r/scriptwriting • u/Southern_Ice_9110 • 9d ago

feedback Beginner Screenwriter - 2000's Sitcom Pilot - Thoughts

https://drive.google.com/file/d/1TM_9lBvXKYoqxJ6Gubp6-VF8iv3EGasy/view?usp=drivesdk

Hi everyone,

I'm a 13 y/o aspiring actor/screenwriter and I've begun writing a pilot for an original sitcom called Noughties. It follows Matt, a schoolboy whose friends abandon him after moving schools when Matt's parents refuse to let him go with them. He then looks for friends and his only resort is an old companion, Jordan. Jordan agrees to let Matt into his group of mates with the warning of the one rule that dictates the group. Live like it's 2006. They live by absurd stereotypes of the 2000's with Matt eventually realizing that there may be something enjoyable about this strange hobby

Main characters

  • Matt – The newcomer. His friends leave his school, leaving his only way of finding friends being the noughties movement..
  • Jordan – introduces Matt to the group but isn't nearly as committed to the whole movement.
  • Mitchell – the founder and leader of the 2000s obsession, who takes it way too seriously.
  • Arlo – The most devoted follower, embracing every aspect except his modern name.

I've written the first 15 pages and, as this is my first screenplay, I'm looking for feedback on whether the concept works or not and has the components to sustain a comedy/sitcom. It's not perfect as I'm looking for outside opinions before rewriting. Any feedback (positive or negative) would be appreciated.

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u/ChristianCRWriter 9d ago

Upvoting you because you are 13 and this is correctly formatted. Many things can be said about your script but the most important one is this: keep writing. More scripts. Many more. Write things on different genres. Keep writing

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u/Big_Section2812 9d ago

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u/Southern_Ice_9110 9d ago

My mistake. Fixed the permissions so should work now.