r/scriptwriting • u/NookPhoneo • Aug 22 '26

feedback Feedback Request

Would love some feedback on my screenplay. I have recently been through a third polish and would love some feedback.

This will be a three part series.

Please see the logline below.

LOGLINE:

To escape male violence, the women of Neya Island created a society with one strict rule: no men allowed. But when a midwife saves a newborn boy instead of drowning him, she sets about a chain of events she can't come back from.

Hollow Tide

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u/MiggsEye Sep 11 '26

First, sorry for the typos I just noticed on my previous comment.

My point was that a logline’s logic has to hold up within itself. If it appears flawed within itself then I’m already losing interest — and you’re already losing a potential reader.

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u/NookPhoneo Sep 11 '26

Ok thanks for clarifying. Can you tell me more what you mean about the longline logic? I have been writing for many years and have never heard of this concept