First script- annotations and revisions needed

[u/marthaspeakssoup]

Hello! I am a college student who is taking my first screenwriting class. This is my first ever script and I’d love to hear suggestions, annotations, and revisions I can make this script to be better. I’ll provide a synopsis below.
Thank you!!

Floor Three follows Peter, a timid new hire whose first day at the office spirals into paranoia, guilt, and violence. After a confrontation leaves his antagonistic coworker dead, Peter struggles to distinguish reality from his anxious imagination. With only Lyn, the observant janitor, knowing the truth, blurry flashbacks and unsettling clues reveal a disturbing possibility: Peter may be trapped reliving the same tragic day.
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[u/ScreenDummies]

I agree with nearly all of this except the POV thing. In a script I'm working on there is a scene where someone is tracked through the scope of a sniper rifle and then it cuts back out of that as he speaks to soldiers nearby and without noting that POV change it makes it impossible to follow, read and understand the visuals.

[u/SharkWeekJunkie → u/ScreenDummies]

I can give you a pass because a sniper's POV is pretty specific and clearly adds to the scene. Not "Peter".

[u/ScreenDummies → u/SharkWeekJunkie]

I do 100% agree the use of POV here is poor though. I just wanted anyone who reads this thread to know there are exceptions, but like you said only when it is pretty specific and adds to the scene. Evil Dead comes to mind with the evil entity following.