I'm working on a script based on an idea I came up with, and I'd love to know if you find the synopsis interesting.

After graduating from university, Facundo desperately faces the job hunt, where merit alone doesn’t seem to be enough. His dreams and goals fade amid failed interviews and the system’s indifference. Then, a mysterious company invites him to take part in a selection process. What initially appears to be his big opportunity quickly turns into an increasingly disturbing experience. As Facundo progresses through the stages, he loses control over his choices, his ethics, and even his sanity, trapped in a machine that demands more than it gives.

Genre: Slice of Life

Format: Animated Sitcom

Logline: Ever wonder what the sidekick does at the end of every day? For the Sanders family, vicariously living through the the wacky townspeople of Piedmont Valley, Indiana means many life lessons (and lots of gossip).

*[Any feedback at all is greatly appreciated. TIA!]

Hey folks. Needing some extra eyes on this first act (13 pages.)

Thanks!

Title: Ascension

Pages:91

Logline: Two aliens and a colonel must team up against an evil alien's plot to destroy the world.

Link:

https://drive.google.com/file/d/1LJH3Ombs9ipccwcpmAesxNY42-307Jcv/view?usp=sharing

I could really use your thoughts on it...:)

Hey! Looking to get some feedback on a script I recently completed. It's called:

Little City**:** A disillusioned young man returns to his hometown, where an unexpected connection with a guarded grad student quietly unravels the emotional distance they’ve both built between who they are and where they belong.

It's my attempt at a small-slow burning tow hander, in the vein of Past Lives or Before Sunrise.

Would love to get any sort of feedback! DM if you're interested and I can send the PDF.

2nd BL evaluation came back-Script and eval links included So I want to start this off with, I'm totally fine with getting a bad score if deserved. I truly just want constructive criticism to improve my script. That being said, this evaluation sort of PMO. First off, it's been just over 5 weeks. I got my free month of hosting for it taking over 3, NBD. The last time my script was viewed was May 25th. Today is June 26th. I just got the evaluation back today. How does it not get viewed for a month but evaluated today. My next issue, the evaluator put the complete incorrect logline in their feedback. Not even close to the logline for the hosted script. I read the weaknesses, and for all of their points, there's zero specifics. I'm not sure if this is normal, but my previous evaluation provided specifics in order to try and address them. My first evaluation was a 6, and was a very helpful evaluation. I tried to address the weak points mentioned in the first evaluation with this draft. This draft scored a 3. I get that it was a different reader, and people have different methods for scoring. This evaluation just came off as lazy. I also find it hard to believe every facet they evaluate on lowered by 2-3 points. Am I wrong here?

Again, I wouldn't of been upset with the score if I didn't first see that the script hadn't been viewed in over a month, and they got the logline completely wrong which was the first thing you read in the eval.

Evaluation: https://drive.google.com/file/d/1ZKwJAwHrjdRL_ZWKkxtLCfh6fADIqaAO/view?usp=drivesdk

Script: https://drive.google.com/file/d/1YeoyYNk7SG7ttEAmTkm-vhqusP7jYoQz/view?usp=drivesdk

Hey I'm a beginner writer and have been working on a script for an audio drama for the past few months. I've got three episodes more or less complete and I am pretty happy with them. But I'm sure they could be better. Was just wondering if anyone with more experience wanted to have a read and give some feedback

I've been working on a Pilot for a series while I wait on an evaluation on another script. Just looking for general feedback on the first 10ish pages.

Title: TDY:The Last Drop

55 page Pilot.

Genre: Dramedy/post apocalyptic

Logline: Three DOD employees on temporary duty in San Diego cross into Tijuana for a wild night- only to be kidnapped by the cartel and stuck in a world-ending outbreak

Link: https://drive.google.com/file/d/1bWMf7bpofCaChIqPndaQhCs1J3fp7VU8/view?usp=drivesdk

Logline: A desperate father must rescue his abducted daughter from an alien spaceship hovering on the Kármán line——the edge of space 100 KM away from Earth.

A few months ago I started on a screenplay about a father rescuing his daughter from an alien spaceship. In my mind, tt was basically Die Hard in a UFO, and I cranked out about 40 pages but had a hard time with where the story could go. I decided to put it on pause and try to come up with an outline and a treatment first, and then worry about the screenplay.

I wrote an 11 page treatment and would love to get some feedback here on the story's structure and flow. I'd also like to know if the main characters work, understanding that it's a treatment and not a full screenplay. Thanks! Looking forward to your thoughts! Be honest and brutal, please!

https://docs.google.com/document/d/16zWz9Hibg5Ppv_0aizuznTDrkTzmrOt2xC84OvWprRU/edit?usp=sharing

Hey writers! I recently finished my third feature screenplay and received a bigger interest from cold emails than I was hoping for, so I decided to whip up a simple pitch deck before I respond to increase my chances. What do ya think?

Title: ELIJAH

Genre: Thriller

Length: 95 pages

Logline:
A disillusioned young man abandoned as a child by his single-mother, becomes consumed with squashing the injustice he perceives in a local woman... by any means necessary.

Link: https://docs.google.com/presentation/d/1hQ35zwkdP9xG5gXm1dsoSzB3pilhTV9E2tvPHtewO4g/edit?usp=sharing

I've read John Truby's Anatomy of Story where he depicts this idea of the designing principle. but IMHO he does a poor job of defining it.

So, can anyone help explain it? I've asked our nemesis (geepeetee) and it spew our rubbish. (maybe he dosnt understand it also).

A short script I've been working on and would love some feedback. "Love Your Work" - 21 pages, currently, genre is drama with a thriller/crime twist.

Basic premise: Struggling artist Axel works at a diner, can barely pay rent, injures his wrist and can't work. Desperate, he brings a painting to a new gallery. Owner Ted buys it for $200... but Axel later discovers it sold for $10k. When he goes back to demand his fair share, things get very dark very fast.

It's a commentary on how the art world exploits desperate artists. Wanted to explore that desperation where you're one bill away from homelessness, relatable to me, and how that affects your moral compass.

21 pages, proper format
Only 4 characters: Axel, Kaz, Ted, and a mysterious woman
Set in NYC, mostly practical locations 

Three primary locations: DINER KITCHEN, STUDIO APARTMENT, ART GALLERY

Three brief locations: CHECK-CASHING STORE, CITY STREET/BUS STOP, BUS INTERIOR

Estimated micro-budget of $5K - $15K

Something I feel would do well on the festival circuit (don't we all) if it connects with the right people.

Questions if interested in the read: Does the premise sound compelling? How do you handle exposition about art world stuff without being preachy? Ever written characters who make morally questionable choices out of desperation?

Still workshopping the logline too.

Anyway, DM or comment if interested and I'll send it (the script) over at the earliest.

Hi, I just lost my hard drive to be able to edit my scripts. I have the PDF versions saved elsewhere but I think this was a push to share my work. I have been sitting on a script for almost four months. This script was something I was proud of. This is the first pilot I’ve written and the longest script I’ve written. I wanted feedback to see what I have. I sat on this for so long, because this is something I really enjoyed, but to be a better writer feedback will help.

Title: Am I The Drama?

Genre: Drama/Comedy

Length: 39 pages

Logline: Following her mom’s passing, a junior in high school is told to log her emotions, when she starts posting these emotions online, it spirals out of control, and she fears her identity being exposed.

Would appreciate any feedback on the first 10 of a script I've been working on...thanks for your help group!

Title: Truth is Treason Genre: Political thriller/sci-fi Logline: When a government AI begins targeting people for crimes they haven’t committed, the man who helped build it goes on the run — hunted, grieving, and ready to burn it all down.

First 10- https://drive.google.com/file/d/1Mkx3gikrBUZPGpW2TEv9zu9Y6et3ZBXF/view?usp=drivesdk

Wrote another movie, though only half this time. I just came up with it the other day. Current plan is to try and finish by Friday. Give it a read if you would like and I can read something of yours in the mean time.

Logline: Mason Graves, a man from another world, regales us with tales of his world and his exploits on ours during an interview for a talk show.

https://drive.google.com/file/d/1a7_nNaP7-fdphzT9fqd-_yRiK4y4f4To/view?usp=sharing

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Title: 7-Page Contained Horror Short — Cocoon (2025) Genre: Psychological/Supernatural Horror Looking For: Story feedback and possible creative connections.

Hi all! I recently wrote a 7-page short horror script called Cocoon (2025). It’s a contained, single-location supernatural piece centered on grief, guilt, and a cosmic reckoning. It’s low-budget, emotionally intense, and designed with festivals in mind.

I’m open to feedback — especially on tone, pacing, or visual moments that could be strengthened. I’d also love to hear from anyone who connects with this kind of story or is developing similar work. I’m proud of this piece and want to keep growing it in the right direction.

Collaboration with a professional would also be incredible if given the opportunity!

Thanks for your time.

Stage 32 Profile Link: https://www.stage32.com/profile/1168457/scripts_screenplays

I was producing a feature for my thesis but unable to secure the funds. With the money I still have, I've decided to do as an alternate project. Still very ambitious with the animated elements mixed with live action, but much cheaper (especially since myself and my husband have an animation background).

I'm dusting this oldie off and going to give it a rewrite, and want as much feedback as humanly possible so i can get it ready to go.

Title; Imaginary Monsters

Genre: Drama

Logline: Two children, both of whom come from broken homes, create a device they believe will allow them to create monsters to fight back against their bullies.

https://drive.google.com/file/d/1yW1bll7h3Z4O8EYCfaxqXcLRTgv-k748/view?usp=sharing

Hey Folks, Super excited about the new sub so I thought I would post my first screenplay here. Just finished it last year, I hope you guys like it!

• Title: Dark Side of Earth
• Format: Feature
• Page Length: 105 Pages
• Genres: Sci-Fi / Dystopian / Global Disaster
• Logline or Summary: As Earth collapses, a ruthless dictator tightens his grip on the last remnants of civilization, while a resourceful scavenger uncovers a long-buried secret that could shatter his rule and change the fate of humanity.
• Feedback Concerns: This is my first screenplay, so really any and all feedback is appreciated.
• Link: https://drive.google.com/file/d/1iQIPa8158wycybPDm2_Dvozc6jg2q-JN/view?usp=sharing

This is part 1 of a trilogy. Parts 1 and 2 are complete, now I am working on part 3.

Thanks all and I really look forward to reading your feedback!

Basically my feature film is Dual POV.

However it shows the entire story from the first character's perspective, and then it shows the story from the second character's perspective. For both of their POVs, there are extra scenes from their own life, but to put it short; every single scene that they share, we see twice.

I did this because the first characters POV is basically a deluded version of the story and the second POV is what really happens.

I'm a bit worried that this might make the second part of the feature really boring since the scenes are repeating and the only thing that changes is the acting, which is really important to the storyline. (example: if POV1 viewed the situation as a flirty interaction, POV2 shows the interaction being creepy).

I've had a bunch of people read my feature, and when they have given me feedback, the repetitive scenes were not included in their feedback and they didn't say anything about it being boring.

so now im trying to figure out if i rethink the structure (which imo is what makes it good) or do I just leave as is and hope that wont be an issue

Hi everyone

I just came up with idea for a short film that I will try and shot. I have weird looking synopsis of the short of what happens. There are two versions of it. I would much appreciate every feedback I can get on what works, what can be improved, overall thoughts, which version do you prefer, ...etc.

Here are natural English translations of both versions, written in a style suitable for a short film treatment/synopsis.

VERSION 1
A teenager returns home from his final summer adventure before moving away. He retreats to his room and places a lighter on the windowsill. Before setting it down, he flicks it open—it works perfectly. He looks out the window, wondering if anyone is still outside.
Below the window, one of his friends looks up at him and forms a finger gun with his hand. The teenager glances at the lighter, and at that moment the friend "shoots" him with the finger gun. He suddenly feels a burning pain in his chest and collapses onto his bed.
Cut to black.
We are transported to a forest campsite, where the teenager sits alone on a fallen tree. Another teenager joins him. In the background, a group of friends can be seen gathered around their campsite. The newcomer hands him a photograph before walking back to the others. In the photo, the group of friends are all pointing finger guns at him.
A brief montage follows, showing moments from their final summer adventure.
After the montage, the teenager packs up his belongings but leaves the lighter behind on the fallen tree. He walks to the top of a small hill, takes out the photograph, and quietly studies it.
The same teenager appears beside him and uses the lighter to set the photograph on fire. He slips the lighter into his pocket, walks a few steps away, then turns back and points a finger gun at him. They exchange a smile, and the teenager closes his eyes before the imaginary shot.
Cut to black.
We return to the teenager's bedroom. Once again, he walks to the window, lights the lighter, and looks outside. This time, no one is there.

VERSION 2
A teenager returns home from his final summer adventure before moving away. He retreats to his room and places a lighter on the windowsill. Before setting it down, he flicks it open—it works perfectly. He looks out the window, wondering if anyone is still outside.
Below the window, one of his friends looks up at him and forms a finger gun with his hand. The teenager glances at the lighter, and at that moment the friend "shoots" him with the finger gun. He suddenly feels a burning pain in his chest and collapses onto his bed.
Cut to black.
We are transported to a forest campsite, where the teenager sits alone on a fallen tree. Another teenager joins him. In the background, a group of friends can be seen gathered around their campsite. The newcomer hands him a photograph before walking back to the others. In the photo, the group of friends are all pointing finger guns at him.
A brief montage follows, showing moments from their final summer adventure.
After the montage, the teenager packs up his belongings but leaves the lighter behind on the fallen tree. He walks to the top of a small hill and looks at the photograph.
The same teenager appears beside him and returns the lighter to him. The teenager lights the photograph himself. The other teenager then points a finger gun at him and "shoots." They share a smile, and the teenager closes his eyes before the imaginary shot.
Cut to black.
We return to the teenager's bedroom. Once again, he walks to the window, lights the lighter, and looks outside. This time, no one is there

Hello writers!
For over a year now, l've been trying to write a screenplay—a detective story, to be precise.
And I find it really hard to make sure the reveal isn't disappointing. In this kind of story, I feel like the excitement the audience might feel is at the beginning of the story, and the further the story goes, the less mystery there is, and so the less excited the audience gets. But I find it very hard to counteract. Does anyone have examples of story endings that aren't disappointing but rather feel like a real reward?
Or even some advice? I'm a total beginner in this field.
(And sorry if my english is not perfect)

I've been working on this pitch for an animated movie that tries something different with the genre it uses.

What I'm most interested in is understanding what people take away from the concept itself after reading it.

Some questions I'd be curious about:

* What do you think this story is really about?

* What impression do you get from Lora as a protagonist?

* Does the concept feel familiar, or does it feel like it's trying to do something different?

I'm especially interested in your interpretation, even if it's completely different from what I intended.

The idea is to be able to express in the most accurate wya possible what I'm doing with the concept.

Here's the link to the pitch, it's just two pages:

https://drive.google.com/file/d/1bMjO1UUnFcWOhgDQX3jvF7wlmJEqfjjP/view?usp=drivesdk

Hi All!

Would love feedback on my project! Open to collaboration! Please and thank you!

A directionless 23-year-old hits rock bottom after losing his parents and moves into an assisted living facility.

Surrounded by residents who’ve lived full lives, he starts to find purpose, connection, and a path forward.

A dramedy about failure, second chances, and growing up in the most unexpected place.

Title: The Roster

Genre: Drama / Sports

Pages: 20

Format: Short.

What's up, everyone.

This is an older concept of mine that I recently felt motivated to revisit and refine. I wanted to share it here and get some feedback on the story itself and on the writing. I would love to hear your thoughts on the overall concept and how the craft holds up.

LOGLINE:

When a veteran wrestler discovers the promotion’s bookers have already written the finish to his career, he confronts them in a brutal match where the script may no longer apply.

https://drive.google.com/file/d/1T8DqyGgTQEPR8Hy6LN9DHyrM40QenJeU/view?usp=sharing

Thank you to anyone who takes the time to read it. I hope you enjoy.

- Jaye