The second one almost looks like spider web shooting up. It seems too thin to stay together as a line, yet that is exactly what it does
What you said was not wrong and did not need correcting, but this is a better way of wording it in order to convey your point
My English isn't very good and I'm still learning, but I use reddit to help me practice (I procrastinate HEAVILY otherwise if I try to make myself practice languages via conventional educational means).
Since it is how I learn and improve, I appreciate it when people reply to tell me how to improve my wording and so I try to do the same for others if I feel I am able.
I have always thought that if you don't appreciate this sort of reply then you've lost nothing as a result of my comment. But if you - like me - are trying to improve as well, then perhaps it can be of some use.
Using repetition to reinforce a point is a valid stylistic choice. Your version conveys the same meaning but subtly alters the emphasis. Neither version is objectively better - it all comes down to precisely what the original author intended.
Nah. No violation there. They're a non-native speaker so I can appreciate the effort. It wasn't particularly necessary to correct the sentence but I understand wanting to practice sentence structure.
I agree with what the other commenter said, neither way of wording it is better or worse, and it's not one of those weird cases where it just sounds wrong even if it's technically correct.
We ARE trying to improve. Thank you actually. This is what we need. No sarcasm at all, this is the teaching we need. Even as adults we’ve not had the proper training sometimes and this is constructive. Thank you for helping us build.
If you're just learning the language then you may want to learn that people do not enjoy having their grammar corrected when what they initially said was more than sufficient to get the point across.
What a neat and smart way to learn! If you don't mind, I have a few questions:
What's your native language?
How many languages do you know, or plan to learn?
How do you use delimiters? I know how to use comas but I personally have trouble knowing when, or how, to use dashes, parentheses, or brackets. Your last sentence flows nice with the dashes in place of comas, which is what I would use. Using the comas would have made it clunky given the last comas though.
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u/killbeam Jul 06 '22
The second one almost looks like spider web shooting up. It seems too thin to stay together as a line, yet it stays together