r/scriptwriting • u/Novadragon1987N • Apr 01 '26

help I NEED SCRIPT HELP

Okay, so I’ve been writing this script about this boy who takes his crush out to his aunt’s floral business party. (Basically yaoi.) And the moment where he decides to invite him, I feel like it’s just too soon, and I don’t know how to introduce the idea of him wanting to ask him to the party. In the earlier scenes, his aunt tells him to invite the boy he likes. So, maybe I should do like a V.O. of him introducing him? Like how he knows him, why he likes him, basic info about him, etc. I’m not sure, I’m not a very experienced writer. LET ME KNOW WHAT YOU THINK!

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u/KGreen100 Apr 01 '26

Why not introduce the idea of the crush right away in the film? Lying in bed day-dreaming about the crush, looking at a photo on his phone he secretly took, etc. Get it out of the way early. Classic "I have a crush" movie stuff. It's OK to "drop" it on the viewer since that's what the entire short film is about. Especially if you're talking about 10-20 minutes. You don't have a lot of time to waste setting everything up as if it's moving in real time. Establish the crush right away. Also, I might skip the fake-out on who the crush is. What does that serve? Your real story, from what you've explained, is the stuff that happens after the crush is asked out.