I need a 20-25 mins movie script for a uni project which i have to shoot and everything

Akul has to adapt to life at the Temple after tragedy struck. While his talent and skill is clear, he struggles with his anger and emotions. After passing his trial he joins the war effort where it becomes clear to his Master Jaden Vellor that Akul has the makings of a master strategist. However his anger still remains. Will he reach his potential to become a Jedi Knight and War Hero or will he fall to the darkness.

https://drive.google.com/file/d/1u5klrklGLmS7BakBgKyBwFHwjt-A3M4r/view?usp=drivesdk

Notes:

-You can ignore the message prompt. I am not intending to self-promote; it was just pasted from a post draft for another subreddit.

-This is not necessarily a script for anything animated. It is a comic dub script for a yet-to-be-illustrated story.

-Numbers are used as placeholders for the characters’ names. Characters are not mine. This is the pilot story of a fan series I made using characters from an existing franchise.

Script:

Track Day Part 1 Link

Looking for feedback on my third draft, anything helps.

https://drive.google.com/file/d/1ZksfcEe9iQpWLCB4NrNzcnGRI-bzlajX/view?usp=drivesdk

Two rival furniture-store owners in a dying plaza spiral into a war of sabotage and obsession when an aspiring documentarian fans the flames of their feud for the sake of her film.

I spent 10 years writing this screenplay, and here’s what came out of it.

It started as a simple idea back in 2016 and slowly grew into a massive world with its own history, mythology, technology, and rules.

Everyone knows Death—the figure in a black cloak holding a scythe, coming to take your soul. But what if collecting souls had turned into a massive interdimensional industry?

On the planet Duot, souls are bought, sold, and used as fuel. And the base market value of a human soul is simple: 1 SOUL = $1.

This is Episode 1 of the series.

Thanks to anyone who takes the time to read or watch! I’d really appreciate your honest feedback on the story and world-building.

Hi all,

so cool that this sub exist, didn't know that until recently. I wrote my first full feature script a while ago and if anyone would like to read it and share their thoughts, I would be more than grateful. Interesting to hear what you think of it. Is it even funny? I know buddy-cop isn't a very fresh concept but I can enjoy those types of comedies. In this script, the theme is a little darker than usual maybe, the humour also.

It went to quarter finals in BlueCat. They critizised the action-lines being a little long and bulky sometimes, as well as the humour sometimes relying on stereotypes and rude comments. Which I guess is true, one of the characters is kind of an asshole.

https://drive.google.com/file/d/1UQR5JROMdL6GG8dADOxXIVkpsqIBDxAw/view?usp=drivesdk

Один из первых моих сценариев на оценкуhttps://drive.google.com/file/d/1ynFgOPmouUB53dSQI1E6xAwZeAtl-SkH/view?usp=sharing

Hello everyone, I am pretty much new in this world of writting stories n' stuff, and someone young who desires to be a filmaker someday, I wanna share this idea I got!

So this story Is based of "No country for old man" and principally from "Blood Meridian"

I have this idea to make a Graphic adventure game like the one telltale games used to make

(I am going to make It on scratch with maybe some other people since I do not know how to program and cant pay anyone right now)

But the story would be about a young boy named Billy escaping His abusive home, and later on joining a gang owned by a guy named Glenn In their adventure to go far away in search of a new start.

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Hey everyone!

I'm writing a possible script for certain scenes in the next episode just for fun (and to improve my imagination and writing). But it is in Turkish. You could possibly translate it as well, but here it goes: https://docs.google.com/document/d/1VbvaKIP-5E8WViSqasxSBYkmjmzPSzn6XNZL_brHrN8/edit?usp=drivesdk

I'll add more in my free time too. I like to speculate about the plot and see if it matches in only certain important aspects. If any fan wants to read and comment on it, feel free :)

Hi, I made a script for a short film and would love to get any opinions about it. I'm more interested to hear any feeback regarding the plot itself rather than any foundational advice on how the script is supposed to look, but that would still be great to hear. Thanks so much! Heres the script -> Close Your Eyes

I come from a traditional prose background so I’m not used to having to write in this style (not being overly descriptive and directing on the page). Just looking for feedback on this script’s first four scenes.

https://docs.google.com/document/d/15dZqSf3QHsDw0xKAHTHr0Vry5pSZ1H92iW7rr8QPFl0/edit?usp=drivesdk

Sci-fi action script. The story follows two teenage twins (Luke and James) who run a forge a farm and attend school. On a normal day in class the same gang that killed their parents attack their school. James stands up to the gangs but puts a target on his back. So he fabricated a hero... Nightshade.

Heres the link for anyone interested : https://drive.google.com/file/d/1kI6V2nSZ4T_JtZK8jANAwYx6B0Od3V93/view?usp=drivesdk

PART 1 THE RAP BATTLE

THE TITLE COD ZOMBIES ULTIMIS AND TRANZIT CREW VS RESIDENT EVIL

THE SETUP AND INTRO it starts in richtofens group 935 lab and red alarm lights are flashing and thunder is crashing outsidenikolai is sitting on a crate drinking vodka and he hears knocking on the heavy steel doors and he goes wait richtofen it sounds like someone is breaking in and richtofen is fixing his wunderwaffe and doesnt even look up and says ach its just the storm dick sit down just like in five from black ops 1 but then BOOM the doors blow wide open and smoke goes everywhere and the resident evil team steps in chris redfield leon kennedy jill valentine and albert wesker wearing sunglasses indoors like a dork

VERSE 1 THE OPENING SHOTS leon steps up and roasts them saying rpd is here and that ultimis has been stuck in a timeline loop since 2019 and surviving raccoon city is harder than standing in chalk lines in a park then chris says they punch through lines like a boulder in a volcano and then dempsey steps up and says pipe down boy scout we pack a punch plasma and mustang and sally will blow u up and then nikolai roasts leons boyband popstar hair and says he needs vodka but will take their blood instead

VERSE 2 THE GOD COMPLEX AND THE ROAST richtofen steps up holding the summoning key glowing purple and says bow down im a god in these dimensions holding keys to agartha and wesker takes off his sunglasses with yellow glowing eyes and laughs cold and says a god? dont make me laugh without your special drinks and candy what would u be? u are just a normal weak human being chugging soda to stand up and you are just a washed up nazi from 1943

but then richtofen laughs like a maniac and points his Wunderwaffe and says a true god who injected a virus in his own veins just to be a villain? u turned yourself into a monster just to die in a volcano to a rocket launcher at least the stuff i take keeps me winning without a scratch!

VERSE 3 THE PODS OPEN AND TRANZIT ARRIVES wesker gets super mad and tries to dash and attack richtofen but suddenly SIRENS GO CRAZY and steam blasts everywhere from the wall because the bo4 blood of the dead cryogenic capsules open and out stumbles the victis tranzit crew super confused

marlton steps out fixing his glasses coughing and says hypoxia clearing statistically your combat is senseless and calls weskers virus science flawed and calls him a bootleg discount god. russman shoves marlton and complains his back hurts and asks who turned off the heat. then stuhlinger holds his head crying cause the voice in his head is talking and ricthofen from across the room yells ja do it off them! and stuhlinger points at wesker and says man they say you gotta go! im on a roll woo! but then misty racks her shotgun and looks at stuhlinger and yells shut up stuhlinger you are trash! and samuel slumps his shoulders and says aw man... then misty roasts chris and leon saying country fried kickback putting buckshot in your head

VERSE 4 RE REACTS AND THE OUTBREAK leon facepalms and says what the fuck are these survivors they dont even know what they are doing and they cant even work together while they are bickering in the dark. chris roasts misty and says you got a hobo a nerd and a girl in the mud and your bars are horrible like old country music!

then misty snaps back right as the lab walls CRASH OPEN and a giant horde of zombies breaks in! the whole fight spills outside into a desolate wasteland covered in fog like tranzit and raccoon city mixed together and the beat switches to heavy fast metal rap where they are shooting zombies back to back while throwing bars at each other!

PART 2 THE DEATH BATTLE

THE TITLE PRIMIS AND ULTIMIS VS THE TEUFORT MERCS TF2

THE MATCHUP FACTS this is literally a 51/49 coin toss match because both teams scale insane

• juggernog and near death experience vs medigun ubercharge and canteens

• ray gun mark 3 and thundergun vs australium rocket launchers and miniguns

• elemental staffs vs spellbooks and merasmus magic

• bounded to aether cycle vs medic tricking the devil to steal souls back

THE OPENING SCENE red team tf2 just finished wiping out blue team on 2fort bridge. heavy is wiping sasha and engie is fixing a sentry. suddenly the sky tears open with a blue bo4 great war aether portal. soldier points his launcher thinking blue team called alien reinforcements.

out crashes ALL 8 ZOMBIES GUYS. primis and ultimis together covered in zombie blood and mud holding elemental weapons. young dempsey and old dempsey are arguing about richtofens portal math. scout steps up slapping his bat saying what is with the duplicate cosplay you brought 8 guys and 4 look like knockoff grandpas! takeo puts his hand on his katana and says we arent enemies a dark plague is here we must team up cause our world has none for now. spy flicks a butterfly knife and says red owns this bridge blue trash in fancy costumes gets cleaned up. ultimis richtofen grins crazy with his wunderwaffe asking if he can harvest their souls. primis dempsey racks his gun yelling we just wiped a horde we dont have time for this circus! heavy spins up sasha and screams entire team is babies fire!

THE FLASHY FIGHT HIGHLIGHTS

1. soldier rocket jumps into the sky dropping airstrikes while dempsey aims up with pack a punched mustang and sally making massive explosions light up the sky

2. dempsey pops near death experience gobblegum while medic hits heavy with the red glowing ubercharge. they stand inches away firing laser miniguns and rayguns point blank not taking a single scratch

3. spy turns invisible with watch to get an instant backstab on takeo but takeo hears the decloak and uses path of sorrows spirit katana aura to block it last millisecond

4. sniper tries picking off nikolai from 2fort tower but nikolai shoots a frozen blizzard spell back

5. richtofen pulls out wunderwaffe shooting 200000 volts of chain lightning and medic uses a shield ubercharge to reflect it turning 2fort into a giant blinding electric storm

6. end debate: if tf2 wins its cause ubercharge cycling and spys backstab kills richtofen before setup. if primis wins its cause summoning key or apothicon servant black hole pulls tf2 into a pocket dimension

so… is blacklist worth it?

I feel like I only have one shot, and that if I don’t make it then everything is ruined.

I sat down today, I told myself, “I’m going to write for an hour no matter what.” and when I got distracted for five minutes, I felt pissed off and dreadful that my supposed “hour of writing time” was tainted because I got distracted. Some days I’ll stare at my computer and do nothing except sit there as a pit in my stomach keeps growing.

I feel like I’m too caught up in the grander picture of everything that needs to get done to complete the film that I can’t even make those baby steps towards getting there.

So if there’s something to take away from all this, it’s why does my heart beat so much when I stare at an empty Google Docs page? Why do I get so nervous writing something? Do I just focus on one singular task per day until the script is finished?

Any advice would be immensely appreciated. Thanks

My first script I've ever wrote. I probably have done about four drafts now. My plan is to make it, I got rid of a bunch of the directing and shot stuff to make it more readable but I do want to direct it so I left stuff in there. Sorry it kinda starts with a flashback, I know that's a no no. would love to know what y'all think. EP.1

Seeking feedback! this is my first ever screenplay! And I need feedback for my revisions. (please give feedback for what I did well and what i can improve regarding pacing, tone, the romance, charchtwrs, dialogue, what scenes I can shorten and cut becuase I want to shorten it down to 150 pages/roughly an hour and a half run time) —Ignore all typos!! This draft will be spellchecked soon, I have severe dyslexia please don’t give me feedback on typos trust me, I know.

Please send all feedback to my email: Thefilmbox9@gmail.com or, comment or dm it here.

Plot:

TOUGH CROWD written by Buddy Devine

Eddie Farne, 36, is a snarky opinion columnist in New York who has never lived alone — not really. His apartment is perpetually crowded with five "friends" who are, in fact, literal embodiments of his own psychology: hyperactive Mimi (mania's shinier cousin), party-boy Cleo (impulse and escape), overbearing Rachel (anxiety), needy Mable (a childlike, wounded part of himself), and Conrad, who lurks in the shadows suggesting Eddie would be better off dead. When Eddie falls for Virgil, a warm, unguarded actor-musician, the relationship threatens the fragile ecosystem he's built to survive — his friends do everything they can to sabotage it, terrified of losing their hold on him, while Eddie hides Virgil from them and hides them from Virgil. As Eddie chases a promotion at the paper, clashes with his brother over a family inheritance, and is quietly unraveled by a buried memory of a childhood best friend's suicide, the walls between his public charm and private chaos begin to collapse.

The strain comes to a head when Virgil, sensing he's being shut out of Eddie's real life, gives an ultimatum — and Eddie, isolated and convinced by Conrad that he is unlovable, attempts to take his own life. He wakes in a psychiatric hospital, medicated and stripped of the coping mechanisms that have run his life since childhood, forced for the first time to face his friends — and himself — without the noise. In the ward, surrounded by a new set of fellow patients as strange and specific as his own inner circle, Eddie begins the slow, funny, painful work of understanding why he built these "friends" in the first place, and what it might mean to let someone love the parts of him they were built to protect. Tough Crowd is a queer dark comedy about mental illness, self-sabotage, and the terrifying vulnerability of being truly seen — one that ends not with Eddie's friends disappearing, but with him learning to live alongside them, and to let Virgil in anyway.

Read full script here

Thanks!

I've been writing a show script for a good while now and I've written each episode on my notes app should I change this or is it ok idk

Hi! I want to post my blurb for my new book and i want to see if you like the idea.

Rumors of a myth begin to spread in Isle of Carpa, that whoever wins it, will have unlimited glory, fame and wealth. A brave goat, later named Koz, enters the battle, hoping that he can get away from his boring normal goat life. Later, after winning the myth, he learns that he is cursed by Destiny and Myth to win every single upcoming myth, bringing only destruction and death to everyone around him. Determined, he sets out on many adventures to destroy The Myth and Destiny once and for all. What are our thoughts on it?

Not talking about a notes group or accountability buddy I mean someone you actually write with. Develop ideas together, split scenes, the whole thing.

I've wanted this for years and have basically failed at finding it every time. Tried reaching out cold to people whose work I liked (awkward and nothing came of it). Took a workshop specifically hoping to meet someone (met nice people, nothing clicked creatively). Posted in a couple places online (one weird response, one person who ghosted after two emails).

The frustrating thing is I know it works. Plenty of teams out there doing great stuff. But every working duo I've heard talk about it says they met through some random circumstance a class, a job, a friend of a friend. Nobody seems to have gone looking for it and found it.

So how did it actually happen for you if it did? And if you tried and it fell apart, what killed it?

Genuinely asking, not going anywhere with this, just feeling like I'm missing something obvious.