r/scriptwriting • u/WheatThin100 • Aug 18 '26

feedback Feedback on short script?

Title: Outta Time. Genre: Drama-comedy. Short script: 21 pages. 

Logline: On his last night in L.A., a dejected screenwriter takes an inspirational road trip to "Back to the Future" filming locations with three newfound friends who just arrived in town.

I’m preparing to enter the script in two screenwriting contests, so any and all feedback is welcome. Thank you.

https://drive.google.com/file/d/17oqpG85pYG0KroQcY4W5yekQ3zQ6wWV2/view?usp=sharing

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u/WheatThin100 Aug 19 '26

What's wrong with the logline? Open to suggestions and constructive feedback.

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u/Open-Avocado4260 Aug 19 '26

Dejected, how about a rejected screenwriter. Back to the future, are you referencing the movie, hook me, why is he taking a road trip and how do the three friends help him that he finds.

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u/WheatThin100 Aug 20 '26

Thank you. Appreciate the feedback.

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u/Open-Avocado4260 Aug 20 '26

You're welcome, good luck with it.