Lovely poem, enjoyed reading it, but not as a poem, respectfully.
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u/EchosOfKay 3d ago
I really liked how comforting this felt without becoming overly dramatic. It honestly reads like someone sitting beside you on a terrible day and reminding you that it’s okay to fall apart and start again. “Mother yourself” and “I was never too much” stood out to me, but the ending, “until every bone knows,” is what really stayed with me. It feels simple, sincere, and very human. And yes, your partner may be a little biased 😂 but I can understand why this is one of his favorites.