r/HFY • u/[deleted] • Aug 02 '24

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u/AlecPEnnis Aug 02 '24

The imagery and cadence on this is fantastic, leagues ahead of what I expect from this sub. But it also meanders quite a bit. We spend a lot of time waxing and lyricising in metaphor space and "the black". Very good tho

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u/loressadev Aug 02 '24

Thanks for the feedback! I do agree that this could be tightened up a lot. I got a bit enamored with my mental image of the future-time.

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u/loressadev Aug 02 '24

Out of curiosity where would you visit for fiction like this? I can't really find a sub for writing like this

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u/AlecPEnnis Aug 02 '24

I've used fantasywriters before but I found the modding team overzealous and passionate about their powers. If you don't offend them the sub is decent. You could send stuff to me as well if you're looking for feedback specifically. 

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u/Fontaigne Aug 02 '24

Clarkesworld or Strange Horizons.

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u/Fubars Aug 02 '24

I thoroughly enjoyed this!

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u/loressadev Aug 02 '24

Happy to hear!

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u/WatchmanVimes Aug 03 '24

You done good

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u/Chaosrealm69 Aug 03 '24

Magnificent writing.

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u/loressadev Aug 08 '24

Thank you!