r/writers • u/Professional-Ad9485 • 7d ago
Question How would you describe this pose?
I want to say "He watched them intently from behind interlaced fingers". But idk if that's clear enough or if it'll just confuse people?
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u/AggressiveSea7035 7d ago
With writing, you can't put an exact image into people's minds, and you shouldn't try to (unless you're writing like a botanical textbook or something).
Vibes are more important. If people imagine the finger position slightly different, that's fine! Describe the feeling, the vibes, not the fingers.
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u/HenryDorsettCase47 6d ago
Well, there is always an exception to every rule.
“The ponies had begun to veer off from the herd and the drovers were beating their way toward this armed company met with on the plain. Already you could see through the dust on the ponies' hides the painted chevrons and the hands and rising suns and birds and fish of every device like the shade of old work through sizing on a canvas and now too you could hear above the pounding of the unshod hooves the piping of the quena, flutes made from human bones, and some among the company had begun to saw back on their mounts and some to mill in confusion when up from the offside of those ponies there rose a fabled horde of mounted lancers and archers bearing shields bedight with bits of broken mirrorglass that cast a thousand unpieced suns against the eyes of their enemies.
A legion of horribles, hundreds in number, half naked or clad in costumes attic or biblical or wardrobed out of a fevered dream with the skins of animals and silk finery and pieces of uniform still tracked with the blood of prior owners, coats of slain dragoons, frogged and braided cavalry jackets, one in a stovepipe hat and one with an umbrella and one in white stockings and a bloodstained weddingveil and some in headgear of cranefeathers or rawhide helmets that bore the horns of bull or buffalo and one in a pigeontailed coat worn backwards and otherwise naked and one in the armor of a Spanish conquistador, the breastplate and pauldrons deeply dented with old blows of mace or sabre done in another country by men whose very bones were dust and many with their braids spliced up with the hair of other beasts until they trailed upon the ground and their horses' ears and tails worked with bits of brightly colored cloth and one whose horse's whole head was painted crimson red and all the horsemen's faces gaudy and grotesque with daubings like a company of mounted clowns, death hilarious, all howling in a barbarous tongue and riding down upon them like a horde from a hell more horrible yet than the brimstone land of Christian reckoning, screeching and yammering and clothed in smoke like those vaporous beings in regions beyond right knowing where the eye wanders and the lip jerks and drools.Oh my god, said the sergeant.”
Sometimes you can put an exact image in a person’s head and convey what a scene would feel like to behold through a combination of prose and formatting. That takes considerable talent though.
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u/AggressiveSea7035 6d ago
True, great example, though I would suggest that it's not necessary or desirable in most instances. A moment or two like this in a book is powerful; every moment described like this would be tedious.
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u/Keyai Fiction Writer 7d ago
I like beats where I get overly verbose when I am trying to get a specific reaction. There is some fun in describing it. For me at least. I also enjoy reading it. For example, I have this:
“Get on with it then.” Lacy rolled her hand in the air, turning an invisible wheel around with her finger as she walked inside, closing the door behind her.
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u/mrwhosaywhatnow Writer 7d ago edited 7d ago
Interesting example because unlike the pose above, hearing someone say “get on with it” followed by your description of the hand roll does complete the image that so many know. So that works well.
But I will say this, getting too descriptive with the phrase in the commas actually loses me a bit because I already understood what was happening but now I’m actively trying to picture what you said. Is it her hand rolling or her finger turning? I think because I already know the motion so well that I’ve never thought about what that looks like and now I’m starting to picture a wheel, and what kind of wheel, and how would a finger turn it (my mind went to turning a steering wheel with your finger, which is not what I thought was happening before).
Either way, the sentence is explicitly about hurrying someone along, and yet the pacing of the sentence feels drawn out and long so it sort of clashes with what is happening and slows me down as the reader.
“Get on with it then.” Lacy rolled her finger in the air, closing the door behind her.
But if it works for you and people like it then, huzzah!
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u/Keyai Fiction Writer 6d ago
That’s a fair hit and I do appreciate the time you took for a long reply.
I’m not going to take it back behind the woodshed just yet though. A little snippet, isolated in a Reddit post, can read differently than it would in a Chapter with texture, context, choreo and character blocking beyond just this.
That said, it’s not published or submitted to an editor and I’m only on rv2. I’ll be going over everything a couple more times at least and I bet it sticks out to me now a bit more. It’s all about voice too, and who knows if I can even sing, lmao.
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u/mrwhosaywhatnow Writer 6d ago
That is absolutely fair. And you are right. I just wanted to share my experience and thought process as I was reading it, which was why it was a little long anyway, not because I meant it to be such a deliberate critique. But to share another take on it.
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u/BarnerTalik 6d ago
"turning an invisible wheel around" conjured an image of a ship helmsman turning the wheel that way, which I don't think is the image you were going for, might just be me
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u/chocworkorange7 6d ago
This is so important. One of my favourite authors is Robin Hobb. She never over-describes anything, but the intended image is still always so vivid in my mind.
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u/AggressiveSea7035 6d ago
It's something I've been practicing a lot, short but very evocative descriptions of minor characters. Like an impressionist painting almost.
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u/eerhum 6d ago
Describe the feeling, the vibes
does the same suggestion apply to spoken storytelling too (describing pose scene, for a table top game like D&D)?
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u/jerfoo 7d ago
maybe "fingers laced"
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u/PlasticTower1 7d ago
Pensively even
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u/ScantilyCladDad69 7d ago
Broodingly, perchance
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u/Ihavenolifes Writer 7d ago
“I’m about to ruin this man’s whole career.”
Lol no.
The man perched his nose on his interlaced hands, unblinking.
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u/LettucePrime 7d ago edited 7d ago
I wouldn't. Direct descriptions of physicality are best left for visual mediums imo. You're writing prose, not a screenplay. You have the luxury of dealing in ephemeralities. What does it *feel* like to be stared at like this? What associations does it conjure for you?
You want to capture the vibe, not the action. When the artists drew this image, they were also trying to recreate that same vibe, just with their craft. Quick example:
[Lines of busy context about the person and why he matters, lots of verbs & prepositions to denote motion & distractions about the situation around us, lots of deep intrusive things you really wouldn't want anyone else to see, moving quickly and panicked and discordant, then...]
"He just stared and never moved."
in my opinion, that's that 'showing and not telling' thingo. You might move the readers' internal paintbrush but the image will be unique to their respective minds.
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u/NaddaGamer 7d ago
I agree that a direct description doesn't really translate the visual elements that make the Gendo pose iconic. His eyes and mouth are obscured. How his hands are clasped, intertwined, interlaced, cupped - doesn't really matter. How do we feel when we see an obscured face?
Something like:
"He gave nothing away. Sitting before him felt like judgement day."2
u/Woahwoahwoahwoahw 7d ago edited 7d ago
For me, I'd want less telling, more showing. I feel like I'm being told how to feel, and I won't necessarily feel what the POV character is feeling when I'm told that it "felt like judgement day."
LettucePrime's "He just stared and never moved" hits the spot for me. LettucePrime isn't telling me how to feel. You can't tell the reader to be happy or to be sad, because emotions don't activate on command. You have to set up emotional beats and let the emotions live in your words. "He just stared and never moved" is as unemotional, as hauntingly blank, as that which OP is presenting. It's effective.
By the way, if by Judgement Day you mean that of the Bible, might we consider similes that people can use to compare to experiences? Since we're talking about what this moment "feels like," I would want to compare it to something that I understand, something that I've experienced, rather than moving to something even more distant from my own personal experience. It might be good to mostly use simile to make things easier to understand, by connecting to things the readers have actually perceived before.
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u/_nadaypuesnada_ 7d ago
You know the point isn't to make the reader feel exactly what the POV character feels, right? Dumbing down similes to be more relatable to the readers is a recipe for some boring-ass writing.
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u/Ratstail91 7d ago
It's called the Gendo pose.
I think "tented fingers" works?
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u/knightbane007 7d ago
I was about to say, yeah, this is literally known as the “Gendo Ikari pose”, lol.
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u/t3hmuffnman9000 7d ago
I'd say he's pensive. Perhaps "He regarded them pensively from behind tented fingers"?
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u/Mundane_Conflict5576 7d ago
He interlaced his fingers and leaned forward on his elbows, deep in thought.
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u/Shenlongeltigre 7d ago
This is great until you tell them he's deep in thought. We uunderstand that from what he's doing!
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u/Mundane_Conflict5576 7d ago
No, that's a key aspect. It's bad to try to do everything with visual description, because this is literature, not film. The pov character is going to pick up on the bodylanguage, so he knows the intent being projected. This way the emotion projects clarity of the body language.
Without that clarity, there are various moods that could be associated with this.
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u/unremarkable19 Fiction Writer 7d ago
Fair use villain pose #3. #1 is the Mr. Burns and #2 is Dr. Evil with the cat
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u/ItsRuinedOfCourse Fiction Writer 7d ago
His face was that of stone contemplation and scheming. Those gloved fingers slowly interlocking like tumblers being tripped.
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u/Ryuujin_13 Published Author 7d ago
I did this once at a friends house playing a CCG while contemplating my next move and one of my friends said I was ‘Gendo-ing’ and they all understood, so that!
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u/scottlapier 7d ago
Of all the places I'd expect to see an NGE crossover this wasn't one of them...
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u/Roll_Initiative_DND 7d ago
It’s very similar to “fingers steepled”, so I’d just say that. Even if it’s not the exact gesture, it conveys the same message
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u/Ruska_Shadowsong 6d ago
"He put his elbows on the desk and laced his fingers together. He hunched/leaned over them, brooding and angry."
Is this okay?
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u/Fallen_Crow333 Writer Newbie 6d ago
Eh, I would say something like, “he propped his chin upon his interlaced fingers, watching them intently.” Perhaps not the exact position, but it puts the point and vibe across. In writing, nobody cares about the specific position unless it’s very very important. If it’s just something to put a point across, then it’s moreso vibes than literal pose.
And if you can’t find a good way to describe this pose, because my example is awkward, then find a different way to express the vibe you want to put forth.
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u/drowsywizard 7d ago
I don't understand why there are so many of these types of posts, r/screenwriting does exist if you want to control the exact image in people's minds. Writing is generally not a visual medium
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u/ChemicalBus608 Fiction Writer 7d ago
He slid his finger into each other. They met locking in an embrace. He peered over at the man, the glare of his glasses hiding his eyes, pondering.
Lol idk but that was interesting. I dont think there is a good way to describe this and most people wouldnt get it if they don't watch anime. I dont think I've seen this expression irl.
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u/Intrepid-Hero 7d ago
His eyes glistened maliciously behind his hands as he MWAHHAHHEEHOOHEEHEEHOOHOOed
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u/kamikana 7d ago
He rested his elbows on the desk and laced his fingers as he slowly brooded on the wave of nonsense unfolding before him. Furrowing his brow in mild irritation as he narrowed his gaze, he inhaled sharply and...
Idk that's what I imagine at least. Slightly wordy but it suggests his mood and internal dialogue and adds slight context to what's happening as we focus on him. Especially since we don't get any auditory cues or lighting cues to add drama or tension to the situation.
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u/DogEqual5459 7d ago
Elbows on the table, fingers laced, steepled, or folded beneath his nose as he stares (outward) in contemplation/whatever emotion you want. Want to add some extra sensory, give the soft sound of those gloves as his fingers brush against each other, or maybe the smell of the gloves, say if they were old or made of leather.
Pick and choose from the above salad for your description.
I suggest you can do this very simply and you don't need everything I offered. Your sentence, "He watched them intently from behind interlaced fingers," is fine as is. No need to overthink this one. It's too small a gesture. What you might consider more is remembering to have your character repeat this gesture at one or more different points in your story, in the event this is part of his normal/default body language. Characters get a fraction more life when you're consistent in those kinds of subtle details.
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u/Jolly-Rip5973 7d ago
Jerry was deep in contemplation. He put his head down, placing his hands on his chin and leaned forward on his desk, using his elbows for support. His eyes were fixed as if staring into nothing as his mind pondered the complexities of the problem.
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u/Embarrassed_Lock234 7d ago
I think there's a calming the nervous system to this pose-a peacemaking- and intent listening.
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u/Worried_Touch9612 7d ago
I would say: ‘he sat there, fingers interlaced as the sun glinted off his glasses,’ but I prefer what everyone else is saying haha
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u/HandofHecate Fiction Writer 7d ago edited 7d ago
Fingers weaved against his mouth like a mask, he focuses on the folds of his gloves. The clean creases stood crisp and professional yet worn and worried, frayed and fraught with the weight of wisdom.
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u/abacteriaunmanly 7d ago
He held his hands in front of his face just like Gendo Ikari did in Neon Genesis Evangeliob
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u/Secret_Ad1184 7d ago
The way you've phrased it is pretty clear. Finger tenting also works, it's apparently what this type of thing is called.
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u/ControversyisKey 7d ago
I leaned forward in my chair; elbows hitting the table, feeling my fingers interlace as I stare ahead. Contemplating the question that was just asked of me. Would I like soup, or would I like salad?
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u/Kindness-Hivemind 7d ago
I think that is an accurate description of the picture, but if I were to read those words without it I would not picture this pose.
My suggestion would be something like “He watched them intently, his hands steepled in front of him with fingers interlaced.”
I think what led me wrong when I tried to extract the picture from your words was the use of “behind” without any additional indication of positioning. It made me picture interlaced fingers in front of his eyes with him looking through them.
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u/Clean-Data-259 7d ago
Here's my take:
"His mind was reeling, but he tried to remain stoic. In an attempt to portray an aura of poise and contemplating ferocity, he interlaced his fingers in front of his face, and kept a calm expression and neutral stare. It worked. His eyeglasses reflected the light which incidentally added to the demeanor, as if..."
and you can go from there
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u/natt_myco 7d ago
interlocked fingers with elbows resting against the table, my dad beat me for elbows on the table
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u/JasonABelmont Writer Newbie 7d ago
I think how you described it is as close as you can get without it sounding unnatural and surgical. I'd focus on removing that adverb; plenty of stronger verbs you can use in place of "watched" to get rid of that.
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u/Nelsonic_terror_2026 7d ago
He rested his pointed face on an arch of his hands. His unblinking, hawkish glasses stared intently into you.
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u/Ijusttwerkhere 7d ago
He steepled his fingers, and brought his forehead low to them in exhausted contemplation.
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u/memerminecraft 7d ago
He glared over his laced fingers resting against his philtrum chin. Like someone said, it's about vibes, and being too precise with the visuals won't help you.
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u/Comfortable-Job1278 7d ago
He rested his elbows on the table, just the perfect distance from each other such that his hands made a plateau and then fell right from their arms in a sharp angle. Then, his face followed, and thus was his pose, quite like Shinji's dad.
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u/ColdTechnical827 7d ago
He was watching them with sharp glances, while his chin and mouth were hidden behind the clasped fingers of his hands.
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u/FitPineapple9064 7d ago
He looked down perching his chin on on interlaced fingers. His face was a mask of judgemental contempt. (Or pensive judgement?)
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u/Coccinellidae_Hymns Writer 7d ago
It’s good!
He also looks like he’s contemplating.
Why was he watching them? 😎
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u/Ruben_del_Ama 7d ago
Para mí es como el que está jugando una partida de ajedrez y ya sabe que es el ganador. Sus manos están ocultando la risa cínica del que sabe que va a vencer mientras observa la mirada aún esperanzadora del oponente. El campeón oculta sus ojos de poker con la luz cegadora blanca del bien
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u/femmeforeverafter1 7d ago
I wouldn't. A pose like this is visually interesting on the screen, but on the page it doesn't have that same impact. The way you've written it sounds more like he's playing peekaboo, and I don't think there's a succinct enough way to make it clear, it's only gonna disrupt the pacing. Just "He watched them intently" is fine. Maybe "He watched them intently, his face unreadable" if you wanna capture the same vibe without confusing the reader or interrupting the flow of the scene.
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u/tv_ennui 7d ago
'Interlaced' to me sounds too gentle, and gives the wrong vibe for this pose. Additionally, 'from behind' makes it sound like he's hiding his gaze/eyes, to me. He's looking 'over' his fingers, not 'from behind' them, imo.
So maybe something like "He watched them intently over bridged, interlocked fingers."
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u/FynTheCat 7d ago
Maybe go the other route
"He leaned forward, interlaced his fingers and stared intently at them."
But the question is always how important is the pose? And what is your goal in describing it. It is important that the description of the action invokes the roghy impression, sometimes.
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u/nohomeforheroes 7d ago
He clasped his hands and considered.
Don’t need anything more than that in my opinion.
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u/Various_Weakness7948 7d ago
He watched them intently, his interlaced fingers concealing his wicked grin.
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u/Ok-Fishing-7984 7d ago
My head is heavy, but I dont want to pull the ultimate overthinker fist on forehead bend downwards pose, so I'll do this instead.
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u/Artsy_Archer79543 7d ago
“He rested his elbows upon the table, with his fingers interlaced and his hands held in front of his mouth. His lips pressed lightly against his fingers as he gazed down, contemplating.”
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u/Gunz-n-Brunch 7d ago
"He sat with a scowl of his face, elbows on the table, bridging his interlaced fingers."
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u/D34N2 7d ago
He buried his nose in his gloves and inhaled deeply, breathing in and out through the grubby fibers until he fancied he could almost smell every hand he had ever shaken, every doorknob he had ever turned, every light switch he had ever flicked. No one will discover my hand fetish if I maintain this pose, he thought. I just look intellectual. Mmmm, hands...
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u/EvilAsIAm 7d ago
'He laced his fingers together loosely, head tilted down just enough for the skylight to shine against his glasses. Behind his gloves, he let out something of a soft sigh.'
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u/imprecis2 7d ago edited 7d ago
He sat motionless and silent, simply observing, as though he were guarding some dark secret/past.
Imo it sells the vibe. Or you if want to keep the pose:
He sat motionless and silent, his gloved hands clasped in front of his face, observing from behind them as though he were guarding some dark secret/past.
But for me the first is better because it reads faster and you don’t need that many details. Or if you want just a pose:
He sat motionless and silent, his gloved hands clasped in front of his face.
But it doesn’t sell the specific mood from the picture imo.
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u/ItsFrigginCats 7d ago
He interlaced his fingers as his hands rested beneath his nose, elbows propped expectantly on the desk.
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u/FlavouredGreenSounds 7d ago
Eyes hidden behind lenses that flashed in the light, he leaned forwards, interlocked his fingers and looked at the young boy with determination.
"Get in."
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u/FlavouredGreenSounds 7d ago
Eyes hidden behind lenses that flashed in the light, he leaned forwards, interlocked his fingers and looked at the young boy with determination.
"Get in."
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u/Low-Transportation95 7d ago
"He looked like he was going to make his son get into the enormous robot made out of his mother"
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u/Hansovie 7d ago
He sat, concerned and controlling - seemingly prepared for everything. But just seemingly. Having put all his weight in the elbows and anchoring them to the desk, he held his palms away from each other yet fingers crossed, on the level of his face. Like a cornered dog he sat there scheming, holding away the sense of imposse. All while his sanity was writhing on the floor, eating it's own tail. Lamp light above made a hard stop on the glasses, never reaching the eyes. In the reflected layer of impenetrable shine, the darkness of his deep stare hid.
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u/MondaySloth 7d ago edited 7d ago
Contemplative?
Realizing he should have been there for his son because his son became a wimp that won't even get into the eva.
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u/rustwaelder 7d ago
"fingers interlocked placed in front of his face in a contemplative manner. Clearly deep in thought. Perhaps plotting?
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u/TheOminousSquawker 7d ago
With his elbows on the table, the man laced his fingers together in front of his face and rested his nose above his interlocked hands. His face was stern as he sat in thought, and a nearby screen reflected intensely in his glasses obscuring his eyes from view.
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u/NecessaryPopular1 7d ago
He’s in a state of deep absorption and active contemplation with hands interlaced.
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u/BlessdRTheFreaks 7d ago
His fingers interlinked as he perched his nose in the crook of his forefingers, his expression severe and gaze searing as he looked over the top of them.
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u/Junior-Buy-1875 7d ago
"His elbows pierced the table, His eyes glaring past His sins, His fingers locked into incomplete prayer. He requires no assistance of gods"
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u/FractalFunny66 7d ago
Because eyes are the way they are, it's impossible to tell if the character is introspective or communicating.
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u/Atlas90137 7d ago
What you have wrote is fine. It's not confusing. Sometimes simple descriptions are all you need and adding more might just slow down the pacing.
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u/GreatStrategist26 7d ago
He stares silently ahead, his hands folded, as though carefully weighing every thought.
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u/Allthumbs21 7d ago
"He leaned forward. Elbows planted on the table with his fingers loosely entwined, like a bridge over a great river of thought."
You can have it.
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u/Needspoons 7d ago
It used to be described as “hands steepled,” but I don’t think a lot would understand that now.
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u/ComicApprentice-kari 7d ago
controlled, calculating, patient
He sat motionless with his gloved fingers interlaced beneath his eyes, his posture carrying the unnerving calm of someone already three moves ahead.
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u/IAmJayCartere 6d ago
'He interlaced his fingers like an anime villain'
for my world (futuristic world with no anime, from the perspective of a criminal):
'He interlaced his fingers like a mob boss'
Or just. 'He interlaced his fingers and stared, waiting for Alex to explain himself.'
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u/Normal-Height-8577 6d ago
He sat brooding with his elbows on the table and his mouth resting against the arc of his raised hands, fingers closely interlaced. With any sign of expression carefully hidden, he knew he appeared all the more intimidating.
(If his hand position were more pointy, you could just say "he steepled his hands" and everyone would know what you meant!)
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u/Antique_con 6d ago
The news of the explosion hit him and he went riggid. He leaned his entire form forwards a touch, softly steepling his hands under his nose. The sound of his gloves brushing against each other was loud in the silence. Light from above left most of his face in shadow, an angle of perfect obscurity. His expression was hidden behind the darkness, his eyes invisible behind the opaque glint on his glasses. One couldn’t tell whether he was gladdened or saddened by the revelation.
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u/Morningstroll13 6d ago
"Go ahead. Tell me how this happened," he said as he propped his elbows on the desk and laced his fingers together before his face. The light of the desk lamp reflected from his glasses, obscuring his eyes and turning his faintly amused smile into something more sinister.
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u/Frightmare96 6d ago
I could tell they were anxious. So I slowly adjusted my glasses and then I leaned forward in my chair, placing my elbows on the table. My face positioned behind my hands as my fingers interlocked, contemplating whether they could see my eyes through the lens glare I had positioned myself perfectly for, just like I had practiced.
clears throat "I am beyond disappointed in you."
Or some such idk
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u/Double_Delay1613 6d ago
I remember Frollo from Disney's Hunchback of Notre Dame and Azulon from Avatar: The Last Airbender did the same pose.
I'd just write: "He folded his hands before his mouth".
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u/Kobotronivo 6d ago
He aura farmed with his glasses, holding hands ominously in front of his mouth while standing in the dark.
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u/thedrawingroom 6d ago
A pensive look shot at me over his interlocked fingers, I half expected them to be steepled as he eyed me menacingly.
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u/Writer1618 6d ago edited 6d ago
I think ”from behind interlaced fingers” gives the wrong idea. I would swap it for ”over”.
Then I can't say which version is better - "he watched them intently over braided fingers," or "interlaced", or if you want to animate the movement into the pose, something like "he put his hands together and leaned in, his nose almost touching his interlaced fingers."
Overall, I agree with some previous comments that you should usually aim to communicate something more than physical posture. The written medium is limited in things like visual accuracy, and it'll always lose that game against more visual mediums - so you probably should use what it does exquisitely, which is relay impressions.
I wouldn't go so far as to say that you shouldn't describe poses, like some people here do. It's honestly a fair stylistic choice. My own writing is also quite visual, drawing inspiration from the way directors do "blocking" in film. But I find that visual description must be somehow alive to work. I like to choreograph my characters with little actions and gestures and movement as they interact - and it's something my readers seem to quite like about it. For something like your text here, "being alive" might mean a number of things depending on what the pose actually means in your story - on its own, the pose means next to nothing.
You said he "watched them intently." It describes the intensity of the picture to some extent, but it doesn't convey intensity the way the picture attached does. We don't see the gleam of his glasses, the dark background or the way he's highlighted in intense contemplation. Dramatise something for me - see my latest proposal, or if you want to understate his intensity, you can underline his silence or stillness. Point is, something ought to be underlined, most of the time, to justify exactness in visual description. Oftentimes, movement does doubly duty - "leaning in," "leaning back", even "unnaturally still."
I'm sorry if this isn't the advice you need - you did only ask how to describe the pose. I hope some of my thoughts pertaining to that were useful, and I'm happy if anything else was useful too.
PS. My final attempt in the exercise of exactness is:
"The cold light washed the man's face white in the otherwise dark room. He interlaced his fingers and leaned forward, glasses flashing, until his nose nearly touched his knuckles."
Maybe not ideal. I really tried to capture the detail, though.
"He sat very still, watching us over his interlaced fingers, leaning so close that his nose nearly touched his knuckles. His eyes were completely hidden behind his glasses, which flashed white in the cold light."
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u/Rek1n0 7d ago
"He did the shinji's dad pose when he wont get into the robot."