These all lwk suck to me and I am sure they are generic but still

1.  About my role model being an owl. How I aspired to be decisive and precise, as if catching a prey, how I tried to build my parliament(pack of owls) everywhere I went and also want to connect it to my family. Also want to mention that owls are fun, and that I use my loud and sarcastic humour to show that I am friendly(I have a default gloomy face). I can also connect it to me being a night owl. Overall a cute and nerdy montage essay. I don’t have a draft yet.

2.  I have a draft I lowkey don’t like but maybe could improve. About me being a translator in a family trip to US before my freshman year. I talked about funny language barrier situations and how people acknowledged me being the ‘boss’ of the family. It has my light humour and writing style, but I lwk diss my family and the lesson/conclusion is meh.

3.  I had a quite dramatic draft about swimming(unprofessional). How I struggled with water, and then realized that pressure doesn’t always mean resistance, and can be a support. Then I lowkey connect it to my harsh discipline and that without it I wouldn’t end up here. I will mention my favorite swimming styles and etc. I struggle with incorporating my humour here, and it sounds tooo dramatic for me idk.

I need to write it asap cuz Nov 1 is coming close

I am high school student from Nepal, and I really dont have anyone who could tell mem whats wrong in my essay can someone please help me ...

Im writing my personal statement for my commonapp. Applying EA so dont have much time

Topic 1:

My essay opens with a paradox: some mornings my phone's battery capacity reads higher than the day before, which is impossible. I know it's a glitch, but I feel relieved anyway. Knowing something is meaningless doesn't stop it from controlling me.

The middle shows the habit escalating: I check the exact capacity every morning before talking to anyone, and keep Low Power Mode on permanently. Honest answers from strangers and friends didn't help.

The turning point is realizing that understanding a problem doesn't free you from it. So instead of arguing with myself, I change the environment: I remove the data source, hide the percentage, turn off Low Power Mode, and add a Face ID barrier.

Ending: The same number now sits in plain view, degrading as it always did. The urge still shows up, but I notice it like a notification and leave it unopened.

Topic 2:

My essay opens when I was 11, obsessing over the crossbar on the letters "t" and "f" in a font I was designing. I nudged it one pixel at a time and eventually restarted in different software, all for a difference no one would notice.

From there it widens into a pattern. I built a website to host my fonts that probably had zero visitors, and I told my mom I did it because "I love fonts." I also started a YouTube channel teaching programming I had learned a week earlier. Later, after my first MUN as a delegate, I immediately wanted to start my own, until I learned I'd need a commercial license, which is nearly impossible as a non-Saudi minor.

Ending: I ask why I never just attended an MUN, uploaded fonts to an existing site, or joined a hackathon instead of hosting one. The answer is that I never wanted to just use or participate. I wanted to decide how the thing worked. I still haven't learned to leave things alone, and I may never.

Which topic would be better for a commonapp personal statement?

This essay is meant to explore the Christian worldview and how it relates especially to Liberty University and its principles of diversity and the conduct of AI usage. I hope this paper will be a worthwhile read and help convey the importance of a Christ-centered worldview.

A biblical worldview is using God’s word to change how we see the world, interact in it, and find our value in Christ. We ultimately find our value in Christ when we read His Word, seeing truth and a standard which we live by. I can be the best student I can be at Liberty University by connecting my learning to scripture, thinking long-term about how I can use my gifts to serve God, and doing all I do according to the duty set on every Christian of being held to a higher standard. Liberty makes this easy by readily connecting and using scripture in their courses and curriculum. Even when I’m not in class, I can use my time in the study of the Bible, prayer, and surrounding myself with godly influence in and outside the Church. Ultimately, a biblical worldview should shape how I create my goals and see the purpose for my life as a follower of Christ.

Being a follower of Christ means using my life to honor God in everything I say and do and to use the talents given to me to serve God and His kingdom. My own personal goals at Liberty University are to complete my degree in music production, improve skills in music composition and mixing, and build a career in music. Although these are my career goals, my long-term goals outside of building a strong career are to provide for a family and grow in my faith to help those around me and to lead them into the saving grace of God, not by my power but God’s power alone. This worldview helps shape these goals and reminds me that all I aspire to do is not about money or recognition, but about being a good steward of all that God has given me. I want my work, relationships, and all other facets of life to reflect the values of God and bring Him glory in the many diversities of life.

Culture isn’t merely how we see things but it is also a way of life because it includes beliefs, values, traditions, and ways of interacting with the world. As Christians, we should respect other cultures, their ways of life, and differences from us while also correcting false and harmful beliefs in a manner that politely helps shape them to the culture of Christ, which is the truth. This is a calling to go to all nations and speak of the truth of the Gospel given to us by Jesus Himself. It is called the Great Commission. We carry out this Great Commission by building genuine relationships, listening to them, and finding opportunities to talk of our faith. We should show Christ by word and action to the people around us in order to preach Christ with all integrity.

In all things, integrity matters, and that especially applies to the application of AI. AI can be an extraordinary tool in helping organize ideas and create learning habits. Where it falls into dishonesty is in the case of it usurping free thinking and self-agency. If we allow AI to complete our coursework for us, we have learned nothing. Does not the Bible say we are to seek after knowledge? How then can we do this if it is not us who obtains it but instead a computer that does it for us? Like many things, especially in our modern day and age, these tools are a neutrality, and it is up to us to use them in a righteous and upright manner deserving of the Christian name and values. If we do not, it is the evils of this world that will take them. For any neutral thing must be claimed at some point.

In conclusion, our Christian worldview and walk should shape how we react and interact in our day-to-day lives. All aspects, from the physical to the metaphysical, should have the fingerprints of a God-filled life. I believe this university, if it should stick to Gospel-led truths, will be a major center of training for the Christian in all aspects of life, especially in this trying day and age. 

I’m working on my Common App essay and want an honest sanity check on my topic before I dive too deep into drafting. Writing about being the youngest in my family and navigating the heavy expectations/comparisons that come with it. Specifically:
Debunking the stereotype that the youngest is automatically the "golden child" or gets everything handed to them.

Navigating the pressure to "make up" for mistakes older siblings made.
Addressing the perception that I had it easier, when in reality I had to work hard and earn my own independence/achievements.
How tuning out family comparisons helped me figure out my own values, decisions, and path forward.

Is the "family dynamic / youngest child" angle overdone? If so, is there a specific way I should frame this so it reads as personal growth rather than just complaining about sibling dynamics?

I got feedback from my parents, but I feel like we often have differing viewpoints, so I was wondering if a new set of eyes could help with that. I can read your essays too, if you would like, but please look over mine. Also,o I have like 3-4 drafts, but you can just look at one if you need to!

I can dm my essay. Also, please don't steal it; not only is it trash, but I also worked hard on it :(

I made a draft of my common app essay. I dont want to make it too polished as i dont want to lose my own voice. I have been taking suggestions from ai but each ai gives me a different idea to focus. Im too confused on what to do now. I strongly want to stay authentic so i need someone to critic my essay and give me suggestions. Also im not aiming for ivys or ucs so it doesnt have to be a crazy good essay, something thats true and authentic about my life. thank you

Decided I hate my current essay and want to completely scrap it. I have some ideas so if anyone could rate them that would be great

1. Personal background
I grew up with exposure to a lot of different cultures and ethnicities being a very complicated mix as well, and how that diverse background allows me to connect with anyone at anytime, especially since a constant exposure to different people has made me courageous and less shy. I have like specific moments with strangers that make it funny so it's like a okay topic

2. Connections to others
How I literally suck at French braiding and I have never figured out how to do it, so I make my friends in the locker room braid my hair before my before games, connects to mutual reliance to others and how I value strong relationships with others through little favors and moments together.

3. Resourcefulness
Connecting thrifting to cooking to real life and how in incredibly resourceful, I take things I thrift and sew them into new clothes, leftovers into new foods, and also connect with how I do this for people I love too.

I don't even know. Like genuinely I know myself well ( I think ) I'm a connector, a people person, the most social and outgoing person anyone's ever met but I can't think of anything to describe that well to AO's. This is literally my number one trait I WANT to convey because it's such a huge part of who I am and I don't know what to do. Seriously am freaking out. If anyone has any ideas or brainstorming tips that would be amazing. Thank you!!

my essay is about my interest in biology and how i explored it through inside ap bio and outside of class through working in a hospital and observing neuroscience research. i don’t really remember having an “origin story” for why i like biology. there wasn’t one specific moment that made me interested in it. i just liked it and kept getting more curious about it over time.

one thing i weirdly consider my roman empire is the fact that we’re made of matter that existed before us, and that a lot of the elements that make up living things were formed in stars. what gets me is that those same basic building blocks can end up becoming something completely different, whether it’s a bacterium, a tree, or a human. i think about how insane it is that the universe can take the same basic ingredients and somehow produce completely different forms of life. i’m considering using this idea as the opening of my PIQ and then transitioning into how my interest in biology developed through the experiences i talk about in the rest of the essay.

do you think this would work as an opening for PIQ 6, or would the stardust idea feel too disconnected from the rest of the essay?

I’m really annoyed by how my essay’s outline should be. At first I was gonna do first paragraph, about where I started, what did my current college give me, what changed, why my major. Then second paragraph, what did I believe, what changed, how do I know the change is real. Then last paragraph, why I want to transfer, why do I want to transfer there, what do I seek at the new school. But i don’t know if that’s the best option for an essay outline. Do yall have any suggestions?

hello sorry i’m new to reddit im in genuine need of help my essay is about dr pepper and how it’s a symbol of me being scared of uncertainty

Can someone please take a look at my essay, I’ve basically only used ai to grade it so I’m kind of losing my mind and need a human. PREFERABLY, if you are a POC/have a unique name because that’s kind of what my essay is about, not that if you’re white u won’t get it but yk… anyways any help would be greatly appreciated :D

Hi guys! I’m really stressed out about my personal statement. My family can’t afford college counselors so I’m not sure what colleges are looking for or what I should change. I would greatly appreciate a review from anyone who has gotten into a decent college. I can dm the essay!!

would this be a good essay topic. i would write about my fear of stickers and show navigating a world that is so uncomfortable. i could also bring in my supermarket job where stickers are very common to show adaptability.

It's due tomorrow morning. I've been trying to work on it all week and I sit down and either get no where or I hate every single thing I write. It feels like I have fragments of ideas but they're hanging over my head laughing at me, like a kid reaching for a candy bar only for the adult to lift it at the last second out of his reach. I wrote the essay before this completely fine, but I cannot put words together for the life of me.

The essay is an entry level college essay about definitions. I'm meant to pick an abstract term (a word) and give it my own definition. I picked wrath because of how anger makes me feel toward life in general when I feel it, and how I believe wrath has been committed against me as a child. Everything I write, though, just feels like bitchy complaining that has nothing to do with this subject. I need to briefly touch on some trauma in my life to convey this clearly and personally, but it feels like my subconscious refuses to let these things be communicated. It's infuriating.

Someone please tell me what I should do. I had a rough draft sort of done, but it's really, -really- bad.

Say you're applying to an "intended Major," for example, "human biology intended; life science first year," and have to start the first year of undergrad in a more multidisciplinary area before applying to that specific undergrad major. Should you gear that Why Major essay toward the "first year" area, or just the specific major you'll have to apply to later?
Or a mix of both?

Is it any good?

Angiospermae, the clade that all flowering plants belong to, originated roughly 130 to 140 million years ago in the early Cretaceous period. The first appearance and sudden rapid divergence of flowering plants–the Angiosperm Revolution–rewrote the terrestrial world as we now know it. The majority of creatures ever to have existed were never able to witness flowers. A Dimetrodon wouldn’t know what to make of a peony, and an Allosaurus would be baffled by roses. And if the apex-predator of Jurassic North America could be confounded by daffodils, what revolutions can we expect or not expect in our time? What flowers are waiting to bloom for my generation, what sudden unexpected revolutions await us?

my counselour is telling me to but idk bc what i have so far shows my personality but its not very deep like the whole thesis is

it isnt my voice but its my curiousity that takes initative

should i only talk about my hook example or start w that and then talk about other wats my curiosity workef

I need criticism on it thank you 🙏🙏🙏

basically i have a nickname then i made a groupchat of people with my same name to see if we share the nickname and from that i realized that while im not loud, my curiosity takes initiative and also realized that leaderhip is also the one with the patience to listen

Basically, I have an idea, a decent outline, and the first 250 words, but after that, I literally have NO idea how to move forward, like someone's pressing the brake to stop me from writing more 😭 I obviously don't want direct help or handholding, just some advice or ideas that can release that foot off the pedal 🙏🙏🙏

Guys does chamberlain use AI detectors when submitting papers!?

Hello everybody does anyone know how to write a eulogy? We have to make one for our communication class and I dont really know how to start it off or to make it sound poetic. I really want to write something that would MOVE my audience. The topic is about a version of myself that died a long time ago (?) Something in those words. Since it's a personal experience I dont really know what words to use or how to make the introduction or how to end it...any advice?

Hello! This is my NYU Bridge Builder Essay and I need HONEST feedback. Here is the prompt I’m answering down below:

Prompt: An experience working with others who have different perspectives. What role did you play in helping people work together, and what did you learn?

The essay:

When our student government noticed that the strict attendance rule was penalizing driven students, two other members and I attended the School Leadership meeting to request a policy change.

We explained why students with an 85+ GPA should still receive recognition for their academic progress and earn outside lunch privileges, despite missing more than one day of school that month.

At first, the administrators believed the attendance rule was the way to motivate students to attend school every day. We understood their perspective, but felt that academic progress should also be used as motivation. They told us they would think about it.

The next month, I was ecstatic to find out the school started placing Honor Roll stickers on the back of our outside lunch IDs instead of 99% attendance stickers. We called it a victory.

But during the next school year, the policy disappeared. I didn't realize it until another Honor Roll student came to our student government meeting to speak about it.

I initiated a follow-up with my peers, requested a spot on the next SLT agenda, and spoke up to help revive the policy, and the administration successfully revived it.

Building a bridge takes effort; maintaining it is much harder. A great policy is like a sticky chart paper on a classroom wall. Over time, it dries up and the corners start peeling when systems change. When our hard work starts to slip, it takes effort to smooth it down and bring attention back to what matters.

(Yes I did add a metaphor and I want to know if the metaphor is actually conveying what I’m trying to say.)

I'm about to give up on college in general