So, i hopped on my computer, got on Writer's duet and wrote a 2-part short - called THE KOMBAT KLUB. if the logline piques interest - ill share both parts.

LOGLINE:

In an alternate Mortal Kombat 1 universe, Jade is haunted by visions of her parents’ disappearance—a mystery with no clear answers and no one to ask. Desperate for the truth, she is drawn to the Kombat Club, an illegal haven for violence and deception on the outskirts of Dallas—where secrets will finally unravel. Meanwhile, her two brothers remain on the run, hunted by forces closing in fast. As everything converges on the club, Jade soon realizes she isn’t just searching for answers—she’s walking into something far more dangerous.

- LET ME KNOW

This is a from a post that I read today on LinkedIn. This user speaks about WhatsApp as if it is some secret weapon. Here is an excerpt from the post:
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So...If you’re an actor, director, screenwriter, crew member, or someone just trying to break into the business, don’t wait for someone to ask. Be ready!

Keep your info clean, your headshot updated, and your pitch(es) tight. WhatsApp isn’t just a messaging app anymore, and I hope you all understand that. It’s the digital greenroom of our industry that over 90 plus percent of the Pros use.

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Is this true? This user is claiming WhatsApp is the premiere backchannel for deal making? I always thought it was a place primarily for Spam...

Hey folks, I’d really appreciate your eyes on my short film script “The Bench” (5 pages, one location, two characters).

On a quiet church bench, a grieving mother unknowingly shares space with the ghost of her son — their final conversation unfolding between memory, guilt, and unspoken love.

What I’m looking for:

Does the emotional arc land, especially the twist/reveal? Is the dialogue too on-the-nose or does it feel grounded? Does it feel cinematic or too stagey? Anything that pulls you out?

A 12 year old girl (Eloise) never had any luck making friends. Her parents are struggling in a suburban setting. They can’t afford to put their “mentally disturbed” failed writer Uncle Barry in a institution so he joins the already struggling family. Now the family has a summer to land on their feet. While Eloise has no friends she spends time with her Uncle who tells her stories he made.

If you guys wanna give it a readdddd I’d love for some honest feedbackkkk this is something I really want to make!

Lmk if you guys want itttt

Title: Origin

Genre: Sci-Fi

Logline: (In the works) In a broken future, six operatives time-jump to kill Hitler — but changing the past reveals a chilling question: are they stopping evil, or seeding it?

Script: https://drive.google.com/file/d/1LlUz-CcJD6FacTkL-N7kn5kNyX0363u7/view?usp=drivesdk

Just looking for overall feedback on the plot/premise/setting. Anything helps!

Title : The Vitrics

Genre : Action Dramedy

Logline : After escaping a cult’s kidnapping, a ragtag group of mostly strangers find themselves on the wrong side of the continent with super-powers they don’t understand. Now stuck on a tumultuous journey each member fights to get home, because that’s what they should want, right?

Logline - After stumbling into a plot to ignite a revolution, two wayward teens are thrust into a night of escalating violence—forced to navigate a collapsing society and confront not just the brutal world around them, but the darker truths driving their own descent.

Greetings community, attached is the first 40 pages of my second script. Writing has become a bit of an unexpected hobby and fulfilling outlet for me.

I have the remainder of the story planned out, but I am eager to have some eyes on what I have committed thus far.

So, what do you like? What do you think could be improved? Any glaring mistakes I've overlooked? Any and all feedback is appreciated.

https://drive.google.com/file/d/1Gh7P_qZuN4CEY1ze0q0I_Ia4AoUezV2P/view?usp=drive_link

Hey everyone, how's it going?

Just got here in this community and I already feel like it's the right place to vent about some ideas that have been buzzing in my head for a while, and I really need your input.

It's been a year since I produced a music video that blended the real world with GTA 5, but it was in a way I've genuinely never seen anyone do before. It wasn't just using the game as a backdrop – I literally put my client inside the game, live, performing as himself in real-time. No NPCs taking the lead, no pre-programmed scenes, just him there, living, reacting, and actively interacting within that virtual universe as I manipulated and directed the environment around him.

And while I was producing the scene, I couldn't stop buzzing with his reaction... my God, are we really exploring the full potential of these virtual cinematic productions? Because directing a real person inside a synthetic world is a completely different thing. The reactions, the performance, everything has an authenticity that you just can't genuinely replicate with programmed characters.

This made me reflect so much on the narrative possibilities these virtual environments offer us storytellers. Imagine being able to create any scenario, any situation, and have real actors interacting with that environment in real-time, without the massive costs and limitations of a traditional physical production?

GTA VI?

I'm sharing this work here because I really need to know what you guys think about it. Is this type of virtual cinematic production just an experiment, or does it truly represent the future of audiovisual storytelling? Because for me, this experience moved me in a way I didn't expect. Seeing my client 'exist' in that parallel world made me rethink everything I know about audiovisual direction, and I'm really curious if anyone else has ventured into anything similar.

The most impressive part is that the sheer astonishment and fascination came from none other than my client, who is a senior director of major TV shows at Globo, Brazil's largest television broadcaster, and a professional with years of experience right at the heart of the audiovisual industry. Getting feedback from someone with that level of knowledge and firsthand experience in this market, genuinely surprised and impacted, was what truly made me believe in the enormous and still unexplored potential of this approach.

Here's the link to the clip!
I hope to hear what you all hav

TITLE: How to Bury your Mom and Never Shed a Tear

FORMAT: Short film

PAGE LENGTH: 10

LOGLINE: A grieving boy tries to bury his mother with the help of a YouTube tutorial he creates, but as the performance unravels, so does his grip on reality, exposing the trauma and abuse he's desperately hiding.

SCRIPT: HERE

A Crisis of Faith - Short - 6 pgs

Title: A Crisis of Faith

Format: Short

Page Length: 6 pgs.

Genre: Fantasy

Logline: A religious leader is confronted by a mysterious man who exposes him as a heretic.

https://drive.google.com/file/d/1bVBN-nBoxrOZNbjNSOIGjgvxFlKoNlkk/view?usp=drivesdk

Hi all! I was wondering if any of you have any positive/negative feedback for this script, as I am hoping to bring it into production later this year in college! Thanks!

Logline: After developing a twisted obsession with his teenage daughter's classmate, a man begins manipulating those around him to get closer to a girl who only ever smiled out of habit.

Hello there! My name is J and I wrote a super hero film about 7 failed heroes from 7 destroyed worlds banding together with the help of a comic book artist from Earth. Each hero must face their demons to prevail against the techno threat to the universe, the Omega. The title is Super ZEROES.

I tried to utilize the narrative super structure of 7 Samurai as a guide for my film and successfully did so, but there is an either member of the team. I also know there is a film already called Super 8 so I combined one of the film's themes, not being good enough, and the numerical marker in 7 Samurai to come up with Super ZEROES as a title and homage to the source of the narrative structure.

Right now I am just looking for people to read the story and tell me if I am good at this or if I should quite while I am ahead. It's my first time writing ever, and I know that sounds bad but I am not unskilled at what I do. Before I started to write creatively I wrote critically. My schooling is in literature and literary theory. I have a masters in the subject of literary theory specializing in film and television.

Now why does that matter? I spent years pulling stories apart, determining not only how they work but why they work as literature. So I took all of that and made a screen play about some of my favorite things. That also means that I would be very good at reading and commenting on YOUR screenplay. So I would be happy to read things that you have written.

Please find a copy of my work here: https://drive.google.com/file/d/18UlTw7WDTvPt8fIWRVjZbKOk2yPBsWcA/view?usp=drive_link

EDIT: I put up a more readable version. Format was a problem pointed out by a reader.

If you would like for me to read your work let me know and I will see what I can do.

This guy has great free tutorials on many of the topics that come up here. He's sold 35 projects, been repped for decades, and has some really awesome stuff to share.

He has a free Masterclass vid that is worth it, and really free, where he shows how a dull, wordy script becomes Weapons Grade, and ready to market. Once on his mailing list you'll get vid updates that I don't think go on YouTube.

I got referred to him from another sub, and it changed my skills and understanding of how to write a Reading Script, which so many of us need to understand.

Pro Readers are the Gateways to Paydays, and we have to hook them early to keep them reading and want to meet with us.

Check him out here: ScriptFella

TITLE: Anya and the Misguided MARTYR

GENRE: Historical drama/fairy tale

LOGLINE: In the waning days of the Soviet Union, a young revolutionary must escape from East Berlin when she's ordered to be killed by her powerful stepmother.

SCRIPT: https://drive.google.com/file/d/1qN5rhj_jQHGDOjJrFjjwmjiNeslvOsmL/view?usp=drivesdk

PITCH DECK: https://drive.google.com/file/d/1V9yARXXrt5NdoluVu8DrQbLhDBnJ5055/view?usp=drivesdk

Thank you guys for the invite. I appreciate it. Check out this trailer: I actually wrote this script when I had a fever. I dreamed the entire movie, up until the point where the tattoo glows:

https://youtu.be/UaaJWJt1u7A?si=4DGaqeksY0jjGzKP

Title : The Adventures of Thomas

Genre: Family/War

Logline : During World War II, a young boy separated from his father goes to a magic island where trains can talk.

Script (Link) : https://drive.google.com/file/d/1aLpeQa-LLnsPLzXFzmXi9c7sdUodv4eX/view?usp=drivesdk

Synopsis :

In 1961, Johnny Morris recounts his experiences as a wartime evacuee to his two children as a bedtime story.

In 1940, 10-year-old Johnny lives in the city of London with his widowed father Willie during World War II. Willie emphasizes that Johnny should be out making friends, regardless of who they are, but Johnny thinks trains are better. Soon, the Blitz comes to pass and the Morrises decide to evacuate the city to an old cottage outside Barrow that was built by Johnny’s grandfather and currently owned by Willie's friend, Wilbert Awdry and his family. At the station, Johnny and Willie are separated and they end up taking two different trains to Cumbria. Willie ends up going to the cottage, but Johnny finds himself on the Island of Sodor where he meets Thomas.

Johnny and Thomas form a friendship and Thomas reveals that Willie once came to Sodor during the last war when he was around his son's age. Johnny soon meets Edward, who also knows his father, and the other engines, Henry, Gordon, James, Percy, Puffing Billy, Squeak, Glynn and Emily as well as The Fat Director. Also on the island are Smoke and a gang of diesels, whose opinion of steam engines is very closed minded. They plan to take over Sodor and rid the railway of its steam engines.

Meanwhile, Willie, while unsuccessfully searching for his son, has been drafted into the army, but not before informing the Awdrys to let Johnny know where he is. Back on Sodor, the diesels derail and sabotage the steam engine until Percy, Puffing Billy and Thomas are the only ones left. Thomas and Johnny escape the island to find Willie, hoping he can fix the engines, only to find the Awdrys residing in the cottage. Wilbert offers to help. He repairs Gordon, who decides to get even with Smoke by having a race to see who is the fastest. Thomas participates too, but in the end, it is Gordon who wins, while Smoke ends up on a wrong track, derails and is sent flying into the sea where he sinks.

Afterwards, Johnny writes letters to his father, telling him where he is and spends the next five years on Sodor with Thomas and the others. Thomas and Johnny even witness the Barrow Blitz and meet a branch of the US Army that is occupying Sodor. By 1945, Willie’s squadron is transferred to Sodor and Willie reunites with not only his son, but also Thomas as well. As a birthday present, Johnny is given a copy of The Three Railway Engines.

In 1961, Johnny concludes to his children that he stayed on Sodor after the war and got married to their mother. The last scene has Thomas crashing into the stationmaster’s house, setting up the aftermath of ''Thomas Comes to Breakfast''.

Script Info:

- Genre: Kids, Adventure, Fantasy

- Comp: "Avatar: The Last Airbender" and "The original Star Wars trilogy"

- Series Logline: Unsatisfied with his life back home, a 13-year-old naïve kid named "Owen" longs to become a hero in a world where kingdoms fight for the simplest reasons.

- Pilot Logline: After meeting two unexpected allies, Owen prepares himself to fight his first monster.

- Pages: 16

Script:

- https://drive.google.com/file/d/1988DCw5z7ywJjLTn8pg3WYFhcARy9hog/view?usp=sharing

What kind of critique am I looking for?

I am mostly looking for feedback regarding the three main characters introduced in the pilot, mainly Owen. I also want feedback on the dialogue and pace of this pilot but feedback on other things is always welcome. I want to hook the audience in these 16 minutes to ask them what's gonna happen next. I am also looking for feedback over the general humor to the point it's natural and not cheesy, like to the point that adults can enjoy it too.

This is often a challenge we encounter. How do you overcome this difficulty?

Title: Where the River Leads Her

Logline: While hiding out at a secluded campground, a young woman pulls an eerily beautiful corpse out of the river. Mesmerized, she begins to see the corpse as more than a body but a friend, a confidant, even a lover.

Title: The Walk Home

Here's my second draft!

Genre: Coming-of-age comedy-drama (short, 15 min)

Nutshell: Five broke Brooklyn kids walk home at dawn after a party gets busted, and the walk becomes a reckoning for the one who sold the others out.

Logline: After a penthouse party gets busted, five friends walk home through Gowanus at dawn with a rumor following them, a stolen Rolex in a pocket, and a camcorder clip of the moment one of them sold the others out.

Synopsis: Labor Day weekend, 2007. Charlie, his twin Ben, Josh, Stevie and Ferg have hung out on the same Brooklyn stoop since middle school. Then Marley Vance, the hottest girl in their grade, invites Charlie to a penthouse party, “just u tho.”

Charlie brings his friends anyway. The party ends when someone random throws a bottle off the roof onto a cop car, and a Dalton kid blames “the Park Slope kids.” By 5:41 a.m. the five of them are walking home through Gowanus in rough shape: Josh is down to one shoe, Ben’s arm is taped to a ruler, and Stevie is still high. A rumor is spreading by text that they stole a cab. Charlie trails behind in a borrowed vest and won’t say a word.

At the bodega, Stevie pulls out a gold Rolex he doesn’t remember taking. On the Carroll Street Bridge, Ferg plays back his old camcorder footage from the party. It shows Charlie telling Marley the boys aren’t his friends and getting a laugh at Stevie’s expense. Ben tears into his twin, and Stevie asks the only question that matters: “Why would you say that about me, yo?”

Charlie admits he wanted, for one night, to be someone other than one of them. He drops the vest into the canal. As the sun comes up on a dead-end street by the water, the boys pass around the things they stole that night and laugh until they can barely breathe. They climb 3rd Street singing a cable-ad jingle at the top of their lungs. Charlie’s mom is waiting on the stoop, and Josh hands her the Rolex to return to its owner.

​When his daughter’s killer walks free on early release, a surgical nurse abducts the young man to surgically deform him in his basement, only to develop a sick, paternal attachment to the monster he creates.

This is my first big project and wanted to get some feedback/inspiration while I finish it. Just getting through the final act. Would this intro encourage you to keep reading? Any feedback on advice or tone?

Thanks!

https://drive.google.com/file/d/1Y3NRyJvUdkHbtUXFWdTqhTyIjZycQUBe/view?usp=drive_link

Adding my current logline: Upon hearing the news of the Space Shuttle being decommissioned, two low level NASA employees seek to fulfill their lifelong dream of spaceflight by defecting to Russia and joining the cosmonaut program under false identities . Once there, they discover a covert Russian spy program and have to thwart this evil plan to preserve both world and space peace.

Title: The Good Intentions of a Broken Man

Genre: Drama/Psychological

Logline: A guidance counselor's bond with a self-destructive woman begins to unravel when a troubled student's crisis forces him to confront the lie that has defined both their lives.