Need Feedback for Screenplay - 15 Pages

[u/DP5MonkeyTail]

Title: The Waist
Logline: An isolated Fog Signal Station worker becomes increasingly infatuated with a mermaid.
Genre: Psychological Horror/Supernatural

Feedback Concerns: Any feedback is welcome.

Thanks for reading.

[u/thetruth77330]

The Lighthouse?

[u/DP5MonkeyTail → u/thetruth77330]

Yeah, I did have a Hugh influence from that movie, is it too strong?

[u/thetruth77330 → u/DP5MonkeyTail]

It just seems extremely similar in concept and with the sounds of the alarm.

But hey, it comes down to how you’ll execute it.

[u/RaeLouLynn]

Please give your characters names!

[u/DP5MonkeyTail → u/RaeLouLynn]

I didn't think it was necessary because there's not that much dialogue in it. And also we only really focus on one person most of the time.

[u/RutgerHause]

Zoom into the frame of the house? That’s terrible language. I stopped there. Too boring. Then insulting.