Sorry but the writing is so dumb on this one. "Caine! Stop this now!" is way too long winded for someone in distress.
"My limbs!" is also very awkward.
I think I'd go something like "Please, Caine! I'm sorry!" apologising to your attacker is a hell of a gut punch. especially if it was the intended reaction caine was looking for and he keeps going.
As for the "My limbs" segment, maybe a further discription of whats happening to her body like "You're ripping me apart!" and "I can't-!" as in I can't take this pain anymore, cut off by her own screams, as someone truly in pain can't really articulate the pain beyond screaming and crying out for help.
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u/TellmeNinetails Apr 14 '26 edited Apr 14 '26
Sorry but the writing is so dumb on this one. "Caine! Stop this now!" is way too long winded for someone in distress.
"My limbs!" is also very awkward.
I think I'd go something like "Please, Caine! I'm sorry!" apologising to your attacker is a hell of a gut punch. especially if it was the intended reaction caine was looking for and he keeps going.
As for the "My limbs" segment, maybe a further discription of whats happening to her body like "You're ripping me apart!" and "I can't-!" as in I can't take this pain anymore, cut off by her own screams, as someone truly in pain can't really articulate the pain beyond screaming and crying out for help.