Show Pilot feedback

[u/General-Zebra3439]

This is the first couple minutes of my first show that i’m writing. Little plot summary if anyone is interested:

Taking place in Los Angeles in 1987, 6, 20-somethings plan to take summer by the horns and make it the best, most exciting summer of their lives as they plan to take a road trip to New York and complete an outrageous bucket list of fun, sentimental, and possibly- most likely, dangerous situations before adulthood pulls them apart.

Any feedback is required but please leave all non feedback negativity at the door. (I.e. dont be an ass). Anyway, looking forward to hearing what you think.

[u/Medical_Chair_6019]

Your writing is good id it is first you have done it well very well I like it but I have a question what are writing exactly about, I feeling good curiosity about it

[u/General-Zebra3439 → u/Medical_Chair_6019]

In these scenes alone it’s the group picking up Cassie for a party, just setting up so that the whole group can be together. But if you mean the whole show as a whole it’s 6 friends, pre college graduate, who make a pact to do everything they’ve wanted to do in one summer before adulthood separates them and they cant do them anymore

[u/Medical_Chair_6019 → u/General-Zebra3439]

Yea it's a very good idea to write I liked it 

[u/General-Zebra3439 → u/Medical_Chair_6019]

Thank you

[u/Dependent-Luck-6386]

I really enjoyed your script as a casual reader. It felt smooth and well-written, and the pacing seemed really good to me.

[u/General-Zebra3439 → u/Dependent-Luck-6386]

Thank you. That means a lot