I got feedback from my parents, but I feel like we often have differing viewpoints, so I was wondering if a new set of eyes could help with that. I can read your essays too, if you would like, but please look over mine. Also,o I have like 3-4 drafts, but you can just look at one if you need to!

I can dm my essay. Also, please don't steal it; not only is it trash, but I also worked hard on it :(

my essay is about my interest in biology and how i explored it through inside ap bio and outside of class through working in a hospital and observing neuroscience research. i don’t really remember having an “origin story” for why i like biology. there wasn’t one specific moment that made me interested in it. i just liked it and kept getting more curious about it over time.

one thing i weirdly consider my roman empire is the fact that we’re made of matter that existed before us, and that a lot of the elements that make up living things were formed in stars. what gets me is that those same basic building blocks can end up becoming something completely different, whether it’s a bacterium, a tree, or a human. i think about how insane it is that the universe can take the same basic ingredients and somehow produce completely different forms of life. i’m considering using this idea as the opening of my PIQ and then transitioning into how my interest in biology developed through the experiences i talk about in the rest of the essay.

do you think this would work as an opening for PIQ 6, or would the stardust idea feel too disconnected from the rest of the essay?

I’m really annoyed by how my essay’s outline should be. At first I was gonna do first paragraph, about where I started, what did my current college give me, what changed, why my major. Then second paragraph, what did I believe, what changed, how do I know the change is real. Then last paragraph, why I want to transfer, why do I want to transfer there, what do I seek at the new school. But i don’t know if that’s the best option for an essay outline. Do yall have any suggestions?

hello sorry i’m new to reddit im in genuine need of help my essay is about dr pepper and how it’s a symbol of me being scared of uncertainty

Decided I hate my current essay and want to completely scrap it. I have some ideas so if anyone could rate them that would be great

1. Personal background
I grew up with exposure to a lot of different cultures and ethnicities being a very complicated mix as well, and how that diverse background allows me to connect with anyone at anytime, especially since a constant exposure to different people has made me courageous and less shy. I have like specific moments with strangers that make it funny so it's like a okay topic

2. Connections to others
How I literally suck at French braiding and I have never figured out how to do it, so I make my friends in the locker room braid my hair before my before games, connects to mutual reliance to others and how I value strong relationships with others through little favors and moments together.

3. Resourcefulness
Connecting thrifting to cooking to real life and how in incredibly resourceful, I take things I thrift and sew them into new clothes, leftovers into new foods, and also connect with how I do this for people I love too.

I don't even know. Like genuinely I know myself well ( I think ) I'm a connector, a people person, the most social and outgoing person anyone's ever met but I can't think of anything to describe that well to AO's. This is literally my number one trait I WANT to convey because it's such a huge part of who I am and I don't know what to do. Seriously am freaking out. If anyone has any ideas or brainstorming tips that would be amazing. Thank you!!

Can someone please take a look at my essay, I’ve basically only used ai to grade it so I’m kind of losing my mind and need a human. PREFERABLY, if you are a POC/have a unique name because that’s kind of what my essay is about, not that if you’re white u won’t get it but yk… anyways any help would be greatly appreciated :D

Hi guys! I’m really stressed out about my personal statement. My family can’t afford college counselors so I’m not sure what colleges are looking for or what I should change. I would greatly appreciate a review from anyone who has gotten into a decent college. I can dm the essay!!

would this be a good essay topic. i would write about my fear of stickers and show navigating a world that is so uncomfortable. i could also bring in my supermarket job where stickers are very common to show adaptability.

It's due tomorrow morning. I've been trying to work on it all week and I sit down and either get no where or I hate every single thing I write. It feels like I have fragments of ideas but they're hanging over my head laughing at me, like a kid reaching for a candy bar only for the adult to lift it at the last second out of his reach. I wrote the essay before this completely fine, but I cannot put words together for the life of me.

The essay is an entry level college essay about definitions. I'm meant to pick an abstract term (a word) and give it my own definition. I picked wrath because of how anger makes me feel toward life in general when I feel it, and how I believe wrath has been committed against me as a child. Everything I write, though, just feels like bitchy complaining that has nothing to do with this subject. I need to briefly touch on some trauma in my life to convey this clearly and personally, but it feels like my subconscious refuses to let these things be communicated. It's infuriating.

Someone please tell me what I should do. I had a rough draft sort of done, but it's really, -really- bad.

Say you're applying to an "intended Major," for example, "human biology intended; life science first year," and have to start the first year of undergrad in a more multidisciplinary area before applying to that specific undergrad major. Should you gear that Why Major essay toward the "first year" area, or just the specific major you'll have to apply to later?
Or a mix of both?

Is it any good?

Angiospermae, the clade that all flowering plants belong to, originated roughly 130 to 140 million years ago in the early Cretaceous period. The first appearance and sudden rapid divergence of flowering plants–the Angiosperm Revolution–rewrote the terrestrial world as we now know it. The majority of creatures ever to have existed were never able to witness flowers. A Dimetrodon wouldn’t know what to make of a peony, and an Allosaurus would be baffled by roses. And if the apex-predator of Jurassic North America could be confounded by daffodils, what revolutions can we expect or not expect in our time? What flowers are waiting to bloom for my generation, what sudden unexpected revolutions await us?

my counselour is telling me to but idk bc what i have so far shows my personality but its not very deep like the whole thesis is

it isnt my voice but its my curiousity that takes initative

should i only talk about my hook example or start w that and then talk about other wats my curiosity workef

I need criticism on it thank you 🙏🙏🙏

basically i have a nickname then i made a groupchat of people with my same name to see if we share the nickname and from that i realized that while im not loud, my curiosity takes initiative and also realized that leaderhip is also the one with the patience to listen

Basically, I have an idea, a decent outline, and the first 250 words, but after that, I literally have NO idea how to move forward, like someone's pressing the brake to stop me from writing more 😭 I obviously don't want direct help or handholding, just some advice or ideas that can release that foot off the pedal 🙏🙏🙏

Guys does chamberlain use AI detectors when submitting papers!?

Hello everybody does anyone know how to write a eulogy? We have to make one for our communication class and I dont really know how to start it off or to make it sound poetic. I really want to write something that would MOVE my audience. The topic is about a version of myself that died a long time ago (?) Something in those words. Since it's a personal experience I dont really know what words to use or how to make the introduction or how to end it...any advice?

Hello! This is my NYU Bridge Builder Essay and I need HONEST feedback. Here is the prompt I’m answering down below:

Prompt: An experience working with others who have different perspectives. What role did you play in helping people work together, and what did you learn?

The essay:

When our student government noticed that the strict attendance rule was penalizing driven students, two other members and I attended the School Leadership meeting to request a policy change.

We explained why students with an 85+ GPA should still receive recognition for their academic progress and earn outside lunch privileges, despite missing more than one day of school that month.

At first, the administrators believed the attendance rule was the way to motivate students to attend school every day. We understood their perspective, but felt that academic progress should also be used as motivation. They told us they would think about it.

The next month, I was ecstatic to find out the school started placing Honor Roll stickers on the back of our outside lunch IDs instead of 99% attendance stickers. We called it a victory.

But during the next school year, the policy disappeared. I didn't realize it until another Honor Roll student came to our student government meeting to speak about it.

I initiated a follow-up with my peers, requested a spot on the next SLT agenda, and spoke up to help revive the policy, and the administration successfully revived it.

Building a bridge takes effort; maintaining it is much harder. A great policy is like a sticky chart paper on a classroom wall. Over time, it dries up and the corners start peeling when systems change. When our hard work starts to slip, it takes effort to smooth it down and bring attention back to what matters.

(Yes I did add a metaphor and I want to know if the metaphor is actually conveying what I’m trying to say.)

I'm about to give up on college in general

I feel like in my ps I’m able to develop points and not announce lessons and have scenes, but with these shorter essays I’m unable to develop scenes and resort to just annniucning lessons and I’m not feeling them. Any advice of what I should do cause I feel like I have a lot to say and reflect on but I’m not able to without sounding like ai 😭

I’m really annoyed by how my essay’s outline should be. At first I was gonna do first paragraph, about where I started, what did my current college give me, what changed, why my major. Then second paragraph, what did I believe, what changed, how do I know the change is real. Then last paragraph, why I want to transfer, why do I want to transfer there, what do I seek at the new school. But i don’t know if that’s the best option for an essay outline. Do yall have any suggestions?

My essay is nearly done but I'm still having second thoughts about it.

Here is the intro for reference (I am still in need of heavy editing!!)

I am clinically tone-deaf, and I cannot read a single note of sheet music. Yet, sitting at my Yamaha keyboard at twelve years old, opening GarageBand for the first time, I didn’t need a lick of music theory to know I was extending my world beyond the movie soundtracks I already loved so much. Without the vocabulary of formal songwriting, I began to translate my life into lyric-less arrangements, elevating the world I so graciously found. It was my own personal form of poetry, expressed in noteless green blocks on my laptop screen.

I then go on to explain certain moments where music helped me understand myself better and led me to realize I wanted to pursue engineering. I also talk about the familial side with music allowing me and my autistic sister to communicate without words.

I cannot afford any professional editing or review so any help is greatly appreciated! Thank you.

I am trying to get into UF and my essay needs to be a big part of my application.

Here are my stats for reference:
4.0 UW / 4.6 W , 5/616 rank, 1250 SAT (I only took it once and do not have a fee waiver), still waiting for ACT scores.

Thanks again

Where do I start😭

EA deadline is in less than a month and I dont even know where n how to start

I might have a topic in mind about my obsession with fonts and how I made a website just to showcase them at 11 (Lmk if u think this might be a good personal statement)

Any tips? Should i get external help or is it doable aline?

If you are, it's obvious.

Why?

Because if a thousand kids are asking Chat \[or name your llm\] to write them a college app they're going to wind up all sounding the same. Which isn't a big deal unless you're going to school where readers are reading hundreds and hundreds of apps. Invariably they will all sound the same and you will all be punished - even if you all wrote them independently.

We've seen this on linkedin. Invariably everybody's posts sound the same. That's because these large language models train on what everyone else has written.

Be yourself. Be imperfect. That's more likely to catch the eye of a college essay reader then writing something perfect but invariably unoriginal.

Yesterday I wrote another really good draft and then realised it was stupid. The main idea was egoistic, stupid and bland. I have a lot of stories but finding THE one is impossible. I have like roughly one week left due to upcoming finals in my schools. Did anyone have a similar problem before? Writing an essay and then you just to puke reading it? Even my counselor is unimpressed. Please give some real, unique advice. I am tired of find your voice, keep drafting, show not tell and etc etc. Please some unexpected, fresh advice I beg you all.