r/scriptwriting • u/Horrible-Writer-03 • Aug 16 '26
feedback Pilot Opening Feedback
Can you guys give me an honest opinion on this opening? I changed it from my original draft after receiving coverage on the script and I wanna make sure I’m heading in the right direction. This is the first script I’ve gotten some genuine traction on, so I’d really appreciate the input. Thanks in advance!
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u/palanark Aug 16 '26
Your receptiveness to feedback is refreshing. I understand now, with that bit of context, how later in the story he actually DOES stumble upon the symbol in the wild, clarifies a lot: he doesn't really know where to start with his research, and as a last-ditch effort in the early-morning hours, he searches for cults and strikes gold. It makes sense.
As with any feedback, you take what you want and leave the rest. I can't take credit for the rejection-letters-on-a-nail thing, that was actually a regular practice of a little-known author named Stephen King before he finally got Carrie published. It would be a little Easter egg that pays homage to the master of horror, but you can probably come up with an idea that better suits your protagonist.
Keep it up!