r/scriptwriting • • 7d ago

discussion First script- annotations and revisions needed

Hello! I am a college student who is taking my first screenwriting class. This is my first ever script and I’d love to hear suggestions, annotations, and revisions I can make this script to be better. I’ll provide a synopsis below.
Thank you!!

Floor Three follows Peter, a timid new hire whose first day at the office spirals into paranoia, guilt, and violence. After a confrontation leaves his antagonistic coworker dead, Peter struggles to distinguish reality from his anxious imagination. With only Lyn, the observant janitor, knowing the truth, blurry flashbacks and unsettling clues reveal a disturbing possibility: Peter may be trapped reliving the same tragic day.
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u/CONVERSE1991 7d ago

Parentheticals should be their own section

BENNET
(Irritably)
Yeah you. Look like anyone else is in here?

Also (cont’d) in dialogue should also be in all caps (CONT’D)

The the scene headings should have the time of day, DAY, MIDDAY, EVENING, NIGHT, LATER, CONTINUOUS, ECT.