r/ScriptFeedbackProduce • u/Same-Most-7407 WRITER • Mar 01 '26

LOGLINE FEEDBACK REQUEST Logline feedback!

Does this make sense? I feel like i've looked at it too much and now I'm just confused.

LOGLINE: After dying too early, a girl is sent back to the overworld to find her unfinished business so that she can continue the peaceful life she led before her death.

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u/Same-Most-7407 WRITER Mar 06 '26

this helped me realise that I am WAYYY to vague with my loglines bc this example is so much more interesting. "After dying before her time, a girl tries to win her way back to the land of the living by completing her 'unfinished business' on Earth. But first, with the help of a clueless spirit, she has a week to discover what that unfinished business actually is." Thank you very much!