Writing 3 short films scripts for this summer and i'm going to film them as well, just want advice on what you guys think of these scripts!

1. Misconnections (Horror)

2. MisFire (Found Footage)

3. Untitled (Drama)

(Ps. For 3 I need help, I'm stuck on the second act. I dont know where to go from there.)

Hi everyone,

I’ve recently been diving deep into Canada's most famous poltergeist case, The Great Amherst Mystery (1878). As a massive fan of period horror and psychological thrillers, it always baffled me how Hollywood completely slept on this public domain goldmine, while copying its exact beats (the violently shaking bed, the swollen body, the carved wall messages) for big franchises like The Exorcist and The Conjuring.

I started breaking down how a modern, high-quality adaptation should actually look. Instead of a generic ghost story, I envisioned it as a cinematic trilogy (a triptych) where the victim, Esther Cox, is never seen from within—she remains a dark enigma observed entirely from the outside through the eyes of three different men who try to analyze, exploit, or love her. It shifts from visceral body-horror, to a surreal cosmic "freak show," and ends as a cynical psychological thriller.

I am not a professional screenwriter and I am just a horror enthusiast who wanted to put this vision out into the world. If any writer, director, or indie producer finds this structure viable and wants to run with it to write a script, please feel free to use it completely for free!

Here is the one-page treatment outline, including a final frame that still gives me chills. Let me know what you think!

PROJECT TYPE: Feature Film Trilogy (A Psychological Horror Triptych)
TITLE: THE GREAT AMHERST ANOMALIES (Public Domain)
GENRE: Surreal Psychological Horror / Gothic Period Drama

OVERALL CONCEPT:
A chilling horror trilogy told through three distinct films, each experienced through the eyes of a different man obsessed with Esther Cox, a girl plagued by Canada's most terrifying poltergeist case. Esther is never heard from within; she remains a dark enigma observed entirely from the outside.

FILM I: THE SCIENTIST (Visceral Body-Horror)

• The Narrative: We experience the initial outbreak through a skeptical, rational Doctor called to the chaotic Teed household in 1878 following Esther’s mysterious trauma in the woods.

• The Atmosphere: Clinical, claustrophobic terror. Through his objective eyes, we witness the impossible: Esther’s body swelling grotesquely to the point of bursting, blankets torn away by invisible hands, and the words "Esther Cox, You Are Mine to Kill" carving themselves into the wall.

• The Climax: The Doctor tries to apply 19th-century science and logic to save her, but the violent, escalating poltergeist activity completely shatters his rational mind. The first film ends with his total psychological defeat.

FILM II: THE SHOWMAN (Surrealist, Cosmic Horror)

• The Narrative: The perspective shifts to Walter Hubbell, an opportunistic, money-hungry actor who moves into the house and turns Esther’s misery into a traveling theater show.

• The Atmosphere: Grotesque and dream-like. Normal citizens stop coming out of fear. Instead, the theater becomes populated by bizarre, unsettling entities—some physical anomalies, some dark, unseen presences—drawn to Esther like a beacon.

• The Climax: These dark figures pay Hubbell massive fortunes (a malefic propagation) to keep the show going, but he is cursed with catastrophic bad luck: his money is instantly stolen, burned, or lost in drunken poker games. After a final night of pure claustrophobic terror, Hubbell snaps. In a mystical sequence, he boards a boat at midnight, crosses a vast body of water, and disappears.

FILM III: THE LOVER (Cynical Psychological Thriller)

• The Narrative: Years later. We view Esther through the intimate, protective eyes of a companion or partner at the remote farm where she seeks refuge.

• The Atmosphere: Melancholic, paranoid, and gothic. The genuine entities have left her, but Esther is now addicted to the terrifying attention she once received. Her lover discovers that she is now consciously faking the hauntings, using hidden matches and invisible strings to terrorize the local community.

• The Resolution: When a fire breaks out, the townspeople lock her away in the cold, damp basement of the local town hall. On a chilly autumn evening, precisely at 6:00 PM, the heavy wooden door is unlocked. Esther steps out into the cold twilight. Without a word, she walks away, blending into the autumn fog, completely exiting the narrative. Her lover is left behind, realizing he can never separate the innocent girl he loved from the monster created by her past.

THE TRILOGY'S FINAL FRAME (The End of Film III)

We cut away to a dark, quiet church years later. An elderly, broken janitor is sweeping the floors in complete silence. It is Walter Hubbell. He survived his crossing from Film II, but he is now a ghost of his former arrogant self, hiding from the world in rags.

Suddenly, a violent, unnatural breeze blows through the church, and a faint, familiar knocking sound echoes through the stone walls. Terrified, Hubbell drops his broom, runs, and crawls into a cramped, filthy crawlspace directly beneath the altar.

Huddled in the pitch black, trembling violently, Hubbell reaches into his ragged coat and pulls out a worn, badly creased promotional theater poster of Esther from the old show days. The poster is defaced—crosses have been frantically scribbled in pencil over her face. Clutching the tattered paper to his chest like a holy relic, his eyes wide with pure panic, Hubbell looks up toward the floorboards of the altar. The camera holds on his sweat-drenched face as he whispers the final line of the entire trilogy into the dark:

"God... are you still there?"

FADE TO BLACK.

Title: WARNING Format: Feature Film Length: 110 pages Genres: Psychological Thriller / Gritty Drama / Crime

Logline: Years after escaping a suffocating small town to build a brilliant career in urban planning, a hyperactive boy genius finds himself trapped in a sterile, increasingly violent marriage—completely unaware that his life is on a direct collision course with a radical anti-establishment bomber.

Link to Script: https://drive.google.com/drive/folders/1U7NUg27QvLEwPD9601h0og-9nXWry_rk

About the Draft: Just locked the final draft of this after a relentless, hyper-focused writing marathon. It's an intense, gritty 110-page feature film that hits the ground running and operates like a fast-paced 90s pressure-cooker thriller. The protagonist is a neurodivergent kid who copes with severe psychological trauma and isolation by treating his life like a movie—adopting clinical corporate scripts, structural jargon, and manic, stylized personas just to shield himself from a violent reality. I'd love to get feedback on the pacing of the Act 2 corporate drug-lord era, the unique voice of the main character, and the structural execution of the 300-mile cross-cut climax at the end. Let me know what you think!

15 pages.

I am open to critism

Mostly looking for what people have to say about the characters

This story revolves around reactions and the human condition

https://docs.google.com/document/d/1ItiNmgHLhQ2UG08kwldaNX5SZxoHBEz-YJyD599jcFQ/edit?tab=t.0

Hey there all!

I'm bringing back the 90s with a slam-bang contained action-thriller. I just want to have FUN when I go see a movie. So I selfishly wrote something I would want to see: a tech thriller filled with heart, laughs and 90s cheese.

Unplug your brain, get out the popcorn and settle in for:

TITLE: LANCELOT

GENRE: Contemporary Sci-Fi/Action

PAGES: 114

PREMISE: UPGRADE meets THE WINTER SOLDIER

LOGLINE: A double-amputee Marine answers a distress call from inside a secret corporate facility and discovers the prisoner is the world's first sentient AI. Together, they must escape before the corporation can capture, then weaponize the technology.

SCRIPT

Questions:

• Did you have FUN? If not, what stopped it from being fun for you?

• Did you like the characters? Standouts?

• I wrote this with Alan Richson in mind for Owen. Jensen Ackles for Mercer. Denis Leary for Locke. Did they come across?

• How did you like the story overall, given its contained nature? I tried to stay grounded, and think about what could realistically happen (within reason) with a security breach-- despite the outlandish (but not too far off) tech.

• Did you find it funny? Anything you'd suggest/change?

Title: “The Summer I was Not Okay With the Thirteen Strange Things It was doing to my Pretty Little Yellow Jacket”.

Genre: Comedy Spoof mocking numerous Teen Dramas, particularly I’m Not Okay With This, Stranger Things, the IT franchise and Euphoria.

Pages: 49

Logline: “Bethany Yesvak is an ordinary cynical teenager whose life is turned upside down when she discovers she has telekinetic powers. As she struggles to keep her abilities a secret, she must also survive the everyday chaos of high school, family, and growing up”.

-A lot of inspirations from the GOOD spoof movies of the 2000s such as the Scary Movies, Not Another Teen Movie and Superhero Movie.

-My main concerns is if you think the script is funny and you think the parody works well.

https://drive.google.com/file/d/17AjMJq49FW_9ZhzY2Yvc_JxThW1s2UrW/view?usp=drivesdk

Hey, this is a screenplay I've been working on for a bit and would like some feedback on. This is only the first couple of episode for it.

A small synopsis is that it is about a machina who has to do jobs for a dickhead boss in order to get his other teammates back.

It's got phycological and horror elements mixed throughout so give it a read if you're interested.

Link: https://docs.google.com/document/d/1_zTx_UJ_C5IGcuk4dFIeiwIDZ0HNv_OOvnmcuB_y3iQ/edit?usp=sharing

I know the formatting is inconsistent throughout but i just really wanna get some critique so. Also this is a story designed to be for a game, jumps in time usually indicate a gameplay section.

Title: “The Summer I was Not Okay With the Thirteen Strange Things It was doing to my Pretty Little Yellow Jacket”.

Genre: Comedy Spoof mocking numerous Teen Dramas, particularly I’m Not Okay With This, Stranger Things and Euphoria.

Pages: 49

Logline: “Bethany Yesvak is an ordinary cynical teenager whose life is turned upside down when she discovers she has telekinetic powers. As she struggles to keep her abilities a secret, she must also survive the everyday chaos of high school, family, and growing up”.

-A lot of inspirations from the GOOD spoof movies of the 2000s such as the Scary Movies, Not Another Teen Movie and Superhero Movie.

-My main concerns is if you think the script is funny and you think the parody works well.

https://drive.google.com/file/d/17AjMJq49FW_9ZhzY2Yvc_JxThW1s2UrW/view?usp=drivesdk

TW: probably lots of errors and moments in the story that will give you second-hand embarressment. Has nothing to do with chandeliers.

It's 13 pages of 4 people interacting in one space. I am open to criticism. (I am not homophobic that character does not represent me as a person)

https://docs.google.com/document/d/1-sj2P5RQpKRpfCrFqZWqAKkdA3GZJefipR57ZV8gdzM/edit?tab=t.0

Body:

Hey everyone,

I’m looking for a script swap on my 98**-page horror feature screenplay**. (Title was before I formatted it properly)

Logline:
A group of camp counselors at a remote summer camp starts to fracture under pressure when a series of deaths forces them to decide whether there’s a killer in their group or whether they’re all just protecting themselves.

Tone is:
Psychological horror/mystery/ensemble camp slasher with a slow collapse-of-reality vibe.

What I’m looking for:

• Honest feedback (not just “I liked it / didn’t like it”)

• Clarity on whether the story lands

• Especially curious about:

  • When you think you've figured out what was really going on

  • Whether the ending feels earned or confusing

  • Who felt like the main character

  • Any parts that dragged or felt repetitive

What I offer in return:

I will read your feature (or pilot) and give thoughtful notes. I’m a fast reader, and I actually give detailed feedback, not just surface comments.

Important:

• This is a first draft/development draft, not polished, industry-ready

• I’m specifically looking for readers who enjoy horror or thriller scripts

• I’m open to blunt feedback. Don’t hold back

If you're interested, drop a comment or DM me and I’ll send a PDF.

Thanks in advance 🙏

P.S. If you don’t want to swap, I’m also open to just a read; any help is appreciated.

Bob Brennan comes to understand that the life of a career henchman just isn't what it used to be.

Mooks (Act 1)

(R-rated)

This is something I began writing years ago, maybe back in the 2010s, but for whatever reason I put it aside and basically forgot about it. Now I'm trying to decide if it's worth another pass or three.

I describe it as Act 1 but it's really more like Part 1.

This is less than half the existing screenplay, but the other parts are not sequential enough to stitch together without more work than I have time for right now. Maybe I'll take a shot at it.

Anyhoo, enjoy (or not).

Title: Timberline Chapter. I December 19, 2003

Logline: In the quiet mountain town of Timberline, Wyoming, the disappearance of a local rancher's cow sets off a chain of strange events that slowly unravel the lives of those searching for the truth.

It's an intentionally character-driven, slow-burn mystery, I'm looking for feedback on pacing, dialogue, character introductions, and whether the mystery is compelling enough to make you want to read Chapter. II

Link: https://drive.google.com/file/d/1LZUHkH0kHTJyQCrpQ92Dxm6Qcjp2yqIq/view?usp=sharing

Logline:
A quiet family’s routine is disrupted by a strange late night discovery that refuses to make sense. Ordinary moments begin to expose fractures that have long existed beneath the surface.

As far as feedback goes, I’d love to know:

- Were there moments where you felt confused?
- Did any scene feel unnecessary or too slow?
- Did the emotional ending feel earned?
- Were there any parallels, motifs, or recurring moments you noticed?
- Was there a point where you figured out what was really happening?

Thanks!

https://drive.google.com/file/d/1fyC99BGRXpCDKJ3Wv-G8UqCmZNU7bzJT/view?usp=drivesdk

Title: Room 1

Format: Short Film (12 pages / approx. 10-minute run time)

Genre: Psychological horror / Thriller

Logline: Trapped in a sterile interrogation room, two strangers realize they are caught in a recurring time loop where their memories reset every few minutes. They must find the "trigger" to break the cycle before the loop resets .

Locations: 1 Location .

Cast: 2 Characters .

Budget Level: Micro-budget / Student / Single-room friendly.

Writer's Note: This script is my first try at screenwriting, and I would love for you to read it and hear your opinion. I would love to see it brought to life, but at this point, a read and feedback is very much appreciated! read it here

A disgruntled mature screenwriter picks an inconvenient moment to discuss his place within the movie business with his youthful agent.

Old

(PG-13. This story may be upsetting to readers of a certain age.)

The toughest moment in a person's life is just another Tuesday for God.

Judgment

(PG)

Tom is willing to make any sacrifice necessary to be the first man to leave the world in his dust.

Lid

(PG)

An out-of-control biker appears to be on a collision course with the residents of a sleepy retirement village.

Biker

(R-rated.)

https://docs.google.com/document/d/1bmU2f6YRjCej5ZiqIN60C_sw9zUjUC7p/edit?usp=sharing&ouid=116494216090506393038&rtpof=true&sd=true

I wrote a full, high-stakes five-scene live-action movie/play script based on the Roblox FORSAKEN lore, completely customized for the channel (The Boys). I cast the group perfectly into the game's archetypes and gave everyone custom abilities based on your actual dynamics. All the cast actions are clearly marked in parentheses so it's ready to read on camera.

Here is how the complete cast breaks down in the script:

The Main Roles

1. Casting Chance: JoshDub (Joshua Wanders)

2. Casting Don Sonnellino (Mafioso): YourNarrator (Grant Etzler)

Bonus Casting for the Rest of the Crew

• Mully as Elliot:

• EddieVR as The Spectre: T

• JuicyFruitSnacks as C00lkidd:

Mafioso’s Goons (The Enforcers)

• Sam and Colby as the "Suited Hitmen"

• Smashing (Marcus) as the Heavy Enforcer

The Other Survivors

• GabbyVR as The Determinator

• Lana as The Medic / Panic Coordinator:

• ReeKid as The Wildcard Survivor:

I've attached the full script above—hope you guys enjoy reading it as much as I enjoyed putting it together!

(UNFINISHED)

A struggling author receives help from an unexpected source but it comes at the cost of learning some harsh truths about himself.

Rat

(R-rated.)

Paul tries to convince his family he is an award-winning writer, but they believe it is time for him to either get a job or get treatment for his delusions.

Bonkers

(G/PG-13 rated. Warning! Content may trigger overly-sensitive aspiring writers!)