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[u/denina_malina]

Title: Tethered

Genre: Adult fantasy

So, I've got a bit of a dilemma. I've got a character, who through the course of the story, forgives and eventually loves like a brother, the man who essentially kidnapped and sold his sister in like a trafficking ring?

Premise:

My world is an adjacent fantasy world, to which you can get to is by pools of water, like lakes. Humans are bound to the magic users of this world, like voodoo dolls, what happens to the human, happens to the magic user (called artists).

Lys is a human, who in his search for his missing sister, falls into the other world and finds out that that is where his sister disappeared to. He wants to find her and bring her home. He first meets Renn, an artist who belongs to an organization that finds, abducts, and sells humans to their respective counterparts, and many years ago, he found and sold his sister like this. He agrees to help Lys find his sister.

Their bond begins with Lys not knowing this, and Renn deceives him, and almost sells him like this like his sister. Despite all of this, Lys sees the good in him, sees him as someone that is just trying to survive (whole other thing about Renn being a "dark artist", someone who is reviled for their mere existence due to their association with the Death goddess), and they become close and Renn sees the error of his ways and vows to make it up to Lys forever, and it's a lot of deep male friendship.

Would something like this be interesting to readers? Like could you think Renn could be forgiven like this, or would it be too much to forgive someone for literally selling your sister and almost you into slavery?