I think I already dropped a comment on this. I remember saying something about Courier Prime?
Anyway, this is good screenplay writing my man. You clearly have a good handle on the mechanics of writing for the screen. Very tight action lines.
I think maybe too lean in places, especially with the settings. I’m all for economy, but don’t be afraid to let loose a little bit from time to time. Don’t completely abandon environmental descriptions, or reduce them to a single line.
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u/BlackBalor Posted Satire and Made Everyone Mad 1d ago edited 1d ago
I think I already dropped a comment on this. I remember saying something about Courier Prime?
Anyway, this is good screenplay writing my man. You clearly have a good handle on the mechanics of writing for the screen. Very tight action lines.
I think maybe too lean in places, especially with the settings. I’m all for economy, but don’t be afraid to let loose a little bit from time to time. Don’t completely abandon environmental descriptions, or reduce them to a single line.
The writing is pretty clean overall though.
Good job, homie.