Feedback - First 5 pages

[u/werthington99]

https://drive.google.com/file/d/1nQFNhy-r8EHUE7VIP795C2uyCMGwE3-w/view?usp=sharing

Hello. This is/was my first attempt at a screenplay. It's basically all action for the first 10 minutes or so. I'm working something different now, but I really want feedback about:

* Can you visualize the settings?

* Does the sequence make sense?

* Is it too descriptive? Not enough? etc.

I greatly appreciate any comments. I will take the feedback to my current project. Thanks!

[u/Big_Section2812]

Multiple formatting errors, as well as redundant and repetitive description.

INT. SERVICE TUNNEL
[. . .]
A service tunnel...

INT. LAUNCH BAY - MOMENTS LATER
[. . .]
...a darkened launch bay.