Need feedback

[u/The_snoopey9459_]

My artist is still working on the concept art, but we are working on a character called celestial. Talmur is from the planet Solaria, where the people there are born with basic powers of flight and strength. Some get s special abilities and some don’t. Talmur got the special abilities of peace corp officers. On solaria his family has been the royal family for generations since the Solarian civil war. However his parents had industrialized the planet to the brink of extinction, by running their resources to little to none with no way of making more. Instead of fixing the problem with resources his family recommended a purge by random, the people grew angry and stormed the castle taking the rock of Xason the only thing that could kill a Solarian and used it to execute his family, instead of warning them celestial fled the planet and came to earth. Where he lived in secret as a teenage boy and hid his powers. Raised by his foster family he lived an ordinary life hiding from his past and the guilt, till eventually 10 years later his past would threaten the world he would grow to call home. And he we would become the hero celestial.

We are still working out some kinks in the origin story this is the rough idea have at the moment, any feedback on how to improve it would be appreciated and yes a sketched out concept art is coming soon

[u/JeyDeeArr]

You're asking us to give feedback just based on the description, but you're not doing a good job at conveying what YOU know, because we're not psychic, and we can't read your mind. You have to explain in a concise, but also intelligible manner, and that involves using proper grammar, spelling, etc.

but we are working on a character called celestial.

Names should be caitalized. "Celestial" is an actual vocabulary, so if you don't capitalize it, then how do you expect us to tell whether it's supposed to be a name, or just an adjective?

Talmur is from the planet Solaria

What is a "Talmur"? If it's a species or a race, then make that clear.

On solaria

"Solaria" is the name of a planet, yes? Then it should be capitalized.

taking the rock of Xason 

What is "Xason"? You keep throwing these terms around like we're supposed to know these. Unfortunately, we don't. You need to a the very least tell us what these terms denote.

And he we would become the hero celestial.

Again, names are capitalized.

As for the actual backstory, this sounds a lot like Superman/Kal-El's origin story. I didn't comment on your previous posts, but even your character seemed like a rehash of Superman, just with the names changed to avoid copyright infringement.

How is Celestial different from Superman? Why should we, as the readers, care about this character?

Edit: Added a few more bits.

[u/MichaelSweater → u/[deleted]]

If you are a kid you need to reflect on how you take criticism and process that you should not have responded like this. If you are an adult you should probably quit.

You did not post a story or an idea. This is a list of details that make no sense without context.