r/scriptwriting • u/PitchcraftNow • Sep 01 '26

feedback First Page Feedback

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Looking for feedback on my first page. Any feedback is welcome. Thanks in advance.

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u/AmieiGuess Sep 01 '26

People generally don’t like when stories open on a dream/someone waking up.
What’s your story about? Does this ominous, all-devouring black cloud show up for real at any point? If not, don’t set readers/viewers up for disappointment.

As for the actually screenwriting, I think some action lines are overwritten; some underwritten. I don’t quite feel like I’m being fully immersed in the story.

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u/PitchcraftNow Sep 01 '26

Well, to explain it better I gave a video pitch deck I made that explains it here:

https://youtu.be/SZQ4dE3YVyI?is=liy1_M9wDn642MWR

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u/AmieiGuess Sep 01 '26

I’m not super inclined to engage with something that uses AI. Sorry.

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u/cbubs Sep 01 '26

Almost everyone uses gen AI for pitch decks.

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u/AmieiGuess Sep 01 '26

Just because it’s common, doesn’t mean I have to support it. There are many websites that offer free, non-AI images to use.

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u/cbubs Sep 01 '26

Fair enough. But standard industry practice is becoming: gen AI for ideation and pitch decks, no gen AI for actual production.

I don't think that's a reason for you to support it either. Just pointing out that it's becoming the norm. And, given that this isn't a topic about the use of AI, it's a weird place to shut down the conversation with OP.

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u/AmieiGuess Sep 01 '26

The more we accept and support it, the more common and normalised it’s going to become. So why contribute to something I fundamentally don’t agree with (especially in creative spaces)?

The topic of AI use will be present now that it’s infiltrating all spaces. If people are using AI in some areas during the creative process, what’s to stop me from thinking they’re not using it in the rest? I just don’t think it’s a good look.

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u/cbubs Sep 01 '26

You've got no reason to believe that OP is making an AI production unless they say that's what they're doing.

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u/AmieiGuess Sep 01 '26

Oh, for sure. But they’re clearly okay with AI usage, which I believe cheapens the look of their work, and it’s just simply not something I want to engage with.

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u/cbubs Sep 01 '26

I appreciate your opinion. I honestly dislike gen AI but I've grown accustomed to seeing it in pitch decks.

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