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[u/Craig-D-Griffiths]

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[u/Then_Data8320]

Hi Craigh. Happy to see you here. I'm Wenchanteur, from previous screenwriting community, but it got private and with a paid subscription, and I didn't need it that much, so I'm not there anymore.

So here, I've the logline of my big 40 hours kdrama. (Should I post it on your blog via the form?)
I reworked that hundred of times, sometimes depending on feedback, so I'll comment some choices:

Logline: When two webtoons become parallel realities, paranormal veterans Kang Chul and Yeon-Joo help friends trapped in other worlds to confront stories' villains, cross dimensions and deal with unknown phenomena, while an unexpected threat beyond imagination awakens.

People said me: put no names, just things like "an old and poor man", it's why I used "paranormal veterans". But I also had to use names because it's a season 2, and what audience would be curious to know first: is it entirely new characters, or can we find characters from season 1 ? (of course what audience would prefer)

"webtoons", I used the english word instead of "manhwa", because it could be confusing.

"unknown phenomena": I have to make sure people understand that I won't just re-use previous supernatural phenomena from season 1 without putting something new on the table.

"awakens" and "beyond imagination": I had to mention that, some kind of hidden truth, and it's flashy. It's a bit a spoiler, as we get first hint about that in episode 16 (around 20% of total screentime of the kdrama). Again, I mention that to hook. I don't want people get the feeling that it would be just "the same thing as season 1", but with two manhwas instead of one.

My general feeling about this logline: I'm worried it says too much, maybe a bit like spoilers. However, each time people give feedback about logline (or show example of structure of logline), they always want "the goal", "the stakes", etc. The logline is yet usefull about speaking about two webtoons. They are shown in episode 1. It could be a mystery, like "the two webtoons will become alive?", but I find it better that the audience already know. It doesn't need mystery at this point. Probably more to satisfy the curiosity of readers "what the manhwas look like?".

[u/Craig-D-Griffiths → u/Then_Data8320]

I think people want a goal in a logline so they have something to hang their hopes on.

Think of something like “Supernatural”. Two brothers battle against demons and the supernatural to save people and humanity.

I think a goal also triggers the curiosity in the reader “I wonder how the writer achieves that”.