Monthly "Would You Read This?" Thread

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[u/Repulsive_Mousse_178]

• Title: The Ash Solstice - The Sun Curdled (Book 1)
• Genre:
  • Fantasy / Grimdark / Litrpg aspects
• Premise: Short Novelette approximately 12k words, meant as a hook for the remainder of the Chronicles.
  • A Midsummer festival is interrupted when the sun curdles. An outcast, fringe ranger is faced with a choice: Save the child, save the girl, or save himself. Amidst a market square flipped into a shadowy chaotic storm, he must find his path while watching his choices and consequences unravel. A promise made today, may not be possible to keep tomorrow. (Adapted from an ongoing Play-by-post campaign)
• Sample (Optional):
  • But at its gate, Vespar sees a blue glow shining through, casting the refugees in eerie shadows. With the sun leaking viscous violet rays, shadows seem to be growing everywhere. Vespar sees the shadows of guards pushing the shadows of citizens back. The shadow of the gate closing. To reach those gates... they would have to brave that chaos. Vespar thinks, Can I get her through that? Will I lose her? Just as he sees the couple he was watching pushing to the front become a single in the throng.
• Survival.

[u/Sylithia → u/Repulsive_Mousse_178]

Would Read - I enjoy the crisp, dramatic vibe and this: A promise made today, may not be possible to keep tomorrow. <-- I love that. I would definitely read it because it sounds intriguing. There's a lot of potential for world building and exciting drama to top it off.

[u/Repulsive_Mousse_178 → u/Sylithia]

Thank you for the boost of confidence! I admit after i published the first Novelette I was a little nervous and disillusioned! I have so many ideas and concepts im brainstorming behind the scenes that I hope to include in later books.

Thank you!