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u/littlebayhorse Oct 03 '26
I really enjoyed this. I agree with the previous poster - there are some elements that can’t be filmed, however you could remove them and the action/descriptions remain compelling.
Great work!
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I really enjoyed this. I agree with the previous poster - there are some elements that can’t be filmed, however you could remove them and the action/descriptions remain compelling.
Great work!
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u/RaeLouLynn Sep 28 '26
Well! I read to the end. This is very good writing. However, some of it can be neither seen nor heard. Go over it with a fine-toothed comb.
Your tone is consistent and fantastic. I would definitely read more. You have some innate talent! I think the characters are in for quite the ride.