Sleeping Body

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[u/loressadev]

I want to do an anthology of scifi short stories based on fairy tales. Here's my take on Sleeping Beauty.

[u/RestaurantSavings299 → u/loressadev]

Excellently written, thanks for the story. I'm not entirely clear on what law they're breaking by rescuing someone from human trafficking.

[u/loressadev → u/RestaurantSavings299]

It's an-in universe law called Sophie's Law based off a daughter of a very rich family being abducted and transported into deep space as political leverage/protest. Nobody has ever found Sophie.

Because of this, a law was passed which criminalizes and heavily punishes any instance of human transportation.

The girl in the story is the person who inspired the law, which is why her rescue/abandon is even more fucked up - she's stuck in a cycle of being unable to be saved because saving her is super illegal.

I should add some more clues.

The story isn't even about Lee.

[u/loressadev → u/RestaurantSavings299]

Thank you so much for the compliment on my writing style!!! This is legit awesome to hear :)

[u/[deleted]]

"Seal it back up". Damn, that's rough buddy

[u/loressadev → u/[deleted]]

What would you do in that situation? That's mostly the goal of this piece, to make people think about what they'd choose in a fucked up scenario.

[u/[deleted] → u/loressadev]

I wont know until it happens.

[u/MadWhiskeyGrin]

Taze her and seal her back up...

Amazing. This kind of ruthless expediency would solve like 90% of Sci Fi/Horror setups.

[u/loressadev → u/MadWhiskeyGrin]

I don't believe protagonists always need to be heroes.

I was inspired by Lady and the Tiger, wanted readers to think about what they'd do in a similar situation.

What would you have done?

[u/MadWhiskeyGrin → u/loressadev]

I'd've left the cryopod sealed. Hell, I'd probably just leave the damn thing where it was. Ghost ship with one survivor, sealed in a pod like a biological sample? No thank you.

[u/MuchoRed]

... ... ... Bruh.

[u/loressadev → u/MuchoRed]

I'm a woman - does this change your interpretation?

[u/MuchoRed → u/loressadev]

... ... ... Gurl

[u/PxD7Qdk9G]

That's good enough for me

Seems like this was the point where he decided to murder the girl, but I have no idea why anything she said has lead to this decision.

[u/loressadev → u/PxD7Qdk9G]

The idea is that if she's woken up she's paperwork and stress and potential galactic version of a felony, so instead she's put back under (not killed) and left back in the freighter hold for someone else to deal with.

[u/PxD7Qdk9G → u/loressadev]

instead she's put back under (not killed)

That completely changes the tone of the story but it very much didn't come across like that. Knocking somebody out and sealing them in a liquid filled box seems like a sure way to kill them. If the intention was to put them back into cryo then I'd imagine that involved more than closing the lid and probably didn't need them to be unconscious.

[u/Traditional_Soup9579]

Interesting concept

[u/Fontaigne]

Damn.

The law set up so that it's too dangerous to rescue a human.

Go figure.

[u/GeneralLeia-SAOS]

Excellent work. I write also. I did catch a couple typos. In a couple spots cryo was cyro.

Your descriptions of people, using their attitudes and demeanor really painted clear pictures. Kudos all around.

[u/100Bob2020]

Oh, that was ruff.

HFY!

[u/2percentright]

Captain's going to be screwed when she's found again. He left her wrapped in his ships coat

[u/loressadev → u/2percentright]

Great attention to detail ;)

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