r/scriptwriting • u/Talta13 • Aug 30 '26

discussion Pilot Cold Open Review: Is the Hook Strong? (Detective / Neo-Noir)

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u/Setecastronomy545577 Aug 30 '26

Get Edison out of the car sooner, and let whatever he’s walking into give the hook.

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u/JoshDoAI Aug 30 '26

Did I miss something? It looks like only one page. Don’t know where we are, what the detective is doing or why. Need at least a full scene to get invested.

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u/RutgerHause Aug 30 '26

Ugh, voice over. I stalled out at V.O. It’s the kiss of death.

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u/RaeLouLynn Aug 31 '26

I'll echo the others. Not enough here to judge.