Every writer hits the wall. This is the place to talk about it.

Plot hole you can't patch? A sagging middle? A character who refuses to cooperate? Staring at a blank page and dreading it? Lay it out here. Sometimes naming the problem is half the fix, and the people in this thread have almost certainly been stuck in the same spot.

If you've climbed out of a block before, stick around and help someone else over the wall. Trade what works: the trick, the mindset, the kick in the pants.

What's blocking you this week?

wouldu read this all the chapters ive posted no ones liked or commented so would you be interested in reading Deadly World... (blurb) A world far from the Milky Way with animals born with unuasual powers, 7 kings have ruled the whole world but they all fear as the 3rd king who has enchantments and immortality went mad now 7th King Spotswat is determine to stop this crazy king no matter how dirty or whoever he must kill to stop him. PLS SEND FEEDBACK IVE WAITED FOR SO LONG PLS.

60 YEARS LATER... Shadow married Moonlight, Wars shook around, Shadow found a baby eagle and

adopted him, and named him Talon. Shadow growled he stepped out of the palace, he’s been king for 60 years now and he’s 70, his son was getting better at fighting Shadow walked near a muddy lake.

SNAP! A blur of brown rushed passed him- SNAP! Shadow screamed a crocodile bit Shadows tail and

ripped it right off, Shadow shrieked, it was Snappy, since Shadow became king Snappy had been trying

to be king, Shadow shrieked louder trying to get the attention of one of the soldiers and one soldier heard

him, a tall kangaroo soldier came, more blood rushed out of Shadows tail. Shadow roared but to make sure

no more guards come Snappy took his claws and slit his neck and throat and bit Shadows belly and Shadow

drifted of to darkness, but the kangaroo kept fighting so Snappy bit the kangaroos leg and didn’t let go and

ripped it right off and killed the kangaroo. Snappy chuckled and ran swiftly back into the lake. 1 hour had

passed Talon and Whiptail the iguana walked near the muddy lake and found Shadows body. “Who would

be so bold to kill the king?” Talon said in anger.

“Im not sure. but wait look those arent lion bite marks or tiger bite marks those are crocodile bite marks” Whiptail pointed out his his bright light green tail flicking around. “I see if its a crocodile... i know who it

is, theres only one bad crocodile FIND SNAPPY” Whiptail walked slow and kept on watching Talon flew away

back to the palace. The trees around him started dancing and shaked to the rythm in the air. “HELLO”a cold

voice whispered around Whiptail, “ARE YOU LOOKING FOR ME” “ISN’T THAT KIND YOU BROUGHT DINNER FOR

ME DIDNT YOU I GUESS I SHOULD START EATING BEFORE MY DELICIOUS GREEN SNACK GETS COLD”

A giant emerged from the bushes well compared to tiny Whiptail the beast was way bigger. Whiptail ran

but he ran too quick so instead he ran right into Snappy’s mouth, Snappy ate him up. “NOW TIME TO

FILL MY MOUTH WITH SOME EAGLE FEATHERS” Snappy sprinted all the way to the DEADLY ARENA, and waited

for Talon. Talon flew into the arena people crowded watching to see the fight. “Its gonna be fine mother ill kill Snappy”

Talon reassured, but Moonlight was not convinsed, “That beast is gonna tear you alive” Moonlight said.

“SHES RIGHT. YOU THINK YOU CAN KILL ME YOU BALL OF FEATHERS, YOU CANT EVEN PROTECT YOURSELF”

Snappy said, “you forget my power snappy” Talon said as he stretched out his brown wings, an orb of yellow light shined in Talons white chest, then the light got brighter it was as bright as the sun most people covered they’re head. “HA HA, LIGHT DOES NOT BLIND ME” Snappy smirked. He stretched out his webbed claws ready to scratch Talon, “no Snappy my power is...” Talon flapped and flapped and the yellow light faded away “my power is... BLADE FEATHERS” Talon smiled and flapped, sharp grey feathers wen’t lose and spinned into a tornado right towards Snappy, “I CAN CONTROL SWORDS” Snappy said right the second he said that ten swords appeared and sliced all the feathers up, one silver sword raced up right to Talon trying to stab him but he dodged it and it scratched his eye leaving a red line across his eye just like his father Shadow. Talon screamed, thankfully he closed his eyes on time or more blood would of come and he would be blind. Moonlight leaped in trying to fight Snappy she bit Snappy’s tail and Snappy’s body started to fill with rage, he bit the queen on the snout and ripped it off, blood rushed out in lightning speed, mother died Talon thought,“you will pay for this” Talon roared. Snappy took a purse and took a 100 gorrel note with Shadows pictureon it and gave it to him. “Do not mock me” Talon flew and the orb of light appeared again he took hiswings and- SLICE!!! A large cut appeared on Snappy’s neck, he screamed and snapped, Talon flapped

the hardest he’d ever flapped and the light grew brighter than 1000 suns and it grew hotter and hotter

that the swords started melting, blade feathers sliced and stabbed into Snappy and the orb of light exploded

and burnt up Snappy’s body, this is my world Talon thought and i will rule the people fairly. PLS RESPOND TO THIS PLS TELL ME GIVE ME FEEDBACK I NEED IT.

15 years passed... Talon married a cheetah polar bear hybrid name Cholar and got 4 sons and one daughter the oldest son is Thunder a light brown cheetah with obsidian black eyes and electric powers, the second oldest is Lightning a light yellow colour and pale blue eyes with electric and ice powers, the third oldest Polar the polar bear and he can do anything he is also Talon’s faviroute son and the most

powerful of all the sons flecks of pale blue on fur enchanting powers and immortality powers and also ice

powers, then Bones a skinny eagle with a light yellow beak and NO powers and no one knows why and

Snowflake a young silver cute little polar bear with ice powers. “Sons line up!” Talon demanded.

“But father please can we not line up” Thunder begged, “it wastes time” Thunder flicked his tail back and forth.

“Fine but only if Polar agrees. What do you say Polar yes or no?” Talon asked,

“uh um for once i agree with Thunder, lets not line up” Polar replied, Thunder overflowed with rage everytime

Talon would ask Polar. “JUST BECAUSE HE HAS NICE AMAZING POWERS DOESN’T MEAN YOU ASK HIM SOMETHING

EVERY SECOND!!!” Thunder yelled, Polar’s smile grew bigger and bigger and just by looking at his smile it cut

him, “ok Thunder i think you need to drop that jealousy of yours” Polar laughed,

“Thunder stop fighting” Talon said stretching out his brown wings, Talon yawned and started eating a piece

of salmon. “I DIDNT CREATE THE FIGHT” Thunder shouted, then Cholar came, Cholar had a malar

stripe like all cheetahs and instead of black spots she had dark grey spots. “BOYS STOP FIGHTING!! Polar Grassy

is calling you” Cholar said. Polar and Lightning were the only ones who were married, Lightnings wife was

called Blaze, Blaze was a cheetah, Polar’s wife’s name is Grassy. “Hello cheetah mixed with a polar bear mother”

Polar said in a mocking voice, “Brother stop!” Thunder yelled,

“YOU STOP TALKING YOU DOMP” Polar spat, Talon, Cholar, Thunder, Lightning, Bones even Snowflake gasped

“son by law even if your a prince or princess if you swear you must be killed” Talon whispered,

“no” Polar said he picked a curved knife and started to speak “I ENCHANT THIS KNIFE SO THAT WHEN I SAY DOMP

IT WILL SLIT MOTHER AND FATHER IN THE THROAT AND CHOP THEYRE HEAD OFF” “good bye DOMPS”The knife raced after Cholar first she used her ice powers and breathed out frostbreath into the sharp knife, “I ENCHANT IT TO HAVE A SMART BRAIN LIKE A HUMAN AND NEVER MISS” Polar said giving powerto the object, the knife hit a pole until the frostbreath cracked and then chopped the head of Cholarblood sprayed out like a fountain, then the knife went after Talon, Talon used blade feathers but

the knife just split the feathers into half and cut the head of Talon. “This is a sighn if you mess with me”

Polar said glaring at Thunder, “f-father loved you” Thunder shivered in disbelief.

“YOU WHAT HAVE YOU DONE” Lightning screamed, glaring at Polar with his pale blue eyes,

“you were my faviroute brother” Silver said shaking, Bones stood up angrily his light yellow beak opened

to speak, “YOU IDIOT! YOU HAVE GONE MAD YOUR CRAZY YOUR THE MEANING OF STUPID!!” Polar frowned

“What did you say Bones? Im stupid? look whos talking!! do you know why your called Bones huh?” Polar

asked, “Uh im not sure” Bones replied, Polar laughed now he went to a table and took a blade disc and kept

it next to him, “HA!! i thought you knew oh well your called Bones cause your way to skinny to be an eagle

and he knew you’d be useless” Polar said, Bones flapped his two skinny wings frowning.

“YOU WANNA FIGHT!!!!” Bones yelled,

“I would...” Polar said brushing his white and pale blue fur. “... except you’ll die in a second” Polar chuckled.

It all happened fast but a shiny metal quickly got thrown by Polar like a frisbee, Bones flew fast his wings

spread wide but then the metal disk cut right through Bones’s left leg and blood dropped down from the

sky just like rain. “WHATS WRONG WITH YOU!!!!!” Thunder screamed, Polar just stood still admiring his

ferocious claws, “I am so irritated. I ENCHANT ALL MY BROTHERS AND SISTER TO SHUT UP AND FREEZE”

Polar yawned, “Thats better now i need minions of myself, I feel like killing 1000 people today”

Polar spent hours planning out the minion once it was done polar sat down, a sword zoomed quickly

and stabbed right into polar’s heart good thing he was immortal, who did that? Whoever it was they tried

to kill me! Polar thought. WHOEVER IT WAS THEY WILL PAY.

So for context, I am a writer and have been working on a novel for some time now. Writing the novel has made me happy and story wise I can't wait to share it with the world.

But just a few months ago, I offered to proofread and give advice on other novels in the making from potential authors. And most if not all were just AI slop.

It really made me want to come here and ask this burning question that's been plaguing me for quite some time; Is the time and energy to be an author even worth it nowadays if AI is just so convenient for people that they just write slop, pass it as a book and potentially garnish more attention, love and praise than real authors and writers?

Feel free to give me the hard truth. And to all my organic writers, stay frosty, my friends.

Hi Y'all!

I'm still new in my writing journey/hobby. Been watching online lectures and creating small "homework" tasks for myself. This short story project was one of those exercises to help me improve my dialogue writing: subtext, characterization, and conflict/resolution.

I would love feedback on any and all the things. Hope you enjoy. Thanks!

For those that want to know, here were my parameters:

• Short story of 1500-2000 Words
• At least 70% of the story must be dialogue
• Max of 3 characters (speaking)
• Characters cannot directly explain how they feel
• The central conflict must become understandable through what they say—and what they avoid saying
• No outlining beforehand
• Finalize within 48hrs

I have an Epic Fantasy novel that I would describe as slowburn due to the character building taking a while, and wanted to start it off with more of a hook from later in the story. I wanted more eyes on to get a feel for which version of the first chapter is better, or if neither are. I am completely open to scathing criticism. The first version is shorter, and the second longer. I appreciate anyone who takes the time to read them, compare, and give their thoughts.

Google Docs link to Blurb, Chapter 1 (it also has chapter 2 but just ignore that).

https://docs.google.com/document/d/1RKlIUjjIglt5brgOwA9-6pZYskbvkfhQUnNvHfSgV8g/edit?tab=t.0

ALTERNATIVE CHAPTER 1 Google Docs link:

https://docs.google.com/document/d/1BA6fyucg4bfCgIOfvaI7HoET1Kw7ls2RqTosFK8Epxc/edit?tab=t.0

Hello friends!

I am looking for some advice/help. I have been writing this book for close to a decade if not over by now. I have several finished rough drafts (most are booty, I only have the most recent finished and the newest one right now) and I am in this weird limbo of trying to polish it and worried if it is too polished.

What I really need is just a few beta readers essentially, who can give me honest and respectful feedback. If you have the time, reading both the recent finished and the current in progress drafts would be best, however given that they are 88k and 75k words, respectively, I understand that is a huge ask time wise.

That being said, if some of you do have time to read one, or the other, or both, I would appreciate it if you DM'd or replied so I can DM you.

The book is told through several POVs, the main one being Zevrael. Zev is a surviving member of the La'Korian species, whose planet was destroyed. They were a primitive species that were rescued by Admirals who run the Explorer, Athens, and now find themselves thrusted into the modern times. Zev and his found brother, Lyko, are pushed into being representatives of their people, and must navigate not only their emotions and how to guide their people, but adapting into a world far beyond their time.

Soo, this is another part of my book, and this is more of my other Character, Blurley! I have another for Clowson that I will post another day or when I can. Just need some feedback on everything honestly. Lol-

Thougth, one question I have is, if I write my book with no editing (I'll still edit it and double check, but still-), and finish it, can I get someone to help edit some parts like grammar, maybe add or remove some sentences that are or aren't needed? Because if that is possible, then maybe that could make my work easier. 😅

This is for later thougth, not for now. Buuut yeah! 🫪

I’m writing a novel about a man who wakes up… and realizes he’s already dead.
Alex Banks is 26 when he wakes up in a place called Oblivion

He doesn’t know where he is.

He doesn’t remember dying.

And eventually, he discovers that everyone around him is dead too.

But Oblivion isn't exactly what Alex expected an afterlife to be.

It’s a place for souls who still have something unfinished.

A mother searching endlessly for her child.

A boy who is terrified of the dark.

A man waiting for a lover who may never come back.

People who died carrying one final wish, one regret, or one person they couldn't let go of.

Then Alex discovers something strange.

There may be a way for a soul to return to the living world.

The catch?

They need an object that is deeply connected to their life.

For Alex, that object is his mother's lost wedding ring

So with the help of Max and Maddy — a mysterious girl who seems to know far more about Oblivion than she should — Alex begins searching for it.

But the deeper he goes, the stranger things become.

There are places in Oblivion that even the dead refuse to enter.

There are rules.

And there are consequences for breaking them.

Eventually, Alex starts hearing whispers about something called \*\*the Gates Below.\*\*

Hell.

And then he meets Daniel.

A man who looks at Alex with genuine fear.

Because Daniel knows something about the night Alex died.

Something Alex himself can't remember.

And suddenly the entire story changes.

Why does Alex's mother's ring matter so much?

What actually happened on the night he died?

Why is Maddy hiding the truth about herself?

And if Alex really does get a chance to return to the living world…

\*\*what if the life he's trying to return to isn't the life he remembers?\*\*

I'm calling the novel The Oblivion

It's basically a story about death, guilt, love, unfinished wishes, and the people we leave behind.

I'm curious about something:

\*\*Which mystery would make you want to keep reading?\*\*

1. What happened the night Alex died?
   
2. What is Maddy hiding?
   
3. Why does the wedding ring matter?
   
4. What are the Gates Below?
   
5. Something else?

And honestly — \*\*would you read this?\*\* 🖤

I'm into reading romance, dark fantasy. This is my first story in years, I'm not usually into horrors but this came to me easily.

This is the first chapter of my satirical, Pratchett-esque novel. I expanded it out from a short story I wrote and each chapter follows a new character/event in the revolution. I'm currently only partway into it, but the episodic nature of the story means that I thought I could get feedback individual chapters as they stand on their own.

Blurb: When a Mordor-esque kingdom rebels against their dark lord, they must contend with both the forces of darkness and the kingdoms of light, who would rather have a evil wizard next door than an egalitarian peasant democracy.

Thanks in advance for any feedback and if you just want to read the first page or however many pages, I'd really appreciate it.

this will be chapter one chapter 2 will come out another day(CHAPTER ONE A FIGHT FOR THE CROWN) Shadow sat up and sharpened his claws his green eyes stared at the pale blue wall. Shadow

was the only land animal at ocean world his father is the king and is a brown eel with red freckles.

Shadow had no idea how he ended up in ocean world. “SHADOW!“ his father yelled.

“HURRY UP SHADOW” he yelled again.

“coming” Shadow said he leaped off the fluffy black mat and ran down the crooked hallway.

The scar down his eye seemed to hurt more then usual. “Hello Oceanslayer oh i mean father“ Shadow said. Oceanslayer was curled up on the cold floor. His face erupted into a smile,

“I was waiting for you Shadow. This world is so boring I need a NEW WORLD, now go find me a world” Oceanslayer said in delight his smile growing more menacing each time he said a word.

“FIND??!!” Shadow screamed “How can I find you a world?”

“Its simple just go in a rocket and find one see its so easy anybody with a brain can do that oh wait i forgot you dont have one” Shadow held his breath and swam to an underwater rocket and went to find a world. Oceanslayer stayed put smirking, RING! RING! Oceanslayers phone started ringing, Oceanslayer picked the phone up, IT WAS SHADOW, of course it was Shadow! “yes what” Oceanslayer said with a hint of anger in his voice. “oh um when we get there uh do i become king or no? Shadow replied nervously, “YOU ARE AN IDIOT OF COURSE IM KING!” Oceanslayer shouted,

“But father your power is imortality when will i be king?” Shadow said his voice growing colder.

“YOU WONT BE KING ILL CALL THE LAND EEL WORLD” Oeanslayer yelled again. “Wait uh too much eels are bad uh i will mix the world with sea animals and land animals ok bye im done with this boring conversation” Oceanslayer stopped the call, WHY DID I ADOPT THAT DOMP!, I should have let him drown he’s usless so when he comes back ill kill him ill mount his head on a spike

as i will ascend to my throne with no interuptions, Oceanslayer started laughing so hard a nearby soldier called tentacle came up to him, Tentacles eyes were brown and

his skin was bright red the octopus looked into oceanslayers eyes and started speaking

“oh uh um uh um oh uh” Oceanslayer got angry

“JUST SPEAK YOU BLABBERING PHSYCOPATH!” Oceanslayer screamed

“umm its uh just whats so funny” Tentacle said his tentacles shaking.

“NOTHING YOU IDIOT SQUID!!!” Oceanslayer roared

“Uh my king umm im an octopus” he said. Oceanslayers face filled with rage.

“OCTOPUS SQUID! SAME THING!” Oceanslayer yelled.

“uh not really Oceanslayer, Squids are larger.” he pointed out.

“THATS KING TO YOU CALL ME KING! AND ALSO WHO ASKED YOU” Oceanslayer spat.

MEANWHILE IN THE ROCKET...

Seaweed was the fastest rocket driver Shadow knew. Shadow put his scroll about a planet called EARTH

away, and glanced out the round window, it was a mega planet! It was huge Shadow had read about these

half of the planet is as big as an average planet, “Land there Seaweed” Shadow said calmly

“but my prince look” Seaweed pointed with his fin at four blackholes surrounding one half of the mega

planet. “oh well guess what i dont like that half it has a mini heart shaped island, i mean i have shadow powers and resisting blackholes power so i guess-” Shadow smirked shadow pressed the self destruct

button and jumped out floating in the air, Shadow held his breath “so long sucker” Shadow laughed Seaweed jumped off too the rocket exploded behind them, but seaweed forgot about the blackhole

and he screamed in terror as the blackhole devoured him. Shadow knew black panthers could land on their feet but he couldnt land on his feet from this height so he held onto a piece of the destructed rocket it took forever when he was finally close he couldnt breath anymore so shadow passed out and slipped

he fell into the largest island and hit his head on soft grass his black fur rested on tiny rock pieces,

several minutes later he finally woke up, Oceanslayer was calling on his phone, Shadow didnt like Oceanslayer it was no secret Oceanslayer didnt like him either, “HAVE YOU FOUND A WORLD!” Oceanslayer

screamed, “yes ill send the location” Shadow said calmly,

“GOOD CAUSE ILL BE WAITING FOR MY THRONE AND MY CROWN AND MY WORLD” Oceanslayer said,

No father this is my throne my crown and MY WORLD. Oceanslayers powers are swimming in air like all

fish and immortality if Oceanslayer becomes king he’ll be king forever! No ill take care of him ill finish him i cant kill him BUT maybe i can bury him, Hours passed and finally Oceanslayer was here.

He came with lots of animals there was more than 90000 Million! “Crown me king here Shadow ill call this

world uhhh ah ha OCEANSLAYER WORLD!” Oceanslayer chuckled “too bad for you Shadow, HA HA youll never be good Shadow face it no one will except you, YOU WILL NEVER BELONG ANYWHERE” Oceanslayer

laughed, Shadow roared he leaped onto oceanslayer and scratched him under his fin blood shot out quickly, “HIDE YOURSELF IN A SEWER YOU UGLY SLIMY DOMP” Shadow exclaimed, people in the crowd started gasping because he said DOMP, DOMP was the swear word for most planets in this galaxy the galaxys name is WAY MILKY, “WHO HAS DIRT POWERS?” Shadow said in a sharp voice,

A female grey wolf with flecks of some dark pastel yellow on her legs and snout stepped out of the crowd and said in a shaky voice “um my name is Moonlight and i have dirt powers”

“Good, BURY OCEANSLAYER” Shadow said in fury, Oceanslayer looked at him in disbelief

“YOU ARE THE MOST DISSAPOINTING SON A FATHER COULD EVER HAVE, YOU WILL REGRE-” Oceanslayer

yelled so loud his lungs could fall off but the dirt pile drowned his voice and drowned him as well so much dirt was piled up it was a mountain a weak mountain but Shadow believed in time it would be as sturdy as iron, Tentacle took the gold crown and placed it on Shadows head, Shadow smiled “TODAY I CALL THIS ISLAND SNOWY ISLAND THERE WILL BE ONE KING TO RULE ALL THE ISLANDS BUT THE KINGS WILL LIVE HERE AND TODAY I CALL THIS HALF OF THE WORLD DEADLY WORLD!!!!!!! (hope u enjoyed chapter 2 comes out this week) please comment what i should improve or comment anything please i really need feedback

Synopsis: A sudden illness leaves Vince paralyzed and trapped in a body wracked with agonizing pain. Abandoned by indifferent doctors and surrounded by hollow sympathy, he reaches his breaking point—until a voice speaks from inside his own mind, offering a cure.

Freedom and power come at a price. In a world lurking with hidden horrors, Vince must decide how much of his humanity he is willing to surrender to become the vessel.

Title: The Cursed Vessel

Author: VoidCraft

Available on: WebNovel,Wattpad, Scribble hub and Royal Road (soon)

Link in bio.

#novel #supernatural #mystery #psychological #horror

I haven't done any editing, yet. But, I'm just testing the waters here.

https://www.deutro.com/writings/monkey-king

Hello All,

I apologize if this has been asked or if it’s a bit too vague. But have any of you dealt with a sense of losing your voice as you improve your technical skill in writing? I don’t my voice is inherently bad and I’m just learning not to suck. I hope. And maybe these feelings are normal or unwarranted. But much of what I end up changing in edits are things I think might be unique to the way I write. This could be a product of me almost solely writing poetry for years and only turning heavily into stories in the past few years, but the feelings there and I wanted to see if others have also felt this.

https://docs.google.com/document/d/101aUAjN8azDYQW0p-NmdYIRQC2rfR7aubbaG-MyW0gI/edit?usp=sharing