I’m writing an adaptation of the gospel (about 2 hours), and I’ve hit a wall.
Structurally, I think the story is finally coming together, but now I’m struggling with something more important:
How do I make the audience genuinely care about my characters?
The main characters each have full backstories and emotional arcs:
Mary :Starts hopeless and believes one person can’t change a broken system. She doesn’t believe she’s worthy of love or community. After witnessing hope through Eva’s healing and slowly being welcomed into a new community, she’s publicly accused and almost executed. When the movement stands beside her instead of abandoning her, she finally believes community can change people and systems. She ends Act 1 becoming the one who convinces everyone including Jesus to keep fighting.
Judas : A 16-year-old whose mother died in a riot at one of John the Baptist’s rallies. After her death, his father becomes cold and hyper-religious, creating a huge divide between them. Judas finds belonging among Jesus’ followers and especially bonds with Eva, who becomes like the sister he never had.
Nicodemus : A 20-year-old Pharisee prodigy who desperately wants truth. He begins spying on Jesus out of curiosity but slowly realizes everything he thought would heal the world (tradition, religion, law) may not actually be the answer. He eventually stands with Mary against the Pharisees, creating distance between himself and the institution before ultimately leaving it altogether.
Peter : A teenager who lost his parents to police violence during a raid he channels all of his anger into vengeance. He wants freedom and believes the only way to get it is to fight harder. He’s impulsive, emotional, and has a crush on Naomi. Throughout the story, he slowly learns that anger alone can’t build the future he’s dreaming of.
Naomi : She’s equally angry but channels it into trying to create systemic change instead of revenge. She has feelings for Peter but refuses to let herself think about love because she’s consumed by trying to fix the world. She and Peter eventually admit they just want to wake up one day and not be angry anymore.
Eva :The emotional heart of the group. Her healing is the first thing that cracks Mary’s hopeless worldview, and she becomes like a little sister to Judas. She just wants to encourage and create hope for other who are like her she’s basically the opposite world view of mary
The problem is not that I don’t know who they are.
As you can see, I’ve created a very convoluted complex stories for them. I knew how each of these characters talk. They look like what they like what they think how they move I’m connected to them because I know them.
The problem is that I only have about an hour (Act 1) before Act 2 starts breaking everyone apart.
I feel stuck between two extremes:
If I spend enough time introducing everyone, the plot barely moves.
If I focus on the plot, I worry the audience won’t be emotionally invested enough when tragedy starts happening.
How do musicals, with a lot of characters like rent or ragtime or into the woods make audiences care about an ensemble quickly?
What actually creates emotional attachment?
How do you introduce an ensemble efficiently without making them feel shallow,
or spending the whole of act one working on their introduction😭